Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/2015 Pan American Games opening ceremony/archive1


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The article was archived by Graham Beards via FACBot (talk) 08:36, 5 February 2016.

2015 Pan American Games opening ceremony

 * Nominator(s): Sportsfan 1234 (talk) 20:25, 10 January 2016 (UTC)

This article is about the opening ceremony of the 2015 Pan American Games, the largest multi-sporting event held in Canada.Sportsfan 1234 (talk) 20:25, 10 January 2016 (UTC)

Tony1
Lead:
 * 1) took place -> was
 * 2) "The opening ceremony" twice. -> "The event"
 * 3) "The opening ceremony was produced and directed by Cirque du Soleil.[2] The production was the largest event produced by the company ever, and cost approximately $30 million CAD to produce."—>The even was the largest ever to have been produced and directed by Cirque du Soleil,[2] and cost some C$30M."
 * 4) Having cited C$, we'll assume the subsequent $ are Canadian.
 * 5) "It was later announced in January 2015 that tickets to the ceremony were sold out.[7]"—"Tickets were sold out later in January.[7]"

The writing in the lead doesn't give confidence. Lead is rather short. The article looks too much like an annotated pic gallery. Tony  (talk)  05:48, 2 February 2016 (UTC)

Ian Rose
Oppose, suggest withdrawal for copyediting and restructuring. Fully agree with Tony's concerns, the article appears very choppy owing to the many short sections/subsections coupled with an over-supply of images. Also I couldn't see where any of the content under Dignitaries and other officials in attendance was cited. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 07:28, 5 February 2016 (UTC)

Graham Beards (talk) 08:36, 5 February 2016 (UTC)
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