Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/2010–11 Temple Owls men's basketball team/archive1


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by SandyGeorgia 12:05, 18 August 2011.

2010–11 Temple Owls men's basketball team

 * Nominator(s): ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 01:40, 8 August 2011 (UTC)

I am nominating this for featured article because I ran it through peer review and I think it meets the criteria. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 01:40, 8 August 2011 (UTC)

Oppose - I appreciate the work that's been done on this article but I don't feel it currently meets the FA criteria. Here are some specific concerns: Oppose – Originally was just going to check the source reliability, and that looked fine. I then decided to peek at part of the article, and unfortunately ran into the unencyclopedic tone mentioned above. I'll give some examples, which I believe cause this to not meet the criteria at this time... All of these resemble the sports recaps that I read every day. While I enjoy reading them, articles on Wikipedia that imitate them just come across as informal, and that's what's happening here.  Giants2008  ( 27 and counting ) 00:28, 14 August 2011 (UTC)
 * WP:MOS issues: "%" should be spelled out in article text, hyphen/dash issues, etc
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 21:43, 9 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Maintain an encyclopedic tone at all times - avoid constructions like "Temple fell to the Blue Devils 78-61, as Kyle Singler broke out of a shooting slump to score 28 points for Duke. Lavoy Allen's 17 points and 13 rebounds were not enough to stop a second half Duke run that blew the game open"
 * See below. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 03:30, 15 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Reference formatting needs to be more consistent
 * I fail to see the inconsistancy. Please show me. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 03:30, 15 August 2011 (UTC)
 * FUR for the logo needs expanding
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 20:26, 17 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Given the length of the article, the lead should be at least 3 paragraphs per WP:LEAD
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 21:38, 17 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Don't use characters like "&" in section headings. Nikkimaria (talk) 14:57, 8 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 21:57, 17 August 2011 (UTC)
 * "Despite losing by 15 at the half, Maryland staged a huge comeback...".
 * "but his backcourt mates Corey Stokes and Maalik Wayns lit up the scoreboard...".
 * "Fernandez also missed the January 12 matchup against St. Bonaventure, but the Owls destroyed the Bonnies nonetheless".
 * "The Owls blew the game open with a 16–0 run in the second half and shot 56 percent on the game."
 * "The Owls creamed La Salle 96–76".
 * "Juan Fernandez had a miserable shooting night, going 3 for 17."
 * "Aztec star Kawhi Leonard stole the ball from Khalif Wyatt and his uncontested dunk proved to be the dagger."
 * Just wondering how I can keep the prose fresh, without simple "Allen scored 16 points. Moore scored 15 points. Temple won, 73-57." That stuff is boring, yo. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 03:30, 15 August 2011 (UTC)


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