Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Black Sabbath/archive1

Black Sabbath
This is a very influential band and I beleive it should be nominated because it meets all the standards for a Featured Article. --GorillazFanAdam 01:31, 20 March 2006 (UTC)
 * Object Unfortunately there are no references at all leading to weasel words issues and possible POV issues. Bwithh 01:25, 20 March 2006 (UTC)
 * Object, and would recommend a referral to Peer Review The article needs a complete copyedit for grammar, opinions, and the aforementioned weasel words.  An example in the intro, "Even though Judas Priest, Cream, and Deep Purple may have had a profound influence on the emergence of hard rock and heavy metal music, Black Sabbath is generally considered, along with Led Zeppelin, one of the primary forces of the genre. And the founding fathers of heavy metal."  The first sentence is a run-on filled with opinions, the second sentence needs a verb.  References are needed, and sources should be placed for all the POV statements ("This later became known as a hoax, possibly due to the fact that it was the April issue of the magazine and during the shifting lineups of the 1980s, the Kerrang! staff seemed to enjoy poking fun at Black Sabbath as it then existed.") and references to what the band said ("The eventual fate of the set is not clear, although Iommi has said it was probably abandoned on a loading dock somewhere."). --Ataricodfish 02:10, 20 March 2006 (UTC)
 * Object This is a comprehensive article well formatted and obviously reflects a lot of effort. Continue with that effort: you're 90% of the way to FA.  Ataricodfish states things quite well.  This article needs line citations and a copyedit.  Opinion statements in particular need to be sourced.  Bring in some music critics, interviews, and news articles.  I'm making this an object instead of an oppose, but I know how much time it takes to track down adequate sources so my hunch is this article will get to FA on its second try.  Run it through a peer review first to be sure it's ready and keep up the good work. Durova 06:49, 20 March 2006 (UTC)
 * Object, (1) No sources. Example: the first paragraph says "They are cited by many as the very first true heavy metal band." There need to be some citations to verify this. (2) Needs a general copyedit. I found a lot of run-ons and other details that need fixing, ie "They were ranked number 2 in VH1's '100 Greatest Artists of Hard Rock' (Led Zeppelin was number 1)." should be "VH1's '100 Greatest Artists of Hard Rock' ranked them second, behind Led Zeppelin." (3) Needs some cleanup. There are a lot of weasel words (see WP:AWW). There are also some trivial statements. The first sentence reads "Black Sabbath (sometimes called Sabbath by fans)..." Is knowing that they are sometimes called 'Sabbath' really noteworthy? I also noticed that Ozzy Osbourne is referred to as "Ozzy" throughout the article (references should be by surname, not first name).--Fallout boy 07:54, 20 March 2006 (UTC)
 * Object per above, and I second the idea to submit it to Peer Review. - M ask [[Image:Flag_of_Alaska.svg|20 px]] 18:03, 20 March 2006 (UTC)


 * Object due to lack of sources and factual errors. For example, LSD has no effect when taken daily.