User talk:Zksoofi

Welcome!
Hello, Zksoofi, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

I hope you enjoy editing here. If you haven't already done so, please check out the student training library, which introduces you to editing and Wikipedia's core principles. You may also want to check out the Teahouse, a community of Wikipedia editors dedicated to helping new users. Below are some resources to help you get started editing. If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 01:48, 25 October 2022 (UTC)

Page moves
Please do not move pages to a non-existent user's userpage. Doing so automatically qualifies the page for U2 as the user does not exist. In the future just use your sandbox. ― Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#6545 23:57, 22 November 2022 (UTC)


 * Pinging so you are aware. I don't see how this would be appropriate at all. I don't care that it's WikiEd, students should not be moving their sandboxes to userpages for non-existent users. ― Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#6545 23:58, 22 November 2022 (UTC)
 * I have moved the page back to User:Zksoofi/new sandbox so the user's content isn't lost. Uhai (talk) 23:59, 22 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Ah, thank you. I'm not sure how to make the page Live as its own article without making it a User article. My mistake, attempting to do it correctly now. Zksoofi (talk) 13:14, 23 November 2022 (UTC)

Article scope
Nice start on your draft, but it still needs work on scope, tone and overall article layout. Have a look at pages 7-9 in the Editing Wikipedia brochure for more information on layout, especially creating an article lead.

In terms of tone, you should try to steer clear of phrasing like a rich history of mental health advancements. "Rich" isn't the most neutral term here, and it's the kind of metaphorical language that might challenge some readers. "Extensive", for example, says the same thing in simpler, more prosaic terms.

The other issue that jumped out at me as language like particularly in the West and fastest growing religion in the USA. The vast majority of the world's billion Muslims do not live in the United States or Western Europe. If you're going to write about Islam and mental health, you shouldn't focus overwhelmingly on the minority of Muslims who live in these countries. You should also be careful about how you use "the West"; while it's most commonly used to refer to Western/Central Europe and the "white" ex-colonies, that definition is by no means fixed, and sometimes includes the civilisations that developed from Egyptian/Mesopotamian origins. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:23, 23 November 2022 (UTC)