Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie/archive2

Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie

 * Nominator(s): Safari Scribe Edits! Talk! 06:39, 6 June 2024 (UTC)

Have you heard of the literary daughter of the foremost Nigerian writer Chinua Achebe. Do you know about the Nigerian Civil War? Or the historical background a a woman who studied bilingually and with writing explore the themes of many origin. Here is an article of a writer, speaker, fashion influencer, and critic. Adichie is a Nigerian who has written many award winning book. I don't need to call them because you already may have known them. This is the second nomination after I had a peer review mentored by SusunW and had great comments from Draken Bowser, Gog, and Reading Beans. I will appreciate Proscribe also and further accept your wonderful review in the FAR. Safari Scribe Edits! Talk! 06:39, 6 June 2024 (UTC)

Comments on sourcing from SusunW
I have never before mentored someone through the FA process, but when the article was nominated the first time, I recommended that it be withdrawn and sent to peer review. SafariScribe and I worked on it for a month, restructuring and expanding the article to include more aspects of her life, including her public speaking and fashion perspectives. During the peer review I looked at every single source and formatted the references for consistency and compliance with MOS guidelines. My goal was two-fold, to confirm that all the material was verified and that it was free of copyvios. My review of each website and literary magazine included evaluation of whether it had an editorial policy and/or editorial board. Because the subject is African, and because several of the critiques mentioned that African sources are often not consulted, I also wanted to ensure that we used a balanced approach covering the global nature of the subject. As she is also living and an iconic figure it should be noted that no formal complete biography of her has been written, but brief biographies that focus mainly on her writing have been included in works such as Contemporary Literary Criticism and the OUP's Dictionary of African Biography. These were supplemented with other sources for comprehensiveness.

The themes, style and critical reception sections rely most heavily on academic sourcing, and particular attention was given to African scholars. It should be noted that Ememyonu's A Companion to Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie and Grace Musila's review of that work, confirm that no comprehensive academic attention has been given to Adichie's public speaking. Where possible, we have tried to use academic works to evaluate these, but many of them had to rely on the principal of "best sources available". The same holds true for analysis of her views and controversy, as well as fashion. As her works are discussed in depth in stand-alone articles, we have given only brief discussion of their overall content in the biography relying instead on how her style and themes are carried out in her works. If the coordinators feel that my analysis of the sourcing is "involved", I completely understand and leave it up to their determination as to whether my analysis of them equates to passing the source review and "spot checks". In my opinion, it passes both. Should discussion be warranted, please ping me. SusunW (talk) 15:20, 6 June 2024 (UTC)


 * Sounds like a source, spot check and plagiarism pass to me. ? Gog the Mild (talk) 21:01, 6 June 2024 (UTC)
 * @Gog the Mild, can @SusunW still do the source review? Safari Scribe Edits! Talk! 14:10, 1 July 2024 (UTC)
 * , Gog said yes, in his opinion and left it to the coordinators. I know it is hard to be patient, but featured articles move slowly. Especially if they are lengthy. I understand your frustration and your desire for the article to be reviewed, but it takes time. I see AirshipJungleman29 has expressed some of the same concerns I did, that perhaps more eyes were needed at peer review or from the Guild of Copyeditors. These are our opinions, others may disagree. Since it is your first nomination, there may be editors who are willing to help you get it over the line. Whether it passes this nomination or not, you have greatly improved the article and that is an achievement. Please don't get discouraged. Try to remain optimistic and celebrate the things you are learning from the process. SusunW (talk) 14:35, 1 July 2024 (UTC)
 * I could perhaps have been clearer. I have, as a FAC coordinator, accepted this as a source, spot check and plagiarism pass. As it is a little non-standard I courtesy pinged my fellow coordinators in case they wished to comment. It seems they don't, so I think the nominator need not worry further about it. Gog the Mild (talk) 15:14, 1 July 2024 (UTC)

Image review

 * Would suggest using a mapframe instead of File:Nigeria-karte-politisch-enugu.png, but if it is kept it needs a source for the data presented


 * File:Mural_ciudad_lineal_(12).jpg: what's the copyright status of the artwork? Nikkimaria (talk) 05:35, 7 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Done: cropped image to map frame and added citation. Safari Scribe Edits! Talk! 14:34, 7 June 2024 (UTC)
 * @User:Nikkimaria, is there any other issue to address? Safari Scribe Edits! Talk! 10:17, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
 * The maker released rights under Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 4.0 International license. It is a mural on the Municipal Sport Center in Concepción barrio of Madrid. The neighborhood voted on the subject matter, who should be included, and defeated a move to replace the mural; definitely a public display. It was commissioned from the art collective Unlogic Crew by the Department of Culture and Sports, and painted by Unlogic's members and people from the neighborhood. Spain's freedom of panorama law allows "Works permanently located in parks or on streets, squares or other public thoroughfares". My interpretation is that it's okay to use because it is on a wall at a public sports park, has been there since painted in 2018, and if you look at the lede image on the Concepción Feminist Mural article, it's displayed on a public thoroughfare. SusunW (talk) 13:57, 7 June 2024 (UTC)
 * SafariScribe, looking at this again, I think I understand what Nikkimaria is asking. The photograph was released, it meets panorama requirements, but do the painters have rights? According to p. 9 section 26 and 28.1 they do, for "for seventy years after the protected work is lawfully made available to the public". There are two ways to allow it's use, obtain permission from Unlogic and unknown community members, so that is completely impracticable. Or reload the image as "fair use" with the rationale that no freely licensed version is available because some of the collective authors are unknown. Is that what you meant, Nikkimaria? SusunW (talk) 15:50, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
 * I will wait till Nikki maria replies. I am still looking at whether it was using only the map frame which I already had done. Safari Scribe Edits! Talk! 19:46, 10 June 2024 (UTC)


 * SusunW, yes. SafariScribe, I'm not sure what your comment is referring to - the article isn't using mapframe but rather a fixed map. Nikkimaria (talk) 23:53, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
 * @ Nikkimaria, I'm sorry for the confusion. Ok! Gotcha. I have removed the image for now. Do see others. Thanks. Safari Scribe Edits! Talk! 02:52, 11 June 2024 (UTC)
 * I was pinged. https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Commons:Copyright_rules_by_territory/Spain#Freedom_of_panorama is a mess. https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/User:MarcoAurelio/FoP-ES goes into greater detail (and confirms the situation is a mess!). From it, it looks like neither the Osborne (registered trademark) nor the Raqueros (3D replica) issues apply, and the photo does not remove the artwork from the panorama. So if there is any freedom of panorama in Spain for our purposes, this image should be fine. https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Commons:Village_pump/Copyright/Archive/2023/08#NO-FOP_in_Spain? is the relevant discussion - it left with the same conclusion, that

the situation is a mess, but did not delete the 12300 FoP Spain images. If any of them are good, this one should be. If they are all deleted, this one presumably will be at the same time. So I'd keep it until then. --GRuban (talk) 21:21, 11 June 2024 (UTC)
 * , I have removed all those images, and I feel you may need to finish the review at your convenient time. Is there any other issue? Safari Scribe Edits! Talk! 08:52, 15 July 2024 (UTC)

Airship
As always, these are suggestions, not demands; feel free to refuse with adequate justification. Will continue. &#126;~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 17:03, 15 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Lead and infobox
 * This is a long article—9200 words according to the prosesize tool. Per MOS:LEADLENGTH, I would recommend a four-paragraph lead.
 * Working on that
 * For exmple, I note that the "Themes and style" subsection, which by itself is longer than the "Views and controversy" and "Legacy" sections combined, are summarised in just two lead sentences.
 * Working too
 * MOS:FIRST: Are the four subdivisions of "writer" necessary? See MOS:FIRSTBIO: "try to not overload the first sentence by describing everything notable about the subject". I'm not even entirely sure that you can be an playwright of postcolonial feminist literature.
 * Rewritten.
 * Also, why are we saying "a writer ... of ... literature"? Seems tautological.
 * Rewritten.
 * It's odd that the only university mentioned in the lead is the one she didn't complete her studies at, unless the lead is attempting to refer to the secondary school, in which case it's misleading. In any case, the location is unnecessary.
 * I have removed the location, and linked all the universities she attended.
 * Infobox:
 * Is "fashionista" an occupation?
 * Fixed.
 * I don't think we need either em dashes or bullet points in the notable works/awards lists, and them being different just looks odd.
 * Fixed.
 * I'm not convinced of the worth of the "period" parameter.
 * Removed entirely.
 * Why does her spouse need a citation?
 * Fixed: I removed it since it's already cited in the body.
 * Looks forward to that. Thanks.


 * Life, education, and family
 * what does this mean? My understanding of "English names" (not the link provided) is that they are common names taken by people with birth names unfriendly to English pronunciation. But looking at the infobox, it looks like "Amanda" was her birth name.
 * Adichie is an Igbo and according to the source, Igbo people name their child in Igbo after birth, and the English name after baptism. Adichie is referred to as "Ngozi" but she would later incorporate "chi-mamanda", which was derived from her English name Amanda. It is important we note the English name for some readers especially in Nigeria who didn't know Amanda is an English name.
 * Also, there are definitely too many commas in the first sentence.
 * Removed unnecessary commas except the MOS:GEOCOMMA.
 * is this relevant?
 * It is important since it was the first place she said about her getting her known name, "Chimamanda". What of being a note?
 * The second paragraph describes her father moving to California twice. It would be better organised purely chronologically.
 * Done. Rephrased!
 * I find it odd that we use half a paragraph to describe how James fulfilled the requisite funerary rites for his father, which seems rather tangential at best, but consign his and his wife's dates of death to a note.
 * Done.
 * as before, the chronology is confusing. It would be far more helpful to state precisely when the Biafran War broke out, and when James started working for the Biafran government.
 * Done.
 * Apparently the anti-Igbo pogrom took place before the outbreak of the Biafran War, so I don't know why it's described as if it took place afterwards.
 * Removed.
 * seeing as I don't know what this is and can't figure out from its name alone, is it needed in the article?
 * Yes it's important since there exist other Biafran directorates where anyone can work.
 * This is simultaneously repetitive (4x university, 2x Nsukka) and unclear (it is not immediately apparent whether Grace became an administration officer in a university in Enugu or Nsukka.
 * Rephrased.
 * ... presumably these are brothers/sisters? a list of names with no context is unhelpful.
 * Since this is a biography, can it be good having a "note".
 * Safari Scribe, I think all that is being asked is that you say instead of "the family included" that "her siblings included". Their names IMO are important, as they are mentioned elsewhere in the article. SusunW (talk) 14:47, 21 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Oh! My bad. Safari Scribe Edits! Talk! 16:37, 21 June 2024 (UTC)


 * this is the only mention of Blyton in the article, which makes the singling out of her as an "inspiration" in the lead somewhat dubious.
 * working.
 * we know this
 * This sentence is hard to parse. Why the repetition of "Nsukka" again? Unless "with top distinction in the West African Examinations Council" is a phrase, it's grammatically incorrect.
 * Done.
 * I think we can assume that a student-run magazine is in the university.
 * Most definitely.
 * The "Education abroad and early literary efforts" subsection paragraph is fairly long; continue splitting.
 * Working.
 * Previously the war was referred to as the Biafran War; now it is the Nigerian Civil War? It should be consistent.
 * Done.
 * the theme of war following a war? are you sure that's what's meant?
 * Rephrased.
 * I'm not sure why the "education abroad and early literary efforts" subsection includes, variously, her marriage, children, place of residence, citizenship status, and selected prizes received. &#126;~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 14:10, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Is there any other place it can be other than there? Safari Scribe Edits! Talk! 23:23, 24 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Sorry, I don't think I can support this nomination. The general impression I have is of an article that needs significant polish. I see that you have added more to the lead after my suggestions, but your additions are nowhere near FAC standards, containing basic grammar, spelling and syntax mistakes that would put the article's GA status into question. I won't formally oppose, but I would advise you to withdraw this nomination, and possibly work on a smaller, less-involved article for your first FA: a 9,300-word behemoth such as this is a tough beast to wrangle into shape. &#126;~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 13:19, 1 July 2024 (UTC)
 * All these doesn't feel alright for me. Why then can't you do the review here before such a comment. Welp, I know it's a working volunteerism, but it's okay at the same time Everybody must do as it pleases them especially with a partial review. Thanks though! Safari Scribe Edits! Talk! 13:27, 1 July 2024 (UTC)
 * It's a very long article, and judging by the lead additions, I don't have confidence that a full review would be a good use of mine or your time. &#126;~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 13:48, 1 July 2024 (UTC)
 * @AirshipJungleman29, it can be. You really need to do this. The other parts of the article is not yet reviewed. The lead can be trimmed down per your review. Everybody isn't perfect but you can help out with whichever way you can. Is not like I respond swiftly. No! Please continue your review and ignore my overreaction. Safari Scribe Edits! Talk! 13:57, 1 July 2024 (UTC)
 * No, I think I have made my position clear. &#126;~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 14:00, 1 July 2024 (UTC)

A question of pings

 * Pinging @AirshipJungleman29, @Pseud 14, @Jo-Jo Eumerus, @Ajpolino, @Dugan Murphy, @750h+, @Gog the Mild, @Generalissima, @Draken Bowser, @Joeyquism, @Sammi Brie, @BennyOnTheLoose, @Nikkimaria, and @SusunW. I'm sorry for the ping, but hopes that you might have the time and inclination to comment on this nomination. If so, any and all comments and suggestions will be much appreciated and swiftly responded to. Thanks! Safari Scribe Edits! Talk! 08:42, 30 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Just a heads up: this is, in my opinion, not a neutrally phrased message. Indicating that you would appreciate one’s support does not exemplify the neutrality expected of a request for review, as it implies that each set of comments should end in support. As stated before, this is just my opinion, though I will advise you to be cautious with your wording next time around.
 * That being said, I am currently quite busy with my own projects and life, to say the least, and do not believe I have the time to write a thorough review. For that I apologize. Best of luck with the FAC. joeyquism (talk ) 09:19, 30 June 2024 (UTC)
 * It's no problem. I didn't see that as a NPOV case. However I've removed the last message. Thanks. Safari Scribe <sup style="font-family: Times New Roman; color: #006400;">Edits! Talk! 09:32, 30 June 2024 (UTC)
 * I am glad that you amended your message before I came across it wearing my FAC coordinator hat. It was definitely a NPOV issue. Please ensure that any future pings relating to FAC are neutrally phrased
 * Reading the ping as is, I am unsure why I was contacted. There is a long list of pings at the bottom of a review by AJ; is there some aspect of their comments you would like our input on? If so, could you specify? Gog the Mild (talk) 10:23, 1 July 2024 (UTC)
 * That's not a problem. Should I remove the ping under the review. I was pinging because I was afraid of getting archived since there is no support, and less comments so far. Safari Scribe <sup style="font-family: Times New Roman; color: #006400;">Edits! Talk! 11:31, 1 July 2024 (UTC)
 * It's done now, so I would suggest leaving it. I can see now how deleting the non-NPOV bit left just bare pings. As it was, when I came to it I was baffled what it was you wanted from me. Maybe add straight after the pings something like "Apologies for the ping, but I was hoping that you might have the time and inclination to comment on this nomination. If so, any and all comments and suggestions will be much appreciated and swiftly responded to. Thanks." Gog the Mild (talk) 16:30, 1 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Thanks Gog. Safari Scribe <sup style="font-family: Times New Roman; color: #006400;">Edits! Talk! 16:54, 1 July 2024 (UTC)

Comments and support from Gerda
I am interested, and will comment as I read, looking at the lead last. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:45, 8 July 2024 (UTC)

Infobox
 * I could imagine using infobox person which offers the same parameters but less prominent for website.

Headers
 * I suggest to have Life as level two, and further headers level three, because career is still part of life.

Life and education
 * I think there's no need to repeat state and country. The details are in the infobox. If repeated: Nigeria is a well-known country which doesn't need a link.
 * Perhaps introduce both parents before they get married.
 * "everything including Adichie's maternal and paternal grandfathers" - perhaps it's my English but it sounds to me as if the grandparents were "things".
 * Please check chronology: first her parents die, and next sentence, her father takes a position.
 * I wonder if the names of the two sisters could be introduced earlier with their birth. Do we have years of birth?
 * US vs. U.S.?
 * I haven't find any, but remind me whenever you see such. I prefer US.
 * It shouldn't be what you prefer, but on the article being in American English or UK English. It looks UK - sorry I was too tired to check - so US (found twice) is fine. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:01, 9 July 2024 (UTC)

got to header Career and need a break --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:18, 8 July 2024 (UTC)
 * It's alright. I have done per se. Thanks.
 * Thank you for all the changes! You might write a bit more of an edit summary as to what was changed, but I went by the edit history. Another general advice: when you indent on a talk page (like this one), repeat everything in the edit you reply to, without a blank line, and only add your one indenting character. (There's an essay by RexxS about it on my user page if you want to know why.) - I'll continue later today. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:10, 9 July 2024 (UTC)
 * I have seen the essay, and will read it next after this. Safari Scribe <sup style="font-family: Times New Roman; color: #006400;">Edits! Talk! 08:42, 10 July 2024 (UTC)

Writing
 * "It was written during a period", - how about: "She wrote it ..."?
 * Done.
 * similarly: " Eventually, she was emailed by Djana Pearson Morris" - How about " Eventually Djana Pearson Morris, ... sent her an email"? I'm not even sure that "to email" is a proper verb, but again, English isn't my first language.
 * Tha was pretty good. I used "sent her a mail" (though there mayn't be any comparable difference).
 * "seeking the manuscript with lines saying, "I like this and I'm willing to take a risk on you." - not sure about the construction. Why lines when only one follows? How about dropping the lines altogether?
 * Done.
 * "Adichie, who was desperate to be published", - perhaps: "Adichie, who was desperate to have her book published"?
 * Done
 * In the remainder of the paragraph, the verb "sent" is used to often, - please find more variety.
 * I used sponsored for the tour, and left others. I have sought for the right words/better words but there wasn't. Maybe we leave it like that or I will dig later.
 * for her second book: perhaps first a summary of content, then the publishing?
 * But there isn't much about the publishing unlike Purple Hibiscus. Do you insist?
 * I just meant the order of things, tell the reader first what the book is about? --GA
 * "also ... also"
 * Can't relate the difference.
 * Can you drop one of them, it's too mush "also". --GA
 * "It exploded the myth" - not sure what is meant.
 * I removed it, and used "central message", since it seems same message.
 * "Renowned African Writers/African and African Diaspora Artists Visit Series" - that long phrase or name is unconnected and should be explained. When beginning the sentence it's not clear that this still plays at that university.
 * Trimmed and done.
 * book title consistent please
 * I can't find the specific book, may I know? Safari Scribe <sup style="font-family: Times New Roman; color: #006400;">Edits! Talk! 08:52, 10 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Americanah (which is on the title) vs. Americana --GA
 * "to expand her ideas on how to raise a feminist daughter into a book" - I first understood that she raised a daughter into a book ;)
 * Yep, I changed it
 * "The book tells the story of the connections" - here you use present tense for book content, and I like it. Up to there, you used past tense, - and perhaps make it consistent?
 * I fixed a bit of that, but I am not sure of the one you are saying. Can I have it mark in green?
 * later perhaps --GA
 * Here: for her first book, you said "The book explored post-colonial Nigeria" (past tense), and for her second "The novel expanded on the Biafran conflict" (past tense), how about present tense for book content consistently. (I don't use green, it's hard to read for some.) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 09:56, 10 July 2024 (UTC)
 * "class, race, gender, and sexuality impact equal opportunities and human right" - not sure where the series of terms ends, and perhaps consequence begins.
 * There is a separation comma to do that, though I helped the sentence.
 * "in a real, active, practical, get your hands dirty way" - I think "get your hands dirty" needs some indication of it being a phrase, perhaps "in a real, active, practical, 'get your hands dirty' way"?
 * Done
 * spoken ... speak
 * Maybe this was an error. When we use spoken, it will deviate from the grammar and tense.
 * sorry, I didn't mean tense but repetition --GA
 * "Along with Laszlo Jakab Orsos, Adichie co-curated the 2015 Pen World Voices Festival in New York City." - as Orsos has no article and is possibly not famous enough to make a connection, I suggest to put him at the end of the sentence.
 * Done.
 * "How people in the United States seem to fear being offensive or disrupting "the careful layers of comfort" they have shielded themselves with, whereas in Nigeria, people expect pain." - I read that sentence a few times and am still not sure I got it. Perhaps SusunW could help phrasing it.
 * I removed entirely since the second thing she said in the place is noteworthy, and can stand for the removed one. If there is still the need, let me know too.

I got to the header Themes and style. Generally: perhaps some of the occasions where she spoke have articles in other languages, - worth checking. The paragraph is long, perhaps structure somewhat by year, or by topic? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:40, 9 July 2024 (UTC) Themes
 * I have done the above and will look further to your continued review. Cheers. Safari Scribe <sup style="font-family: Times New Roman; color: #006400;">Edits! Talk! 08:52, 10 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the fixes, and I tried to clarify where I was unclear. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 09:14, 10 July 2024 (UTC)
 * ps: perhaps fix the indenting in the section above. The double bullets look a bit irritating ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 09:19, 10 July 2024 (UTC)
 * "The university is also where one learns" - sounds needlessly complicated to me
 * It was used to portray the narrative of the next sentence. I rephrased it though.
 * "diasporic" - (my English ...) I don't know if that's a word, but I know that it should'n come in two sentences in a row.
 * removed. It was to be African in Diaspora.
 * "is shown not only in her diasporic works, but also Adichie's feminist tract", - why first "her", then name?
 * Sighted well, I have removed it and rephrased.
 * "Her women characters repeatedly assertively resist being defined ..." - I stumble over "repeatedly assertively" but may be the only one.
 * Removed "assertively".
 * "as a miniature representation of violence for the nation", - I don't get the analogy, neither violence nor nation was mentioned before.
 * I used setting instead, since it should be "violence for the nation (the setting used)."
 * "although her works do not explore homosexuality" - I don't understand the "although" there.
 * It'd explain the next sentence, but since it's possible to affect readers, I have rephrased the sentence.
 * themes beginning with "sexual abuse" are linked, but I find them just as common words as "belonging, adaptation ..." that have no link. (to be continued) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 09:52, 10 July 2024 (UTC)
 * I removed the links but left rage and domestic abuse since they may be difficult to find (other words/things named rage, and applicable to domestic abuse when there is also the sexual one). Safari Scribe <sup style="font-family: Times New Roman; color: #006400;">Edits! Talk! 16:44, 11 July 2024 (UTC)
 * @Gerda Arendt, I have done the above suggestions/reviews. Thanks. Safari Scribe <sup style="font-family: Times New Roman; color: #006400;">Edits! Talk! 16:45, 11 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Thank you!

Style
 * In the quote box, I wouldn't link. All are common words, no. Links from quote are generally discouraged.
 * In the description of the box, we read "her style of creativity" which - under header "Style" I misread as writing style. How about "creative process"?
 * I have unlinked them, as well as used "creative process", as it is the best suit.
 * "For example, in Purple Hibiscus, the arrival of a king to challenge colonial and religious leaders symbolises Palm Sunday." - Sorry I don't get the connection of this to the previous sentence which mentions "trigger sensory experiences".
 * Sensory experiences can also involve what we see. In that case, seeing that practice refers to the same thing seen in the Christian Palm Sunday.
 * I'm still not with you, sorry. "see" is ambiguous, when talking about senses, I think of seeing a flower, not seeing Palm Sunday. Perhaps the two things would be better disconnected, - something like analogies to biblical narration?
 * Sorry, in "By utilising lived realities, intimate details, and drawing upon the senses" I fail to understand what "lived reality" means (and again, perhaps all others will know).
 * Removed; I used pure realities, then removed "and drawing up the senses".
 * "cultural failures" is another phrase I would not know how to understand
 * I changed it to failed cultures, and rephrased the sentence.
 * "By focusing on the group as a collective unit, she promotes not only empowerment, but a focus on each team member's well-being." - it's unclear if "she" refers to the character of the previous sentence or Adichie.
 * I have replaced "she", as it was referring to Adichie

I got to header "Views and controversy". Tomorrow is a busy day for me. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:38, 11 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Thank you Gerda. Take you time too. I have done the above. Safari Scribe <sup style="font-family: Times New Roman; color: #006400;">Edits! Talk! 04:53, 12 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the clarifications, just one remaining. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 05:59, 12 July 2024 (UTC)

 Feminist fashion Religion
 * Why not linkto Elle?
 * Done
 * I don't think we need a link to West Africa at this point in the article.
 * Unlinked.
 * "had a woman head its creative division" - perhaps use a different verb, because I thought of "a woman's head" ;)
 * Used "rule".
 * "The government of Nigeria had recently launched" - I'd reserve "recently" to things in the presence.
 * Removed.
 * We read about something in 2017 and then the inauguration of Benedict 16 which I believe was in 2015. I'd make it two sentences, because a relation is not obvious to me.
 * The 2017 take was about how she left the church after the 2015 inauguration.
 * ... and then comes 2012, - could the whole paragraph be brought in chronology?
 * Done.
 * How about a link for Catholic because it's word with many meanings? Also in the lead.
 * Catholic redirects to the Catholic Church, hence Catholic seen in the article already reads as the Catholic Church.
 * I missed that was linked before in the body, but suggest to link in the lead also. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:23, 13 July 2024 (UTC)
 * I think "The Guardian" should be linked, but further up when it comes for the first time. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 13:26, 13 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Are you talking about the religion section? I don't seem to capture any place stating "The Guardian". Safari Scribe <sup style="font-family: Times New Roman; color: #006400;">Edits! Talk! 16:21, 13 July 2024 (UTC)
 * You are right that I missed a subheader (LGTB rights) but it first comes up in Public speaking, and might be linked there. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:26, 13 July 2024 (UTC)

Lead
 * I could imagine the summary sentence close to the end (as I write this), "Most of her works explore ..." right after the list of work titles, because the titles don't say the same.
 * Done.
 * I am no friend of the construction "she would (study, whatever)" and suggest to say factually what she did.
 * Done.
 * I think you can drop that she "would later publish ..." completely because the exact titles have already been mentioned. When poetry and play came first it goes without saying that the others came later, no?
 * Done.
 * "Adichie grew up bilingual, and writes in English and Igbo language, describing it as a means to reach a broad audience, and retain both as her own." - both what? ... the languages I guess?
 * Yes.
 * "She has also supported LGBT rights in Africa" - why "also"?
 * Removed.
 * The controversy should come in a separate sentence, because it's not obviously connected. Its description "about her sexuality" looks too general and thus misleading, - one might thing "her sexual practise". If too difficult to summarize without loosing precision then perhaps don't mention it in the lead at all.
 * I removed it entirely.
 * "The recipient of numerous academic awards, fellowships, and honourary degrees, among them a MacArthur Fellowship in 2008 and an induction into the American Academy of Arts and Sciences in 2017, Adichie's 2009 TED Talk "The Danger of a Single Story" is one of the most viewed TED Talks of all time." I'd split the sentence in two, and perhaps bring the recognition later. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:49, 13 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Done. I'd you have any problem, do notify me. Safari Scribe <sup style="font-family: Times New Roman; color: #006400;">Edits! Talk! 11:43, 14 July 2024 (UTC)
 * I like your changes. Could you now sort out the para beginning and ending with the languages, mentioning speeches in a sentence moved up and later introducing speeches? Almost there for me! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 18:58, 14 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Is it in the lead? I will be happy if you break it into shorter sentences. Overwhelmed with joy that you're happy with the changes. Thank you Gerda. Safari Scribe <sup style="font-family: Times New Roman; color: #006400;">Edits! Talk! 08:19, 15 July 2024 (UTC)
 * I'll give it a try, - revert what you don't like. Support tha article's prose and depth of sourcing and referencing. I trust SusunW's judgement of the sources and didn't look at them in detail. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 10:14, 15 July 2024 (UTC)

750h
I hope I'll be able to look in a few days; if not ping me. I have quite a lot going on, so I'll try to comment as soon as possible. 750h+ 03:05, 16 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Alright, I don't know if you are free now to start the review. Cheers. Safari Scribe <sup style="font-family: Times New Roman; color: #006400;">Edits! Talk! 14:21, 17 July 2024 (UTC)

lead

 * ==> "Born in Enugu, Enugu State, Nigeria, Adichie's childhood was"
 * Done.
 * ==> "Nigerian Civil War, which killed both of her grandfathers" (WP:EUPHEMISM)
 * Done.
 * remove the comma
 * Done.
 * remove "which was"
 * Done.
 * change "in" to "at"
 * remove "Both"
 * Done.
 * remove "of all time"
 * Done.
 * ==> "Adichie has received numerous academic"
 * Done.
 * ==> "short stories, poetry, essays and children's books"
 * Done., I have addressed above. Safari Scribe <sup style="font-family: Times New Roman; color: #006400;">Edits! Talk! 13:31, 20 July 2024 (UTC)
 * I'll do the rest in a bit. Apologies for the delay 750h+ 13:47, 20 July 2024 (UTC)