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2022 Masters (snooker)

 * Nominator(s): User:HurricaneHiggins,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:07, 15 September 2022 (UTC)

This article is about the 2022 edition of the Masters (snooker). A fantastic event, looking forward to your feedback!  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:07, 15 September 2022 (UTC)

Comments Support from Henni147
Followed this tournament closely myself on TV, so I'm familiar with the topic and would like to contribute to this FAC review.
 * Structure: logical and uniform with other tournament articles. Pass.
 * Tournament ladder: properly formatted and sourced. Haven't checked MOS:ACCESS for screenreaders yet, but since it's the same template as in other articles that have passed the FAC review already, it's probably fine.
 * Final table: properly formatted and sourced, and seems to satisfy MOS:DTT as well. Pass.
 * Century break section: properly sourced and formatting uniform with other tournament articles. Pass.
 * Footnote: I wondered if 26 century breaks are a lot or rather average for recent Masters tournaments. If the information is available, it might be useful to add the century record of the event until then, and by how much it was missed in the 2022 edition.
 * I feel like it's overkill. The amounts go up year on year.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:16, 22 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Images: copyright status looks fine for all.
 * Tournament logo needs alt-text and caption.
 * QF and Final images need full stop in the caption.
 * Done both  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:16, 22 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Referencing: inline citations and sources consistently formatted arcoss the page. Pass.
 * Copyright: quick run with Earwig's Copyvio Detector shows no serious violations. Need to check citation of direct quotes, but looks good overall.

Linking:
 * Lead:
 * Maybe insert a link from "world rankings" to Snooker world ranking points 2021/2022, so that readers can find out how the full rankings looked like, when the cut-off was made.
 * Good idea.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:16, 22 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Overview:
 * "best-off-11 frames" → maybe link from "best-off" to Playoff format for readers who are not familiar with this match format.
 * Dene  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:16, 22 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "Superstars Online" → change to "the mobile app Superstar Online", and if there is a Chinese version of the article, use the Template:Interlanguage link. Also, you may check inline-citation [14], it doesn't load for me. However, the required information are covered by [13] already, so you may just drop [14].
 * That's not actually covered by the source that just says it's broadcast there - I don't know enough about the product to say whether you can view it outside of the app. I've not seen a Chinese version of the article, or I would have ILL'ed it.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:16, 22 September 2022 (UTC)
 * First round:
 * "[...] as he bridged over the pack with the rest." → Link "pack" here or be more explanatory in wording like "pack of reds". Casual readers may not know what it means.
 * Done  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:16, 22 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "In the decider, Bingham missed a pot on the pink ball" → I think, you can remove the link from "pot" here. It's been added in the first paragraph of the section already.
 * Done  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:16, 22 September 2022 (UTC)

Content and wording: In general, the prose part is nicely written. Especially the summary section is very informative, rich in variety, and phrased as reader-friendly as a tournament summary can be. Very well done.
 * Lead:
 * Remove The from "The 16 competitors were invited [...]". The players weren't mentioned in the lead previously.
 * Done  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:37, 23 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "cutoff date" → missing hyphen in "cut-off date" in accordance with Collins Dictionary. Same issue in "Participants" section.
 * "Ding Junhui, who had made 15 consecutive Masters appearances [...]" → This is rather a matter of taste, but I would flip the sub-clauses in order to make them more compact and vary the wording of the paragraph a bit: "Ding Junhui, who dropped to 27th place in the rankings, missed the Masters after 15 consecutive appearances between 2007 and 2021. The only debutant in 2022 was Zhao Xintong, who entered the top 16 for the first time by winning the UK Championship." A similar re-phrasing might brush up the quality of the "Participants" section as well.
 * Yeah, I think I prefer categorising that Ding was previously in the tournament (thus why we should care) and then state why he wasn't competing. I realise we could say that Xintong had entered the first time at the UK was the only debutant, but I feel that "there was just one debutant" is the important part.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:37, 23 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Overview:
 * "[...], which were the best of 19 frames played over two sessions." → missing hyphens in "best-of-19". Same issue in the summary sub-sections. Personally, I would also remove "the" for nicer wording, but if that's the convention for snooker articles, it can stay.
 * Done  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:37, 23 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "The event was simulcast in Hong Kong [...]" → change "The event" to "It" to reduce repetition in the paragraph.
 * Done  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:37, 23 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Participants:
 * "[...] who were ranked highest in the world rankings after the UK Championship in December 2021." → maybe note the exact cut-off date instead of December 2021.
 * There isn't an exact cutoff date realistically - it's just based on what the scores were after that event concluded. For instance, people were being "confirmed" before the UK even started.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:37, 23 September 2022 (UTC)
 * First round:
 * "That evening, the 2012 champion Neil Robertson, who had lost in the first round in his last two Masters appearances" → change "That evening" to "In the evening session" and "in" to "of" to reduce repetition.
 * Done  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:37, 23 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "After Higgins made a century break in the first frame [...]" → "had made" (?) I'm no grammar expert, but since the events in the sub-clauses precede the events in the main clauses, my guess is that it has to be past perfect tense here. This issue occurs in multiple sentences.
 * I have no idea what this means, but I can change this word.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:37, 23 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "On the next afternoon" → maybe skip "on" here.
 * done  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:37, 23 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "Selby won the 45-minute opening frame and the players traded frames" → Not sure, but since the subject of the two main clauses changes, there might need to be placed a comma before "and" here.
 * Sure.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:37, 23 September 2022 (UTC)
 * "Allen won a scrappy tenth frame" → The term "scrappy" may be too judgemental for an encyclopedic entry and borderline violate WP:Voice. Better use something more neutral like "hard-fought" or "error-filled".
 * I agree.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:37, 23 September 2022 (UTC)

That's it from me so far. I will continue with the QF section, when the article has been updated. The article looks very promising overall, and with the few issues being fixed, I will give my support. Good job. Henni147 (talk) 10:33, 19 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Looks fair. I'll make necessary changes today.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 07:19, 22 September 2022 (UTC)
 * I've worked my way through the above - fantastic work, some great suggestions.  Lee Vilenski  (talk • contribs) 11:37, 23 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Great. I agree with your comments above, so feel free to keep those parts as they are. I can take a look at the remaining prose sections now and give some comments about content and linking as above. Henni147 (talk) 13:39, 23 September 2022 (UTC)

More comments from Henni147:
 * Quarter-finals:
 * According to MOS:EMDASH there should be no spacing around em dashes. Also, MOS:SPARETHEDASH says that there should better be a max of two dashes per sentence to keep the structure clear. My suggestion is: "The quarter-finalists comprised six former champions with O'Sullivan, Williams, Higgins, Robertson, Trump and Selby,[49] and two former runners-up—Hawkins, who lost to O'Sullivan in 2016, [...]"
 * Maybe also add "comprised six former Masters champions" to make clear what kind of champions we're talking about.
 * "Robertson noted the difficulty of competing at the Masters against O'Sullivan, commenting" → add a colon after "commenting".
 * General:
 * This is a matter of taste, but I prefer to call players with their full name at their first mentioning in each round. As a long-time snooker follower I am familiar with the players, but casual readers may not, so it might be helpful to read their full name once per section (especially with family names like Wilson, which multiple players share).
 * According to MOS:LINKONCE, links should ideally be inserted at their first occurance in the article body. So you may remove the links from "red ball" in the QF section as well as "snooker" in the SF section, and link them at their first appearance in the second to last paragraph of the first round: "[...], as Trump required a snooker with one red remaining. However, Allen failed to escape from a snooker and went in-off, [...]"

Yeah, that's actually it. I really liked to read the second part of the prose. The direct quotes were nicely selected and the "Final" section was very informative. Didn't realize that Hawkins had lost all his Triple Crown finals until now. I give my support for FAC now. Great job! Henni147 (talk) 15:14, 23 September 2022 (UTC)

Coordinator comment - over three weeks in with only a single support. This one's liabile to be archived in a couple days without substantial movement towards a consensus to promote. Hog Farm Talk 21:23, 9 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Working on it.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:28, 9 October 2022 (UTC)

Support from Olivaw-Daneel
Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 10:59, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
 * "The participants were invited to the tournament based on the world rankings" - I think there's an MOS:EGG issue with the wikilink here: one possible fix is to extend the link to include "the" (the world rankings).
 * Done  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:11, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
 * "Matches were played as the best-of-11 frames until the final, which were the best-of-19 frames played over two sessions." - shouldn't "which were" be "which was", to match the singular final? Or perhaps "which switched to" might work better.
 * I prefer "which were" just to be consistent with other events where the frames per match change more often.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:11, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Just for posterity: I saw you'd changed it to "which was", so I assume that's what you meant to type in this reply... Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 08:36, 11 October 2022 (UTC)
 * "The event featured the 16 players who were ranked highest in the world rankings after the UK Championship in December 2021." - could trim a redundancy by removing the word "rankings".
 * Reworded to "placed highest".  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:11, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
 * "surpassing both Jimmy White and Steve Davis, who played at the Masters 27 times" - I think it should be "who had played".
 * Indeed. Changed.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:11, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
 * I see a couple of "BBC"s and many "BBC Sports" in the references - shouldn't they be made consistent to one of the two options? (both kinds of refs seem to link to the BBC Sport website)
 * I could only find two, but I've changed them.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:18, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
 * There was still an italic vs upright inconsistency that I tried fixing myself (feel free to change it to all upright if that's what you intended). Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 05:26, 11 October 2022 (UTC)
 * I think the table in the "Final" section needs a caption per MOS:DTAB. You could use this wikitext to generate a caption that is visible only to screen-readers:
 * Added.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:11, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
 * The lead seems to be a bit more about the pre-tournament events than the tournament itself; can anything interesting from Section 2 be included?
 * All seems very fair. I'll take a better look later. Thanks for the review. I will say I usually try and stay away from talking about things that happen at the event (in terms of victories and such) unless they are particularly notable. I get we can state who the winner defeated to reach the final, but when I've done that it always feels like puff.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:56, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
 * I've made some changes above - did you have any more thoughts for me? :)  Lee Vilenski  (talk • contribs) 20:20, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
 * No, that's all I had (+ a note above). And I guess if there's nothing else notable to say about the event, the lead is ok. Olivaw-Daneel (talk) 05:26, 11 October 2022 (UTC)

Comments from BennyOnTheLoose

 * I looked at three of the BBC sources and all were missing authors in the citations, and some, e.g. "O'Sullivan outclasses Lisowski at Masters" have different titles on the archived copies, presumably as they were updated. (That one has yet another different title on the live copy). I'd suggest checking the BBC refs through.
 * I've gone through all of them, updated titles, dates and authors for all BBC refs.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 07:07, 14 October 2022 (UTC)
 * I checked two of the eurosport.co.uk reference archive links and both go to geoblocking notices. Probably better to remove those links. The eurosport.com archive links I checked didn't have this issue.
 * Yeah, it's a thing with IABot I'd forgotten about. Removed  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 06:57, 14 October 2022 (UTC)
 * I amended the Snooker Scene refs as I prefer them displaying without things like "No. February 2022", but feel free to revert that.
 * Cheers  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 06:57, 14 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Lead: "Some players took issue with the cut-off date" - if it's only the two mentioned in the body, maybe specify them. Also, perhaps mention in the lead and body that the Scottish Open was in December?
 * They were examples. There were more. I've added the month in the lede, but the body says "three weeks after", which gives a good timeline of events.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 06:57, 14 October 2022 (UTC)
 * "Safety battle" doesn't have a cue sports glossary link. Also, it appears in the text before the attempted link.
 * Done  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 06:57, 14 October 2022 (UTC)
 * ""UK Championship final". UK Championship. Event occurs at 9:15. BBC One" - looks like an incomplete reference, can at least the date be added?
 * Date added.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:39, 16 October 2022 (UTC)
 * "Other players, such as Gary Wilson, praised Selby" - I didn't see any other players mentioned, or an equivalent statement, in the live version of the sources cited.
 * I've changed the words to just say Gary, although I know a few others also said similar.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:53, 16 October 2022 (UTC)
 * I think the caption "(pictured, left in 2015)" could do with a punctuation tweak.
 * Done.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:53, 16 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Support. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:20, 20 October 2022 (UTC)

Image review
File:2022 Cazoo Masters Snooker Tournament Logo.jpg: I have my doubts that a logo this simple would be considered copyrightable in the US, but it's a borderline case. The licence, source and rationale are fine for a non-free logo, though, so it's no big deal. Everything else seems OK. ALT text is OK. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 10:06, 14 October 2022 (UTC)

Source review - spotchecks not done
 * Footnotes 4 and 8 appear to go to the same source URL, although the citation details are different
 * Combined citations  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:53, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
 * FN9 is incomplete. Ditto FN14, please check throughout
 * I have made my way through, every citation should now have publisher/work information.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:23, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Fn21 is missing author. Ditto FN27, please check throughout
 * Find through every citation.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:53, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Still missing 72. Nikkimaria (talk) 13:27, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Added.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:42, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
 * What is the purpose of FN48? Suggest either making this a note, or just having the footnotes inline.
 * This is from WP:BUNDLING the citations to avoid WP:CITEKILL. We could have it as a note, but it would be the only note, so I thought it'd be fine as a general reference. Can change if you want.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:06, 23 October 2022 (UTC) Nikkimaria (talk) 03:51, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
 * If you'd rather bundle than have a note that's fine, but bundling is done with the full citations inline, ie "For O'Sullivan, see [full cite]; for this person, see [full cite]" etc, rather than putting a footnote inside a footnote. Nikkimaria (talk) 13:27, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Sure, I've made that change. I've also made it a note instead.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:42, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for taking a look, I've taken a look through all of the above and made the changes. Hopefully I didn't miss any of the authors. Let me know if you have any more items for me to look at on this nomination.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:53, 23 October 2022 (UTC)
 * I think I've covered the bits I missed the first time, let me know if there is anything further, .  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:34, 24 October 2022 (UTC)

Gog the Mild (talk) 11:52, 26 October 2022 (UTC)