User talk:Zzwecker/sandbox

Looks good overall. Give a read through for grammar

Early life and education: 1st sentence - omit "of"

Career and research second sentence - change "her" to "she" fourth sentence change "love" to "long" term research... 8th sentence "Clements findings support this theory in that as climate" could just be "Clements findings support the theory that as..." consider hyperlinking el nino southern oscillation

Significant publications - consider adding the article titles along with the link. also maybe add a few more.

Do you have a photo?

It seems to me that you did a really good job of concisely summarizing her research.

O dunn (talk) 16:34, 9 November 2018 (UTC)

You need a one or two sentence blurb at the top under her name (summary) -- see other bios for examples Also add an info box

First sentence is actually the start of the blurb above that you need to write. Then start this section with Clement was born... B.A should be B.A. ; PH.D should be Ph.D.

her current life should not be in "early life and education" Career and Research 2nd sentence - change "Her" to She she is not hoping to create a global climate model she wants to improve them. you use the word "currently" a lot I would condense the description of her research You can hyperlink some of the science topics The content in this section is good you just need to work on sentence structure

Awards & Honors Clement became a Fellow (you aren't awarded a Fellow) again content is great, just work on sentence structure and punctuation

Other interests I think it would be better to say - when she is not consumed in her research Clement finds time to practice her surfing...

Overall nice job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Waterbarnes (talk • contribs) 21:41, 10 November 2018 (UTC)