Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Alan Watts/archive1

Alan Watts
A great article that fits featured criteria. --Benna 06:35, 7 May 2005 (UTC)
 * Object. Reads like an essay as it is full of opinion and conjecture that starts as soon as the lead section with "he was sensitive to certain new leanings in the West, and was in a position to be a proponent for certain shifts in attitudes regarding society...". What leanings?, how was he sensitive?, how was he in that position?, who says?, etc. There are many more, but another example: "In his mature work, it becomes clear that Watts was not especially committed to the Zen Buddhism with which ...". Citations to external sources could fix that, but it would take some research since the three references listed at the bottom don't appear like they would be of adequate quality to support the facts in the whole article, but I could be wrong. - Taxman 14:14, May 7, 2005 (UTC)
 * Object. Parts read like an essay, as Taxman states above. Parts also read like a biography, sometimes almost like a breathless obituary. Quote: "His was a philosophy informed by the lifeways of Asia, intended to be shared with those people whom modern life had afforded some leisure time they might devote to contemplation, self-development, sensuality, enjoyment of nature, and fun." That lead sentence, on a terribly biased paragraph, seals the deal for me. A lot of cleanup is needed before consideration here. --NightMonkey 19:57, May 10, 2005 (UTC)