User talk:Zwdy/L'Ambroisie

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Zwdy/L%27Ambroisie/Carochen215_Peer_Review Carochen215 (talk) 23:16, 31 January 2020 (UTC)

Well done!I think the structure of this article is very clear and the content are valid. It can be improved to add more details and more content under each section. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Zwdy/L%27Ambroisie/VANESSAzyy_Peer_ReviewVANESSAzyy (talk) 05:51, 1 February 2020 (UTC)

Review
I took a look at these changes you made to the article and noticed a few things you'll want to fix before you move it over:


 * The writing, style, and language is still kind of rough. The final section of text ends without a period. There are typos and English errors throughout, etc.
 * You haven't actually added any new references. We were expecting that you would.
 * The history section is just a bulleted list, not narrative text as would be expected.
 * If you look at L'Ambroisie you'll see that the normal Wikipedia article has changed and new material has been added including an infobox, several citations to Japanese sources. You'll want to make sure that all of these changes are integrated back into your article before you move things over.

Please ping me again on Wikipedia once you're done making these changes and I'll check again. Thanks! — m a k o ๛  19:46, 11 February 2020 (UTC)