User talk:Zipporahm/sandbox

It was hard for me to give feedback because I didn't know what was your addition versus the original piece on Wikipedia. You should bold your work so that the people giving you feedback know what part to focus on. Also, you might want to change the way her birthday is written. Instead of 18 May 1956, maybe May 18, 1956, would flow better? Also, Black should be capitalized. Lastly, the first sentence in Early life does not flow with the rest of that section. I once you fix those few things this will be great! Drwbookman (talk) 02:28, 20 April 2020 (UTC)Drwbookman