User talk:ZuriShaw/sandbox

Zuri Shaw Peer Review
This is a really good rough draft. I was a little confused at first since there are 2 sections of the same information but I realized that is the "lead section" you added. Make sure you proofread your work. There are few mistakes for example in the last sentence you can take the word "had" out so that it reads: " The lack of job opportunities and treatment for drug addicts result in relapses and the search for a better life through the jail system." Overall this was a great rough draft.

Zuri Shaw Peer Review
I think your article and rough draft is very good. The information you provided is very valid. I think you could do a slight proof read over the article to correct any grammar errors. I also think you could add more examples such as different laws or court cases to explain your point more in depth. Overall the article has good content and factual sources and examples to further explain and address its main points. (ClutzenbClutzenb (talk) 13:51, 2 November 2018 (UTC))

Peer Review
I like your topic a lot because ymany Americans especially turn their noses up at drug addicts as people who don’t act human so they may not associate them with human rights. I was confused at first when your work started over but I assume that was a computer glitch of some sort. I also think you should add maybe some research, a study that someone conducted, on this topic to back up what you are saying. But your base information that you have here is very well written. Amayamitchell09 (talk) 01:58, 3 November 2018 (UTC)