User talk:Zmattingly/sandbox

Nuniw18 Peer Review
Hi! This is a great article. I really like how clear and concise your language is. You state the facts without creating assumptions in your writing.

Lead: This looks great. Concise and provides a clear definition.

Article: The article section is organized well and provides a lot of useful information. Maybe you could integrate pictures/diagrams into the section if possible. It may be helpful to readers to see a visual representation of the topics you are explaining. Also, I noticed that some words are bolded. How did you pick which ones would be bolded and why? I like how you integrated links throughout your writing. Perhaps the bolded words can link to other pages as well.

References: Your references look good! They all seem to be official and reputable.

New article: You've done a really good job starting from scratch and getting this article off the ground. As a reader I appreciate the background you've provided. Maybe you could create a section exploring the health impacts of exertion. For example, health exertion vs overexertion.

Great job on your article! I love the level of detail.

Wiki suggestions
I hope I'm putting this in the right spot, I'm still not that good at navigating Wiki. Overall I liked that you did with your article. You did a really good job with your wording and materials. I also liked your organization layout. It is practical and informative. This is what I noticed that could be improved though:

- I think you should add a citation into original definition of Exertion that you have, so that we know where you are pulling this information. - Edit “Exertion is often results in force generated,…” to “Exertion often results in the force generated,…”

- Link cardiovascular, and if can cardiovascular stress together.

- I like the idea of bolding the words for emphasis, or to highlight key terms that relate, but I don’t think the terms selected in the physiological section do a good job at doing that.

This should make your article even stronger than already! Good Job! --Kamori25 (talk) 01:44, 19 June 2018 (UTC)