User talk:Zipity11/Alternative Sandbox

Hi Zipity11. Congratulations on your draft article Bedrock Gardens. The Gardens are clearly a beautiful place and your article conveys that sentiment. Many new articles lack appropriate citations by which the information can be verified, but your draft contains adequate citations. As you have discovered, one of the advantages of a personal sandbox is that you can develop a new article, or major re-work, at your convenience, progressively adding new material, references and citations, without being interrupted by others.

The only comments I can make are editorial:

1. Area is quoted as 20 and 35 acres. It would be good if this was also quoted in hectares.

2. The expression circa 1740 farm house is a little clumsy. Something like the farm house, built circa 1740, ... might be better.

3. You have a sentence which ends initially managed as a tree farm. If the tree farm came before the trail system and  other improvements it would be better to preserve the chronological order and show that initially it was managed as a tree farm, and then other improvements were made. If the tree farm did not come before the trail system and other improvements, the word initial should be omitted.

4. You have a clause: work started on its multiple perennial and shrub beds. Earlier in the same sentence the word was is used, so it should be work was started on its ...

5. The expression Many of the over one thousand different plant species ... is a little clumsy. Something like ''The Gardens contain over one thousand different plant species. Many of them are planted in ...'' might be better.

6. You have a sub-heading Sculpture related. The two words should be separated by a hyphen. (The other two-word sub-headings are correct without hyphens.)

Best regards! Dolphin51 (talk) 01:43, 20 March 2009 (UTC)