Wikipedia:Editor review/Focus Int

Focus Int
This is my fitst contribution to WIki and as a novice I would like some feedback on howhow to improve my first article Focus Int (talk) 11:09, 11 October 2010 (UTC)

 Questions


 * 1) What are your primary contributions to Wikipedia? Are there any about which you are particularly pleased? Why?
 * The Premier Training International page
 * 1) Have you been in editing disputes or do you feel other users have caused you stress? How have you dealt with it and how will you deal with it in the future? If you have never been in an editing dispute, explain how you would respond to one.
 * As this is my first contribution I dont have any additional articles 2
 * As this is my first contribution I dont have any additional articles 2

 Reviews 
 * This is not an editor review request - you are really looking for "Requests for feedback" which deals with feedback for articles. In order for us to do a realistic editor review, you really need a few hundred edits so we can see how you edit! However, here is a mini-feedback (after a very quick look!) on the article you wrote at Premier Training International:
 * None of the provided references were suitable - the first is merely a link to vacancies at the company; the remaining ones did not mention PTI at all
 * It is written in non-neutral language, like promotion: Premier Training International is a leading provider of vocational education within the Health and Fitness Industry, is a leading health and fitness training provider in the United Kingdom, has some of the strongest sports scientists and industry experts helping shape syllabuses and training delivery, etc
 * I can't see how the company meets Wikipedia's notability guidelines for companies or the general notability guidelines
 * Regards, --  Phantom Steve / talk &#124; contribs \ 11:40, 11 October 2010 (UTC)