User talk:Zugzwang24/Male gaze

feedback
Hello Zugzwang24,

You did a good job with your additional paragraph. One thing to look out for, the information given might be received as a personal belief rather than known facts, I'm not too sure how others will perceive the tone of the paragraph.

Additionally, for the last three facts, I'd get rid of the "that of" before each statement so it will be easier to read. Overall, the paragraph was engaging and fit the male gaze article. MZGomez (talk) 05:26, 17 October 2022 (UTC)