Wikipedia:Cleanup Taskforce/Competition

Competition
This article needs a rewrite for style, content and coherence; it has been criticized for POV; there is but cursory information under some of the subheadings.


 * Has the anon IP assigned this task to anyone? If not, I'd be happy to take it on. :) Flcelloguy [[Image:Bass clef2.gif|25px|Cello today?]] Give me a note! Eighth note (crop).gif Desk  14:21, 17 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * That is certainly fine by me. Transcluding to your desk now.  Randy Johnston 19:25, 17 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * Thanks. Oh, BTW, not quite done with the article yet- taking a breather for today (I've done some major rewriting/cleanup already...) :) Flcelloguy | Give me a note! | Desk 00:32, 19 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * Closed. Cleanup complete. Flcelloguy | A note? | Desk 23:25, 20 Jun 2005 (UTC)

- 8/29/07: writing is poor:  e.g.  "The second is to really be universal, pretty broad and think about one's self and kind of not doing the right thing or to do some thing dangerously. It is a term that is commonly used in numerous fields, including business, economics, law, politics, ecology, music, and sports but there are many other possibilties also, for example a game show."

"To really be" is a split infinitive. Alternatives: ""The second, really, is to be universal" or "The second is to be really universal" or "The second is really to be universal."

That said, the sentence is colloquial or slang in tone and really does not say anything substantively. "Kind of not doing" is slang or informal and poorly written. "To do the same thing dangerously" is unclear and almost nonsensical. To do what "thing?" What is the writer trying to say? How is this a definition of competiton>