User talk:Zoem9/sandbox

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Nice start on your draft. Some things you could improve. I moved your content to the sandbox itself - talk pages aren't good places to draft work, because the visual editor isn't available on talk pages. Because of that, you lose access to a whole lot of useful tools that come with it (most importantly, the Cite tool).
 * The sources you used aren't ideal for medical content on Wikipedia
 * WHO and FPNTC are probably fine, but they aren't scholarly sources. If you have access to better sources, you should consider using them.
 * Wikipedia articles are never reliable sources for content on Wikipedia.
 * It's better to use full references rather than URLs. URLs tend to suffer link rot, which reduces their long-term value.
 * You should link terminology that the average reader might be unfamiliar with, so that they can learn more.
 * Most people don't read beyond the first sentence or two of a section, so it's best to ensure that they come away with as much information as possible. The first two sentences in your draft don't give the reader much concrete information. Try to get your take-home message in the first couple sentences. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:08, 29 August 2019 (UTC)