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Bernie Ecclestone
A self-nom which I believe is quite comprehensive and well-written. However, I'll gladly accept any advice or suggestions offered. Rdsmith4&mdash; Dan | Talk 18:06, 22 Dec 2004 (UTC) THIS IS A LOAD OF SHIT WE SHUD MAKE A NEW VERSION WITH ACTUAL INFO...HU EVA WROTE THIS IS ABIT STUUUPID. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 81.109.135.153 (talk) 20:39, 21 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Object. I appreciate the hard work that you've put into this, but purely from a style standpoint however, the article needs better prose (too many one sentence paragraphs, that's not good) and the lead section needs expanding. I think the image needs a better caption (should be a full sentence and say something interesting and relevant about the subject). The page should be moved to Bernard Charles "Bernie" Ecclestone because that's what's in bold. The whole article seems a bit short. With the content: all the information about the subject appears to come from online news reports, which though not a totally bad thing, it seems to me that we can get other sources of information. Has he written an autobiography? If so, I'd suggest you get it from your local library and get info from there. There is a book written by a gentleman called Tony Lovell about Mr Eccleston. It's called "Bernie's Game: Inside the Formula One World of Bernie Ecclestone". ISBN 1843580861. See . Perhaps you could borrow this book and get useful info? If you do, be sure to cite it. - Ta bu shi da yu 07:06, 24 Dec 2004 (UTC)
 * In fact I have linked to the book in the external links section. No bookstores or libraries carry it in my part of the world, and while I could order it from Amazon, I felt that the various online articles thoroughly covered his life and business, not to mention I'd rather not spend the money. As for the title, I think there are a great many articles whose bold text does not precisely match their titles, though I have edited the opening paragraph a bit as you suggested. Rdsmith4&mdash; Dan | Talk 07:58, 24 Dec 2004 (UTC)
 * That's cool about the title. It was only a minor point. I just think the article is a bit short and the paragraphs need fixing. - Ta bu shi da yu 14:12, 24 Dec 2004 (UTC)
 * I'm not so sure a page move is required - lots of articles are titled under the normal usage, not the person's full name (e.g. Leonard Cohen) - David Gerard 14:07, 24 Dec 2004 (UTC)