User talk:Zbaraceros/sandbox

Lynsey's Peer Review
1.	First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?

The introduction to the article is fantastic because it briefly summarizes her accomplishments without being lengthy. The subsections are also separated very nicely in chronological order it seems, and I think that really helps the article to flow.

2.	What changes would you suggest the author(s) apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?

Although the content is great, I think that the subsections are somewhat unbalanced with a lot of emphasis placed on her research but very little information on her early life and education. It seems as though her main accomplishment was the cloning of HIV, so it might make the subsections similar in length if that one aspect of her research was separated from the other research topics with it's own subsection.

3.	What's the most important thing the author(s) could do to improve the article?

Personally, I would change the subsection heading “rewards” to “awards” because that is the terminology that I have seen most frequently while viewing other Wikipedia articles. Additionally, I would separate her HIV cloning research from the other research topics in an attempt to equalize the lengths of the subsections.

4.	Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!

I did not notice anything directly related to my article about Lila Wallis other than the fact that both women seem to be extremely successful and influential within the STEM fields, and have both received many awards and recognition for their accomplishments.

Lnmorton (talk) 23:52, 5 November 2018 (UTC)

Thank You for your feedback! I completely agree with everything you said. I'm still working on the length of all the sections so everything can be somewhat balanced. I really like the idea of separating her HIV cloning research from the other research since that was her main accomplishment. I also changed "Rewards" to "Awards" since it does seem more appropriate. Zbaraceros (talk) 18:31, 13 November 2018 (UTC)

Since, HIV Cloning was her biggest accomplishment and what she is most known for I decided to add a separate HIV cloning section. This also reduces the length of her search heading which makes it more easier to read. This also balances the lengths of the headings. --Zbaraceros (talk) 23:08, 29 November 2018 (UTC)