User talk:Zcrow16/sandbox

Hi Zoey,

You've collected a lot of great information so far for your Wiki article, but I think it may be better presented as a chart or list (since most of it's statistical) at the beginning of the section. It will make the information easier to find and not draw it out so much by writing out the same type of information for every year; it's also not ideal to have all your information come from only one source. Perhaps you can add it some more information about the types of characters on represented in television and film with a few specific examples of characters/shows/films that got a lot of media/press (Will and Grace comes immediately to mind as an earlier precursor, but there are many other options). If you talk about a few notable cases and how they were received by audiences and/or the press, that would add a little more heft to the article.

Adovevie (talk) 15:53, 13 March 2017 (UTC)

Sejone13 (talk) 05:51, 14 March 2017 (UTC)Hi Zoey, I really like what you've got started for your article. One of the biggest critiques that I have is that all of your information comes from one source. This can get into a grey area where your information might be considered as directly copied and pasted, or even plagiarized. If possible, maybe google the statistics that you present, and see if you can find additional sources other than GLAAD itself. Additionally, I think that you would benefit from presenting your information in categories instead of in chronological order. For example, maybe post about bisexual representation, transgender representation, etc. as separate subsections rather that giving both of those pieces of information on a timeline. Also, adding some shows that have historically been recognized for their portrayal of LGBT characters would also be a great addition to the page. Perhaps shows like "The L Word", "Orange is the New Black", etc. This could also help to maybe add a critique of LGBT representation as well, because other sources will give critiques over ideas we discussed in class like the burden of representation and other issues I have read about concerning the media representation of LGBT people, like homonormativity. (A good example of this is only showing white, upper class homosexual couples.) Other than that, I think it is a very good rough draft and you covered a lot of information and added a lot to your page. Well done!