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The article was promoted by Sarastro1 via FACBot (talk) 13:07, 29 October 2017.

Coldrum Long Barrow

 * Nominator(s): Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:12, 5 October 2017 (UTC)

This article is about a Neolithic burial site in Kent, south-eastern England, one of several Medway Megaliths located around the River Medway. Part of a tradition of chambered long barrow construction that took place across much of Europe in the Neolithic, it is one of the very oldest built constructions still extant in the British landscape. As well as having an important archaeological side to its story, it also has various folkloric associations. The article has been a GA for two years and I believe that it now meets FA criteria. I managed to get Nine Stones, Winterbourne Abbas to FA several months ago, and I'm hoping that this one can join it and improve our coverage of British prehistory. Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:12, 5 October 2017 (UTC)

Image review
 * File:Map_of_the_Medway_Megaliths.jpg: description page should include mention of sources used to create this map
 * Good idea. Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:20, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * File:Coldrum_skeletal_material.jpg: confused by this - if there is a FUR there should also be a fair-use tag of some sort. The given PD tag requires more explanation, both regarding which point is believed to apply as well as what steps have been taken to attempt to identify author. Same with File:Coldrum_skulls.jpg. Nikkimaria (talk) 01:50, 7 October 2017 (UTC)
 * I've been having trouble with these photographs and finding their precise origins. To ascertain the photographer, one would probably have to start exploring the museum archives, and I am not in a position to do that. I have removed the photos and replaced them with another image of the site itself, which should cause no copyright problems. Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:10, 27 October 2017 (UTC)

Sources review

 * There's a Harvard error on each of the Holgate citations - 1981 v 1982 I think
 * Well spotted! It is 1981, so the problem is in the bibliography. Fixed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 15:22, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Ref 51: mdash in page range
 * Replaced with the shorter dash (sorry, I don't know the specific name of it!) Midnightblueowl (talk) 15:22, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Bibliography:
 * National Trust: The title on the linked page is apparently "Stunning views from the top of the barrow", not the title you give in your bibliography
 * I was under the impression that the title is "Coldrum Stones", with "Stunning views from the top of the barrow" as a form of sub-header between the main title and the main prose? Midnightblueowl (talk) 15:26, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Way: Can you clarify which of the articles listed on the linked page is your source article?
 * Done! Midnightblueowl (talk) 15:36, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Ditto with Wright
 * And done! Midnightblueowl (talk) 15:36, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * (being really pernickety) isbns should be consistently formatted. The 10-digit isbn shown for the Malone book can be converted to 13 via this.
 * Smashing website; thanks for the link. Will try and remember to use that in future. Midnightblueowl (talk) 15:22, 11 October 2017 (UTC)

Otherwise, all sources are of impeccable quality and reliability. Signature added following the reproof below. Brianboulton (talk) 13:26, 10 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Note: the above source review is by Brianboulton. He should be forgiven his absence of mind in omitting to add his tiddlies, as he's almost as old as I am, poor soul.  Tim riley  talk    13:19, 10 October 2017 (UTC)

Many thanks for your time on this one, Brian! Midnightblueowl (talk) 15:37, 11 October 2017 (UTC)

Support Comments from Tim riley
I expect to be supporting the elevation of this comprehensive and fascinating article, but I have a few very small quibbles first.
 * In the "Meaning and purpose" section I imagine "mouments" is a typo, but as it is in a quotation I didn’t like to alter it.
 * Indeed, it is just a typo. Well spotted! Midnightblueowl (talk) 15:41, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * In the Bibliography I wondered about "Otherparts" (in the George Payne entry).
 * That appears to be an error; I will correct it to "Other Parts". Midnightblueowl (talk) 15:49, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "North Downs" is linked twice in the main text.
 * Fixed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 15:41, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "an idea likely derived", "monuments were likely influenced" and "a local community could likely muster" – a curiously AmE feel to this formation. In ordinary BrE I'd expect "an idea probably derived", "monuments were probably influenced" and "a local community could probably muster". (The other "likely" in the text seems to me perfectly idomatic.)
 * Sure. Changing instances of "likely" to "probably". Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:12, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Good. Privately I think the AmE "likely" is rather better than our BrE "probably" (always prefer the shorter word to the long, and the Anglo Saxon - or in this case Norse - to the Latin) but the BrE usage here is pretty invariable.  Tim riley  talk    16:29, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * False titles: in a BrE article, it is jarring to see false titles such as "Archaeologist Robin Holgate", "historian Ronald Hutton" and "Archaeologist Caroline Malone". Prefixing them with a definite article would take away the pain.
 * A fair point (and one you've made to be before, admittedly). I've made the amendments. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:06, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "morris dancing – one hates to encourage goings-on of that sort, but the Wikipedia article capitalises Morris throughout. The OED on the other hand, doesn’t. I leave it to you to decide which is the greater authority on the point.
 * If we don't capitalise waacking or waltzing then there is probably no good reason to capitalise morris either. Ensuring that it appears in lower-case throughout this article (except when it appears in the name of a particular dance troupe). Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:01, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * waacking? I won't ask (nor click on the link); I agree with your decision about capitalising "morris".  Tim riley  talk    16:29, 11 October 2017 (UTC)

Nothing of any great consequence here, but it would be nice to have these minor points cleared up. –  Tim riley  talk    13:21, 10 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Many thanks for offering your thoughts, Tim; I've responded to all of them but if there is anything else then please do let me know. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:12, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * After another perusal I am happy to add my support for this article, which seems to me to meet all the FA criteria. Another most readable and enjoyable article from Midnightblueowl.  Tim riley  talk    16:29, 11 October 2017 (UTC)

Support on prose Comments by Finetooth

 * This is well-written and appears to be comprehensive. I have a small number of questions and suggestions.


 * Lead
 * ¶1 "located near to the village" – Trim to "near the village"?
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:21, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Link sarsen in the lead caption?
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:21, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Context
 * Link peristalith in the caption?
 * Good idea. Done Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:21, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * ¶2 "Britain was largely forested in this period,[8] with Kent only seeing widespread forest clearance in the Late Bronze Age." – Link Late Bronze Age and give a date span?
 * Unfortunately, clicking on Late Bronze Age takes us to a section of the article on the Bronze Age which deals only with the Near East, which is not particularly relevant to this article. Instead I shall add a link to Bronze Age Britain. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:21, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Agreed. Good catch. Finetooth (talk) 16:54, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * ¶2 Replace "with plus -ing" construction in the Late Bronze Age sentence? Suggestion: "Britain was largely forested in this period; widespread forest clearance did not occur in Kent until the Late Bronze Age (date span)."
 * Looks good. Will make the amendment. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:21, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * The chamber
 * ¶1 "and 53 centimetres (1 foot, 9 inches) in depth at its thicker, eastern end." – Should this be "in thickness" rather than "in depth"?
 * Changed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:31, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Demographics
 * ¶5 "revealed that while the bones had δ13C values" – Link δ13C?
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:02, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * ¶5 "they had significantly higher values of δ15C, which grew over time." – Should that be δ15N? An isotope of nitrogen rather than carbon?
 * Indeed, it should - my silly mistake. Well spotted. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:07, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * ¶6 Link calibrated BCE?
 * Good idea, and done! Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:02, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Post-mortem disposition
 * ¶1 Link innominates?
 * Very good idea. Added link. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:41, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * ¶1 Link femora?
 * Again, a very sensible idea. Added. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:41, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Damage and dilapidation
 * ¶2 "which ordered the opening of tumuli" – Link tumuli?
 * I've added the link. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:31, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Folklore, folk tradition, and modern Paganism
 * ¶4 "Pagans sometimes visit the site alone or in pairs, there to meditate, pray, or perform rituals, with some having reported experiencing visions there." – Replace the "with plus -ing"? Suggestion: "Pagans sometimes visit the site alone or in pairs, there to meditate, pray, or perform rituals, and some have reported experiencing visions there."
 * I've gone with your suggested wording. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:31, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Early antiquarian descriptions
 * ¶1 "alerted to their existence by a local vicar" – Link vicar?
 * I've added a link to Vicar (Anglicanism), which I think is more appropriate and specific here. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:35, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Agreed. Good catch. Finetooth (talk) 17:02, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * ¶3 "stating that two individuals excavated in the centre of the chamber without permission, discovering a human skeleton, the skull of which was re-buried in the churchyard..." – Slightly smoother might be "stating that two individuals who excavated in the centre of the chamber without permission discovered a human skeleton, the skull of which was re-buried in the churchyard..."
 * Good idea. I've made the change. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:35, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Archaeological excavation
 * ¶1 "he returned to excavate on the north-west corner of the dolmen" – Link dolmen?
 * I'm going to change "dolmen" to "chamber" here. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:10, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * That's all. Finetooth (talk) 17:03, 10 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Many thanks for offering your comments, Finetooth. The article is much the better for them. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:09, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * All good. Switching to support on prose, as noted above. A most interesting article, well-done. Finetooth (talk) 17:18, 11 October 2017 (UTC)

Comments from FunkMonk

 * I'll review this soon. FunkMonk (talk) 12:15, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * "Coldrum Lodge, which has since been demolished" When was this name coined, and when was the farm demolished?
 * If only we knew! Sadly, this does not appear to be mentioned in the reliable sources. Hopefully, it might appear in some future publication and we could use it in the article. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:17, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "about 500 metres from", "one and a quarter miles away" I'm assuming that conversions would be needed for measurements here, since you also do it elsewhere. Anyhow, you should be consistent in what units you use.
 * I've ensured that in both of these instances we have both imperial and metric measurements. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:49, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * I think you could mention country and area under Name and location too, the intro and infobox should only summarise info found in the article body, but now the info isn't there.
 * Added. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:20, 11 October 2017 (UTC)


 * I'm not an WP:engvar fanatic at all, but isn't this sufficiently associated with the UK for British English to be used in the article? Maybe it is supposed to be UK, I just see "meters" written various places instead of "metres".
 * I've ensured standardisation as "metre". Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:27, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * I think you could define long barrow in-text early in the article body. The article is written in a way that just assumes the reader knows what it means.
 * I've added a few sentences to the start of the "Medway Megaliths" sub-section to give greater explanation. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:06, 11 October 2017 (UTC)

Many thanks for your comments, FunkMonk! Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:17, 11 October 2017 (UTC)
 * "from the vicinity of the White Horse Stone" It could be explained what this is.
 * I have added the brief following explanation to the sentence in question: "a putatively prehistoric monolith near the river," Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:43, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "and Maloideae Only genera and species should be in italics, not families.
 * Ah, I did not know that. Removed the italicisation of the word. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:39, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "They can be divided into two separate clusters" I would name them, since this is the start of a new paragraph.
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:39, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "Eocene." You could add "epoch", so readers will not confuse it with the much narrower periods also mentioned.
 * Good idea; done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:39, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Any genetic work done on the human remains?
 * It does not look like it. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:07, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Are there any reconstructions of how the monument would have looked originally?
 * I'm not sure that any would be fair use given that they would be artistic depictions created by other people. The other option would be for someone with a talent for art to produce a reconstruction (based on others) which could then be used here. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:41, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "Constructed circa 4000 BCE," Only seems to be stated explicitly in the intro, which should not have unique info. Also, what is the date based on?
 * I've changed this to "Probably constructed in the fourth millennium BCE". The issue of date is discussed when examining the bones, mentioned in the final paragraph of the "Demographics" sub-section. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:36, 15 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Oh, so that's the only line of evidence that has been used for dating? FunkMonk (talk) 18:45, 15 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Well, there's also the stylistic evidence, i.e. that it is a chambered long barrow and these are known to have been erected in the Early Neolithic. So it's a matter of relative dating, rather than any absolute dating. Hopefully any future excavation might be able to utilise techniques like carbon dating and thus ascertain a more precise date for the barrow's construction. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:07, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "about by Neolithicisation" Which is what?
 * I've replaced the term "Neolithicisation" with the more explicit "the transition from the hunter-gatherer Mesolithic to the pastoralist Early Neolithic". Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:11, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * It would seem those 1910 photos might be PD-old, know who the photographer was? In any case, they are PD-US, so you should upload them here locally in full res, like for example this image:
 * I've removed the photos being discussed due to problems regarding ascertaining their copyright status. Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:24, 27 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "in a paper largely concerned with discerning racial characteristics of the bodies" May be controversial, but what did he conclude?
 * I've added a quotation from Keith that summarises his ideas. Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:38, 27 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "their results were published in the Proceedings of the Prehistoric Society in 2013" Do we really need to name the journal in-text? You don't do this for other such studies.
 * It's not essential. Removed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:47, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * " published in the Folklore journal" Likewise.
 * Also removed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:48, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "Wysocki's team noted that in all but one case, the fracture morphologies" Maybe add "of the bones" to make it clearer.
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:47, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "on the left frontal" Spell out frontal bone and link. A bit too jargony.
 * Agreed and done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:45, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "sub-adults" Seems too jargony, could at least be defined.
 * The article defines the bodies as between 16 and 20, so I have added that date range to the prose. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:07, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "as seen here in contemporary Sichuan" Better to give a date, or be more vague, like "modern". If this article exists in 50 years, will the photo still be "contemporary"?
 * Good idea. I've switched "contemporary" to "in the early twenty-first century". Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:26, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "The inclusion of occupational debris" Which is what exactly?
 * I've added a little extra detail here. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:29, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "earth energy" Any reason why this isn't linked?
 * I've now added a link to Energy (esotericism). Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:20, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "spirits of Albion" Could be linked.
 * I do not think that "Spirits of Albion" itself could really link to anything, but we could link "Albion" itself? Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:18, 15 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Yep, that's what I was thinking. FunkMonk (talk) 18:45, 15 October 2017 (UTC)
 * I'll add the link. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:00, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "Kit's Coty House" is mentioned a few times, but what is it?
 * It is the name of one of the other Medway Megaliths; this is mentioned in both the second paragraph of the lede and again in the third paragraph of the "Medway Megaliths" sub-section. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:31, 15 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Right, for some reason it didn't work when I searched the article... FunkMonk (talk) 18:45, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Have there been no excavations after the 1920s?
 * Unfortunately not from what I gather, but hopefully some will take place in the future, at which point we can add any information about them into the article. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:18, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "An patch of scorched earth exists on the grass" Looks like a mistake
 * That it is, and I have corrected it. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:22, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * "After limited reconstruction" You mention this in the intro, but I cant see any elaboration in the article body.
 * The article mentions the chambers being fortified with concrete in both "The chamber" and "Archaeological excavation" sections; do you think that the lede needs to be clearer on this point? Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:28, 15 October 2017 (UTC)
 * That seems just short of reconstruction, though? Perhaps clarification would be better. Or do the sources refer to it as reconstruction? If so, it could also be solved by stating this explicitly in the article body. FunkMonk (talk) 18:45, 15 October 2017 (UTC)
 * I expanded the lede a little to better clarify things, but I felt that doing so just made that last lede paragraph too clunky, so I felt that the best bet was just to remove "After limited reconstruction" all together. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:11, 15 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Any reason why your self-made diagrams haven't been moved to Commons? Could be useful to other projects.
 * Not that I am aware of. If anyone wants to move them, then feel free to do so. Midnightblueowl (talk) 16:18, 15 October 2017 (UTC)
 * I would, but the tools for it somehow don't work for me anymore... FunkMonk (talk) 13:20, 18 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Seems only two issues are unaddressed, after that I should be ready to support. FunkMonk (talk) 13:17, 18 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks, FunkMonk; I've responded to the two questions which I was previously unable to address. Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:38, 27 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Support - every fix looks good, I think those century old photos would be fine to use here locally, in case you want me to look into it. FunkMonk (talk) 22:51, 28 October 2017 (UTC)

Comments Support by Cas Liber
Taking a look now...


 * Of these, it is in the best surviving condition.. - this segment is in a funny location tacked onto that sentence. If there were some way to tack this onto the previous sentence it would make more sense.
 * I think that appending it to the previous sentence would make the sentence in question a bit too long. Instead, I've made "Of these, it is in the best surviving condition" a sentence all of its own, which I feel deals with the problem you mention without creating another. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:19, 27 October 2017 (UTC)


 *  the long barrow fell into a state of ruined dilapidation - why not just, " the long barrow fell into a state of ruin"?
 * A fair point. Changed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:19, 27 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Another nearby village is Addington, which is located 5.23 kilometres (one and a quarter miles) away - why not just "The village of Addington is located 5.23 kilometres (one and a quarter miles) away"
 * Changed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:39, 27 October 2017 (UTC)


 * I wonder if the Medway Megaliths section is possibly a little too detailed for this article (given there is a parent article..?)
 * I see what you mean but I am really not sure if there is anything that could be removed without detrimentally impacting the article. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:33, 27 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Yeah I guess....having a look again, it's a pretty involved segment that adds necessary context. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 19:53, 27 October 2017 (UTC)


 * I'd add as a prefix to Michael Wysocki his occupation maybe
 * Done. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:24, 27 October 2017 (UTC)

Otherwise a detailed and eminently readable article. Nice job. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 00:08, 24 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Many thanks for your comments, Cas Liber. I have responded to them all, although if there is anything else then do let me know. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:40, 27 October 2017 (UTC)

Closing comment: All the images have alt text except for "Coldrum Long Barrow 4.jpg". For consistency, it would be worth adding this but it isn't an outright requirement and is not worth delaying promotion over. Sarastro1 (talk) 13:06, 29 October 2017 (UTC)

Sarastro1 (talk) 13:07, 29 October 2017 (UTC)
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