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Cups (song)

 * Nominator(s): The Ultimate Boss (talk) 09:51, 8 March 2021 (UTC)

This article is about a song by Anna Kendrick. It became huge in the United States back in 2013. After the last nomination, I fixed all the issues editors pointed out on the article. I replaced all the Billboard charts with archive links because billboard got rid of Kendrick's chart performances page for no reason. I have entirely re-written the lead and used inspiration for other FA music articles. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 09:51, 8 March 2021 (UTC)

Oppose by Nick-D
Sorry, but some of my PR and previous FAC comments remain unaddressed. Given that the third nom ended in December 2020 after you asked for it to be closed and the fourth nom was closed in January after you requested to be blocked, I honestly don't think that it's a great idea that you've opened this fifth FAC, especially so soon. With the greatest of respect, I'd suggest that you work on other articles. Nick-D (talk) 10:26, 8 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Nick-D Tell me what needs to be fixed and I’ll fix it right away. I’m planning on trying to work on some video game articles. This FAC is dedicated to my loved one who died from Covid. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 14:55, 8 March 2021 (UTC)
 * As per my comments at the 4th FAC, please see my comments at the 3rd FAC and explain how you have actioned them or why they are not actioned. Nick-D (talk) 07:08, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

Posting the comments here for accessibility (From P  anini 🥪 13:46, 9 March 2021 (UTC) on behalf of Nick-D) :


 * The article still doesn't introduce Anna Kendrick by providing any background about her, including how this song fitted into her career
 * done Ceoil  (talk) 05:30, 13 December 2020 (UTC)


 * The material on the video clip still seems much too lengthy and detailed
 * Still too long. Nick-D (talk) 07:51, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Could do with trimming yet, but as the song is so sight, I think (guess) the video is more why the track became viral Ceoil  (talk) 05:30, 13 December 2020 (UTC)
 * "Anna Kendrick first performed her version of the song as a part of the 2012 American musical comedy film Pitch Perfect" - the last sentence of the para where this appears to contradict this sentence.
 * Not addressed Nick-D (talk) 07:51, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "Kendrick said she had no idea the song would be used for Pitch Perfect." - it is still unclear what this means
 * " on the song's popularity and teamed up with Universal Pictures president of film music and publishing Mike Knobloch to produce a new, longer version with new instrumentation" - this is also unclear - what does the president of the music and publishing arm do? (did he produce the single himself?)
 * "Salt Lake City radio station KZHT played it 48 times from March 4 to March 10, 2013" - seems like trivia
 * Seems to have been removed Ceoil  (talk) 05:32, 13 December 2020 (UTC)


 * " Nielsen BDS started tracking the song while being followed by Indianapolis station WZPL and satellite radio station Sirius XM Hits 1." - this sentence is hard to follow - why were these radio stations following Nielsen BDS?
 * Claim has been removed Ceoil  (talk)
 * "Republic Records and Universal Music Enterprises released a remix of Kendrick's version of "Cups", titled "Cups (When I'm Gone)", for downloading and streaming as More from Pitch Perfect's lead single on March 26, 2013, on mainstream radio.[16][17][18][19][20]" - it it was released for internet sales, how was it published on radio? The wording here doesn't work well (and does this need 5 citations?).
 * The first para of the 'Critical reception' section needs an introductory sentance
 * "He also said the song "cemented Kendrick as a leading lady and set the foundation for Pitch Perfect to become a surprisingly bankable film franchise"" - given that the song seems to have been prominent in this series of movies, it would be good to discuss this more if possible
 * "Around the same time, Republic senior VP and head of radio and video promotion David Nathan promoted the track by saying, "Anyone that has a preteen knows 'Cups'. Pitch Perfect is a cultural phenomenon and we're very happy to be a part of it."" - this is unclear. Did he really have much influence by saying that? (and where did he say it?). Surely the music company did stuff to encourage radio stations to play the song and promoted it online, etc, which would likely have been more effective.
 * The current quote from this guy adds nothing to the article. Nick-D (talk) 07:51, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "The song was moderately successful outside the US. "Cups (When I'm Gone)" experienced similar success in Canada," - seems contraditory
 * Has been sorted Ceoil  (talk) 05:32, 13 December 2020 (UTC)


 * "Her post showed a photograph of an overturned cup in the midst of flour and dough; she tagged it with "#coveredinflour"" - trivia
 * Removed Ceoil  (talk) 05:48, 13 December 2020 (UTC)


 * "In April 2016, 11-year-old Cruz Beckham covered the track in an Instagram video" - relevance?
 * Had been Removed Ceoil  (talk) 05:48, 13 December 2020 (UTC)


 * Where people covering Kendrick's version of the song, or the version Kendrick was herself covering? (and how can we tell!) Nick-D (talk) 00:21, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * People covered her version of the song because it is the most popular version
 * David Nathan promoted the song's remix because he wanted it to be more popular than the movie version.
 * Nick-D, All of these issues have been removed or fixed. I looked all over the internet on how the song helped Anna Kendrick in her career and could not find anything. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 01:40, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Nick-D Are you still opposed? The Ultimate Boss (talk) 05:33, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Yes - please see my comments above. Nick-D (talk) 07:51, 15 March 2021 (UTC)

Nick-D, here I the comments that have not been answered by me in the past. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 04:08, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "Where people covering Kendrick's version of the song, or the version Kendrick was herself covering? (and how can we tell!)"
 * It's people covering Kendrick's version since hers is the most popular.
 * "on the song's popularity and teamed up with Universal Pictures president of film music and publishing Mike Knobloch to produce a new, longer version with new instrumentation" - this is also unclear - what does the president of the music and publishing arm do? (did he produce the single himself?)"
 * I'm pretty sure he helped promote the remix back in 2013.
 * "Around the same time, Republic senior VP and head of radio and video promotion David Nathan promoted the track by saying, "Anyone that has a preteen knows 'Cups'. Pitch Perfect is a cultural phenomenon and we're very happy to be a part of it."" - this is unclear. Did he really have much influence by saying that? (and where did he say it?)."
 * I have removed the quote entirely from the article.
 * "Republic Records and Universal Music Enterprises released a remix of Kendrick's version of "Cups", titled "Cups (When I'm Gone)", for downloading and streaming as More from Pitch Perfect's lead single on March 26, 2013, on mainstream radio."
 * I removed the mumbo jumbo about "Indianapolis station WZPL and satellite radio station Sirius XM Hits 1". It should make more sense now about it being sent to radio. I also got rid of a bunch of the sources that supported that.
 * I also trimmed some of the info on the music video section.
 * Nick-D It looks like you are still opposed. Any comments about the changes? The Ultimate Boss (talk) 20:35, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

Most of my comments above are addressed, and as you state the article has changed considerably, I'll now read it through again:
 * "On March 26, 2013, Republic Records released..." - the exact date of the original release isn't given in the lead
 * Not yet addressed Nick-D (talk) 08:49, 24 March 2021 (UTC)
 * " J. E. Mainer's Mountaineer" - not sure what this means
 * Changed


 * The para starting with "Anna Kendrick first performed her version" is still confusing. It's not entirely clear to me whether the performance was for Kendrick's audition for the movie, or the audition she played in the movie, and the last sentence still contradicts the first sentence (e.g. did Kendrick first perform this in her audition for the role, or during filming of the movie?)
 * It was the audition she played in the movie. The movie is a musical, and when they asked to hear her sing, she performed "Cups".
 * Still not addressed. Nick-D (talk) 09:04, 24 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "The song was originally written by A. P. Carter and British musicians Heloise Tunstall-Behrens and Luisa Gerstein." - also confusing, as the song is credited to other musicians in the first para and this version to Kendrick herself in the second para.
 * A. P. Carter wrote the song for his band The Carter Family. Heloise Tunstall-Behrens and Luisa Gerstein reworked the song for their group Lulu and the Lampshades, and added the famous cup percussion. Kendrick covered Lulu and the Lampshades version, which became famous thanks to her.


 * Despite me having raised this multiple times, the 'background' section still does not have any background on how this song and the movie fits into Kenrick's career. Assume readers know nothing about her.
 * I have looked for hours and can't find anything on how the song helped Kendrick with her career.
 * I have zero idea who Kendrick is, and the article needs to provide some background on her and her career up to this point. Is she an actor, had she had any previous commercial musical success? etc, etc. Nick-D (talk) 08:49, 24 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Republic Records sought to capitalize on the song's popularity" - how did they know it was popular?
 * Back in 2013, I was in elementary school and EVERYONE would play the cup song. It was a huge trend in the United States. Here is an article to prove it.
 * The article needs to note this - it's just asserted out of the blue that it was popular. Nick-D (talk) 08:49, 24 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "and teamed up with Universal Pictures president of film music and publishing Mike Knobloc" - not clear what this means - what was his role? It's a bit odd that Kenrick isn't given any credit here - surely she was involved?
 * He helped promote the remix. Kendrick I am pretty sure did not know how to promote the song.
 * The text says he produced the song, not promoted it, and surely if a longer version was produced Kendrick had a hand in recording it, etc? Nick-D (talk) 08:49, 24 March 2021 (UTC)


 * " it made the Hot 100 a much more interesting place" - I don't understand what this means - what's the 'Hot 100', and why is it a locality?
 * I have removed it.


 * "Marcus Jones of Entertainment Weekly put "Cups" at number nine on his The best songs from movies of the 2010s list, which she believed would help Kendrick as a singer and set the foundation for Pitch Perfect to become a profitable film franchise" - did the writer think that listing the song would help Kendrick and the movie as this suggests? That doesn't seem right.
 * The writer wrote that "Cups" made Kendrick and Pitch Perfect even more known around the world.
 * But the wording of the sentence doesn't say that. It reads as the reviewer crediting herself with this - please review per my comment above. Nick-D (talk) 08:49, 24 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "directed by Moore and choreographed by Aakomon Jones.[24][60] Because of the track's success, record company executives asked Kendrick to make its music video" - confusing: did Moore, Jones or Kendrick make the video?
 * Jason Moore directed the video. Aakomon Jones choreographed it.

- as noted previously, this is trivia Nick-D (talk) 00:29, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "Kendrick hinted at its direction in an Instagram post that showed a photograph of an overturned cup in the midst of flour and dough"
 * Removed that section.
 * Nick-D I have replied to all of your comments. How does it look like now? The Ultimate Boss (talk) 22:32, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Any comments Nick-D? I don't want the FAC to close. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 04:39, 24 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Replied above. Nick-D (talk) 08:49, 24 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Nick-D I hope you can change to support now. I have gotten rid of Republic Records knowing the song was popular and the "teamed up with Universal Pictures president of film music and publishing Mike Knobloc" part. I have also removed the part "which she believed would help Kendrick as a singer and set the foundation for Pitch Perfect to become a profitable film franchise". I completely reworded the second para of the "background" section. How does it look? The Ultimate Boss (talk) 06:34, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Nick-D The FAC will close in a day or two. Are you still opposed even with me rewording and adding more background to the second para? The Ultimate Boss (talk) 19:42, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Yes, as you still haven't addressed all of my comments. I am sick of reiterating them, given that they then get ignored. Nick-D (talk) 01:24, 27 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments from HumanxAnthro

 * Gonna review this soon, but man does Nick-D give a lot of comments. I'll just say the sentence "Stacy Lambe of Entertainment Tonight noted how the track only became a hit after Kendrick performed it for Beca Mitchell's audition to be a Barden Bella," sounds more like commentary on the commercial performance than a reception opinion on the song itself. HumanxAnthro (talk) 17:28, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
 * HumanxAnthro I have moved it to the commercial performance section. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 21:08, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
 * HumanxAnthro could you possibly leave some comments this week? The Ultimate Boss (talk) 04:08, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

My apologies for being a bit delayed:
 * "While being interviewed on the Late Show with David Letterman in October 2012, Kendrick stated she taught herself to play the cup song after watching someone perform it on Reddit.[9] When she appeared on The Tonight Show Starring Jimmy Fallon, Kendrick said she came up with her character's "Cups" audition scene.[10]" I don't thinking bringing up the talk shows she was interview are relevant to this section and adds more needlesss fluff. Here's something more to-the-point: "Kendrick came up with her character's "Cups" audition scene,[10] having taught herself to play the cup song after watching someone perform it on Reddit.[9]" HumanxAnthro (talk) 12:50, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Changed
 * "It reached the top-30 in [...] both the Belgium Flanders and Wallonia charts.[58][59]" Nope. It was number 2 and 11 on the Ultratip chart, which is basically the Bubbling Under charts of Belgium's Ultratop 50. To simply put it, it wasn't a top 30 hit of Belgium. HumanxAnthro (talk) 12:52, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Removed
 * "Stacy Lambe of Entertainment Tonight noted how the track only became a hit after Kendrick performed it for Beca Mitchell's audition to be a Barden Bella.[54]" I think this is a more creative way of stating the song was successful due to the film, but it needs to be presented more formally. HumanxAnthro (talk) 12:57, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I have removed it since it didn't really add that much to the article.
 * HumanxAnthro thanks for the comments. Let me know if you have any other concerns. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 15:46, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
 * HumanxAnthro Any comments? The Ultimate Boss (talk) 20:35, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
 * My apologies, I got hooked up in a sugar detox, working on a GA nomination, and working on a Themes article for another film. I think the other comments reveal enough about the article, and it is getting attention from other users, so I'll leave it up to them. HumanxAnthro (talk) 20:38, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I'll say this: " Kelly Lawler from USA Today stated Kendrick's performance of "Cups" in Pitch Perfect is "cute and all" but that it was really not all that special.[33] She commended Kendrick's "spontaneous performance" of the song on the Late Show with David Letterman.[33]" I think this sentence would be more engaging if it had a contrast adverb in the middle: However, although, but HumanxAnthro (talk) 20:43, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
 * HumanxAnthro thanks a lot for the comments. Do you support? The Ultimate Boss (talk) 21:01, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
 * HumanxAnthro I don't want this FAC to close; do you support or oppose? The Ultimate Boss (talk) 04:48, 24 March 2021 (UTC)
 * No opinion. 👨x🐱 (talk) 11:37, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Accessibility review

 * The images in the body are missing alt text. Heartfox (talk) 03:56, 13 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Heartfox added both alts to the photos. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 04:41, 13 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments from K. Peake

 * On first glance, it is clear that you are not adhering to MOS:TABLECAPTION for the year-end charts and certifications. --K. Peake 16:29, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Kyle Peake I fixed it. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 04:08, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
 * You missed the 2014 year-end table, also I would like to suggest improving your usage of the title in the lead due to it being in the first para twice but not in the second para so much as even once. --K. Peake 13:04, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Kyle Peake Fixed. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 04:02, 22 March 2021 (UTC)
 * The usage of "the track" in the lead is uncalled for, when you should use "the song" for consistency. --K. Peake 12:30, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Changed. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 22:52, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
 * You still need to change "released a the" to "released as the", plus I take issue with the title not being mentioned directly in the second para especially when you mention "When I'm Gone" there – this could lead to confusion so both titles should be written. For FAC quality, I'd also recommend using the title once in the third para too. --K. Peake 11:03, 27 March 2021 (UTC)

Drive-by comment from ChrisTheDude

 * Don't have time right now to do a full review, but one thing that jumped out at me: "The song was originally written by A. P. Carter and British musicians Heloise Tunstall-Behrens and Luisa Gerstein" - this gives the impression that the three wrote the song together, but as Carter died in November 1960, roughly 25 years before the other two were even born, this cannot possibly be true. Presumably the other two re-worked Carter's original song?  This needs to be clarified..... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 17:16, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
 * ChrisTheDude I have changed it. How does it look now? The Ultimate Boss (talk) 03:55, 22 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Spot on! :-) -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 08:20, 22 March 2021 (UTC)
 * , this FAC is currently stalling. Would you be willing to support or leave further comments? P  anini 🥪 12:39, 26 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments from Panini
I will get to this one in the near future. P anini 🥪 17:19, 22 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments from LOVI33
Overall I would say this article could defiantly become FA in the future. Here are just a few concerns I have:
 * Are you sure pop should be included as a genre since it is a subgenre of Folk-pop?
 * Some of the sources I looked up called the song pop.


 * Remove mentions that the song has received positive reviews as that is considered WP:SYNTH
 * Reworded


 * Only American charts are included in the lead. I would mention other charts too. For example it entered the top 40 of charts in Canada, Ireland, the Netherlands and New Zealand. I would also say that airplay charts aren't notable for the lead
 * Changed to top 30 instead of top 40


 * Retitle the "Release" section to "Release and promotion" as it mentions remixes and live performances
 * Changed


 * In Commercial performance, there is definitely too much prose about the American market and not enough about International markets. Try to balance it out.
 * It mostly only did well in the United States. The song was a huge trend in the United States, and only American kids and teens (like myself) listened to the song back in 2013.


 * In Track listings, only the "Freedom! '90 x Cups (From Pitch Perfect 3)" version should be included as all the rest were released as part of an album, not standalone.
 * Also in that section, change "Digital download and Streaming" to "Digital download and streaming – Freedom! '90 mashup" or whatever you would call this version
 * I removed the Track listings section because "Freedom! '90 x Cups (From Pitch Perfect 3)"  was part of Pitch Perfect 3 soundtrack album.

Thats it from me. Best of luck getting this to FA. LOVI 33  18:28, 22 March 2021 (UTC)
 * LOVI33, Thanks a lot for the comments. Lmk if anything else needs to be changed. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 22:49, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Great! I would say it was unnecessary to remove Track listings as the mashup version was still released as a single, but not all articles include as section like that so I guess its okay. As for the Commercial performance section, the song seemed to have performed well in both Canada and the Netherlands as well as their respective airplay charts. You could mention that as well as how long it lasted on the charts and I'm sure there are other items. The section having so much prose on the American market when it also had decent performance worldwide isn't broad enough. You additionally haven't removed all instances of the song receiving positive reviews and there doesn't appear to be a source to back it up so please remove it. You could however mention that several critics praised/complimented/commented on/criticized some aspect of the song. Just looking over the article again, I have noticed several issues with the charts. The Australian, Austrian, Belgian (Flanders and Wallonia), Dutch (Single), and New Zealand refs are not working. All Canadian and American refs cite an archive-url as its url, please fix this. Additionally, the Irish ref doesn't back up it's peak and it appears the peak in Belgium Flanders is on its Ultratop chart, not Ultratip. For the refs in general, make sure all are archived. Also, I see inconsistent linking of works/websites. Either link a work/website on ref in its first instance or link it on every instance per guidelines at WP:OVERLINK. After having another in depth look at this article and finding all these issues, I'm going to have to oppose this nomination. However, if you fix all these issues you might convince me to think otherwise. Nevertheless, good luck with this article. LOVI  33  21:16, 24 March 2021 (UTC)
 * LOVI33 Ok. I have fixed all the charts for countries outside North America. Sadly, only archive links will work for American and Canadian charts as Billboard got rid of Anna Kendrick's chart performance page. If you just put the regular link, it'll say there is an error. I have also removed all instances of the song receiving positive reviews and added more prose about the song charting outside the United States. Does it look good to changed to support now? The Ultimate Boss (talk) 23:43, 24 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Unfortunately, yes. For one, you spelled Flanders wrong: it should be Flanders not Flander. Most of these you can use for, which I highly recommend. You didn't need to remove the Irish chart, I found it here (which you can also use the template for). For the Canadian and American charts, you need to set the current urls as archive-urls and set the url-status as dead.  LOVI  33  04:32, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * LOVI33 I can't use the as the single title "Cups (Pitch Perfect's "When I'm Gone)" has quotes in the title. When I put that title it just redirects me to the search bar. I also added archive-urls and set the url-status as dead for the Canadian and American charts. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 07:19, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Ok I can now see that the template cannot be used. However I think it should be mimicked as best as possible. Please make these changes:
 * Belgium (Ultratop Flanders) → Belgium (Ultratop 50 Flanders)
 * Belgium (Ultratip Wallonia) → Belgium (Ultratip Wallonia)
 * Canada AC (Billboard) → Canada AC (Billboard)
 * Canada CHR/Top 40 (Billboard) → Canada CHR/Top 40 (Billboard)
 * Canada Hot AC (Billboard) → Canada Hot AC (Billboard)
 * US Billboard Hot 100 (Billboard) → US Billboard Hot 100
 * US Adult Contemporary (Billboard) → US Adult Contemporary (Billboard)
 * US Adult Top 40 (Billboard) → US Adult Top 40 (Billboard)
 * US Mainstream Top 40 (Billboard) → US Mainstream Top 40 (Billboard)
 * I have also noticed that both the French and British chart refs aren't working. Please fix this. LOVI  33  17:11, 27 March 2021 (UTC)

Comment by Mr rnddude
I don't know if I'll be doing a detailed review for the article, but I notice on skim read that there are a fair quanitity of short choppy sentences, some of which could be merged to improve the flow of the writing. I'll give a couple examples below:
 * " "Cups" incorporates lyrics from the 1931 song "When I'm Gone" by the Carter Family. It was originally written by A. P. Carter." - The second sentence could be incorporated into the former, along the lines of: " ... from the 1931 song "When I'm Gone" written by A. P. Carter for the Carter Family".
 * " British musicians Heloise Tunstall-Behrens and Luisa Gerstein, who performed under the group name Lulu and the Lampshades, reworked the Carter Family's version. They were the first musical act to use the cup game as the song's percussion.[a] " - These two sentences aren't exactly short, but the significance of the first sentence is contained within the second. There are likely finer ways to rewrite this, but a simple example would be: " British musicians Heloise Tunstall-Behrens and Luisa Gerstein, who performed under the group name Lulu and the Lampshades, reworked the Carter Family's version and introduced the cup game as the song's percussion.[a] "

Some other comments:
 * " In 2011, Anna Burden covered Lulu and the Lampshades' rendition of "Cups" and uploaded it to YouTube " - Lulu and the Lampshades' did not make a rendition of "Cups", they made a rendition of "When I'm Gone".
 * Changed


 * " American actress and singer Anna Kendrick first discovered "Cups" " - You don't need to say 'first' here, she didn't make a second or third 'discovery' of the same thing. She also did not discover "Cups" as that is not a title the song had prior to her adaptation. Unlike Vulture, Glamour does not replicate this mistake: "Kendrick's character, Beca, decides to audition for her college's all-female a cappella group (the Barden Bellas) by randomly hitting cups on the floor and singing "When I'm Gone" with no background music ... Way before Pitch Perfect happened, she actually found people on the Internet who had performed the song a cappella with cups and learned it secondhand—just for fun." Also, the Glamour article is non-specific about where she found the song, is it some other article which states she found it on Reddit? I looked at the Vulture article as well, and it isn't direct in saying she saw it on Reddit, and the video itself was uploaded to YouTube, so how do you know where Kendrick came across it?
 * I have changed "Cups" to "the song". Also, In an interview with David Letterman, Kendrick said: "I saw this viral video on Reddit, and it's just this girl doing this thing with the cups and, again, because I'm a huge loser, I thought the best way to spend an entire afternoon would be like watching this video 50 times and teaching myself how to do it."


 * " for an audition scene where Mitchell tries out for a college a cappella singing group, the Barden Bellas " - An audition, by definition, is 'trying out for' something. Rephrase this to cut out the repetition: "for a scene in which Mitchell auditions for a college a cappella singing group, the Barden Bellas".
 * Changed


 * " The remix version has a new bridge section and a folk pop string arrangement, and features guitar and xylophone. It was produced by Pitch Perfect director Jason Moore, Julia Michels, Julianne Jordan, and the Underdogs, and was extended by an additional minute. " - The first sentence tells us what's different about the remix to the original, the second tells us who produced it... and then tells us another thing that is different between the remix and original. That should have been done in the first sentence: "The remix features a new bridge section, a folk pop string arrangement, guitar and xylophone, and has been extended by a minute."
 * Changed


 * " Kendrick uses a plastic cup to play the song and claps the rhythm. " - In her audition for the role, or in the movie?
 * Added that she used it for her characters audition scene.


 * Also, is it necessary to state that " "Cups" is a folk pop and pop song ". Folk pop is (presumably) a branch of pop, it's included in the name 'folk pop' so why repeat yourself. It seems to be like saying 'the Subaru XV is a sport-utility and utility vehicle'.
 * Removed Pop

Those are my comments on a skim read of the 'Background and composition' section of the article. Mr rnddude (talk) 17:09, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Mr rnddude How does the article look now? The Ultimate Boss (talk) 19:40, 26 March 2021 (UTC)

Coordinator comment
This nomination has a well-reasoned oppose, which has been outstanding since the day it opened, and no supports. I can see that you have been working on this above, but unless there are significant changes to the level of support for promotion over the next day or two this is liable to be archived. Gog the Mild (talk) 11:29, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I think it might be fair for this to be closed, with no prejudice against Ultimate Boss - whose blind eyed perseverance I quite respect, as I was like that too when at a similar age. Boss has gotten good feedback, but friend, please.please.please absorb it this time, act to resolve, and we may see you back with a successful nom at a later date. As a side note, I sort of dislike the song but think the article has potential. I promised before, but commit here and now that will sign off before (as best I can) any further nom, as to be fair to Ultimate, I gave false hope before. Ceoil  (talk) 17:23, 27 March 2021 (UTC)
 * It is disappointing that this article is being frequently renominated with comments left in previous reviews being still unaddressed. At best this is sloppy editing, but it's also starting to feel like an attempt to game the system by hoping that a different combination of editors will turn up and not notice the problems other editors have pointed out. Nick-D (talk) 21:51, 27 March 2021 (UTC)

I think there's pretty clear consensus to close this now, work on outstanding issues from this and earlier reviews, and return in due course -- preferably, in my view, after another PR, formal or informal. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 00:08, 28 March 2021 (UTC)

Ian Rose (talk) 00:09, 28 March 2021 (UTC)