User talk:Zouxueyin/sandbox

Response to Peer Review: Thank you so much for the peer review I found your suggestions helpful! I re-read the the plot section and did find several minor grammar mistakes, which I will edit. I will also try shorten the plot a bit... I initially wrote the plot just as the movie was played out. I will do my best to expand the "Korean War and Displacement" portion under the Theme section by supplementing the movie examples with some historical research about the Korean War and its effects on family and geological displacement.

-- — Preceding unsigned comment added by Zouxueyin (talk • contribs) 17:59, 29 November 2018 (UTC) The draft has made a significant contribution to the existing page as it expands extensively on the "plot" section and adds two new sections to the original article. The plot section is very detail oriented but seems a little long-winded compared to the other sections. There are also some minor grammar mistakes in this section (eg: [the first sentence of the third paragraph]On the his journey to his wife’s hometown,). I personally like the "Theme" section a lot as I am kind of confused by the purpose of the film after reading the plot, but the explanation on "Korean War and Displacement" helps me understand the background and the film a lot better. I think expanding more on the "Theme" section, and especially on "Korean War and Displacement" would make the article more thorough as a whole.