User talk:Zoulogy/sandbox

Advice
I think you have done a great job at developing the article more. There are just some things that I think could be improved on. Some of your sentences are really long and kind of hard to follow. I think you should shorten them a little so that they are a little more clear. I do not know if you were planning to do this later or not but do not forget to link some of the main people or ideas to other wikipedia articles. There are also some other formatting things, such as putting the Robert Plot part above the table of contents, but I think they will be fixed once you put this on the actual article. Good Job! Chargerfan12 (talk) 19:11, 5 June 2013 (UTC)