Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Daisy (advertisement)/archive1

Daisy (advertisement)

 * Nominator(s): Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 02:20, 17 September 2021 (UTC)

Although aired just once, "Daisy" ad is referred to as one of the most controversial, yet most popular political advertisement. The ad was broadcast on September 7, 1964, with the intention of highlighting Lyndon B. Johnson's anti-war and anti-nuclear positions. However, the ad in-turn was interpreted as an attack ad on Barry Goldwater (Johnson's opponent in the election) and his positions on nuclear weapon. Immediately after its broadcast, the ad was pulled off, but it was frequently replayed and analyzed by network news. Johnson won the 1964 presidential election in a landslide victory, defeating Goldwater by a margin of almost 15 million votes. The Daisy ad is considered a significant reason was his victory, and is considered a turning point in political and advertising history. The article is almost re-written by me, it passed its DYK nomination, GA nomination and received its peer review comments from various editors. Thanks to all reviewers in advance. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 02:20, 17 September 2021 (UTC)

Image review — Pass

 * Image licensing looks good. (t &#183; c)  buidhe  04:25, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * But the further reading section not so much. For featured article it is expected that if the source has something significant to add to the article, it should be cited, otherwise if there's nothing to add it probably isn't relevant enough or adding enough information to be worth putting in further reading. In particular the book that's specifically about the ad and not cited seems like a major oversight and something that makes me doubt this short article is fully comprehensive. (t &#183; c)  buidhe  04:25, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * @ In my opinion, the "Daisy Petals and Mushroom Clouds" book fits better in the Further reading section. Despite its title, the book is focused on Atomic theme and the 1964 electioni.e. the information already included in the Background sections of this article using various other sources. Despite the article's length (13,207 characters), I feel that all main aspects of the ad are covered. I have removed few books from the Further reading section which I feel aren't adding enough information related to the ad. Hope that addressed your concern. Thanks!  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:03, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * @ Just a note that the book is now added as a source. Do let me know if you have any further concerns.  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:27, 17 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments by Nick-D
It's good to see this important article at FAC, but I don't think that the FA criteria are met at present due to the sourcing issue noted above, as well as some other gaps:
 * "It remains one of the most popular political advertisements" - popular seems an odd choice of word, and the reference here to a 1964 NYT story obviously doesn't support such a claim (is the ref really needed in the lead?)
 * Removed Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 12:56, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * The lead should note how Goldwater was perceived before the ad - like all really powerful political ads, this played on how he was seen
 * Added Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:13, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "The principal work of Johnson's campaign" - this is a bit clunky
 * Rephrased Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 12:56, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "Despite his relatively high polling numbers, Johnson felt safe to use rhetorical techniques to ensure his victory" - to be blunt, this doesn't make sense - what's the contradiction?
 * Tried to rephrase. Johnson had high polling numbers, and could have won the election even without this ad. Still, he felt safe to broadcast a controversial ad, when it could have easily backfired his campaign. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 12:56, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * The article should discuss the anxieties Americans (quite rightly) were feeling about the risks of nuclear war at this time - it was less than two years after the Cuban missile crisis
 * Added a bit... Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 12:56, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * It's also odd to not see Johnson's ruthless political tactics not discussed
 * Honestly, I didn't feel the need to include this. Johnson had very limited role to play in the creation or broadcast of this ad. Moreover, the ad wasn't intended to be an 'attack ad', but that is how it was interpreted. Wouldn't it go a bit off topic to discuss his political tactics, which isn't directly related with the ad? Please suggest... Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 13:00, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "visualize their child in the role of Corzilius" - awkward
 * Tried to rephrase. Is it still awkward? Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 12:56, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * The scholarly book on this topic noted in the 'further reading' section needs to be consulted - I'm not at all confident that the FA sourcing requirements are met without this. The blurb for the book states that it covers this topic quite broadly, so it may be possible to considerably expand or deepen the article. Nick-D (talk) 11:27, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Doing...
 * I have addressed this point by using the book as a source in the article, and adding various things which were not mentioned in the article or other books. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:13, 17 September 2021 (UTC)

Hi @ Thanks a lot for your review. I have attempted to address all your concerns, and replied above. As for the sourcing, I have added Robert Mann's book. I hope that addressed your concern. Requesting you to take a second look at the article regarding your leaning oppose. Feel free to suggest anything else which you feel would make the article closer to meeting the FA criteria. Thanks! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:13, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * @ Is there something else I can do to improve the article, as I have already included Robert Mann's book.  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 06:18, 19 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I'm thinking about this, but I'm sceptical about how little you sourced from the academic book on this topic. The article also seems to be dodging around both the nature of Johnson's political tactics (he's famous for how ruthless his politics were) and how extreme Goldwater was. The ad was part and parcel of Johnson's tactics, and worked because Goldwater was seen as being genuinely dangerous. Nick-D (talk) 06:26, 19 September 2021 (UTC)
 * @ I have addressed these comments by making necessary changes in the article. Goldwater's extremism is mentioned by various instances in the article and I have added some more facts about his reaction to the ad. I feel that focusing more on his 'extremism' would make the article less neutral. Rest, I feel that the article covers all major aspects of a 60 second ad which was aired just once. Do let me know if the changes were not satisfactory. Thanks!  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 10:50, 19 September 2021 (UTC)


 * , I'm not sure if the "Doing..." template is able to be used as, per WP:FAC, "[g]raphics [...] slow down load time, and complex templates can lead to errors in the FAC archives." Pamzeis (talk) 05:29, 18 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Removed. Thanks! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 05:32, 18 September 2021 (UTC)
 * @ Given that various changes have been made in order to resolve all your comments, and the article is again copy-edited, do you still lean towards opposing this nomination? Of-course, you can suggest more changes, which I'll surely consider. Please take a second look.  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:11, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Shifted to just 'comments' until I read this more closely. Nick-D (talk) 10:57, 23 September 2021 (UTC)

From a further read: @ Done both. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 05:48, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Goldwater defended himself by charging Johnson with making the accusation indirectly and contending that the media blew the issue out of proportion" - it's not clear what this means, and the wording is close to the source. What the source is is unclear as well.
 * Removed the part about 'making the accusation indirectly', and just mentioned that media interpreted that Goldwater would use nuclear weapons, which Goldwater defended by saying that they [media] 'blew the issue out of proportion'. Hope that its clear now. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 05:48, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * The first and second sentences in the para starting with 'The Johnson campaign portrayed' don't flow well, and the second sentence doesn't seem to fit well with the last sentence of this para. Nick-D (talk) 05:08, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * The second sentence and the last sentence were somewhat contradicting each other, so I rephrased both of them for increasing the flow. Johnson did had high polling numbers, but that wasn't because of his accomplishments as the president, but because of Goldwater and his extreme statements. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 05:48, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Sorry, but that revised wording is generally awkward and partly contradictory, and you haven't responded to my comment about what that source is. Nick-D (talk) 07:05, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * @ I have further rephrased that, and now it isn't contradictory. Please excuse if I am mistaken here, but as for the source, it is an essay from Kennesaw State University, Georgia, and should be reliable. However, I'll leave it to the source reviewer to decide the reliability. Thanks!  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:39, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Who is the author of the article, and what is their status? It reads like an undergraduate essay, though may be course material aimed at undergraduates. The wording in the article remains short of FA-level prose I'm afraid. Nick-D (talk) 22:02, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * So I looked for any alternative source, but wasn't able to find any reliable newspaper/website/book/journal having the exact quote (with one impulsive act....) So I just removed the two sentences supported by that source, and merged the paragraph for flow. As for the article's prose, it was again copy-edited by a member of WP:GOCE on my request after your initial comments. I'll see what I can do, but I don't quite feel that it needs much work. Let's see what other reviewers think. Any further comments/suggestions to strengthen the prose are always welcome. Thanks! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 06:42, 3 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Hi, sorry to press you, but should I be reading your comments as an "oppose", at least at the moment? Gog the Mild (talk) 11:58, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * no worries at all - I should have posted a follow up comment. I'm neutral at present: I still don't think that the prose is an example of our best work (the first para of the background section, for instance, doesn't flow particularly well), but it's not greatly problematic. I have have no objection to the nomination being promoted, but can't support it. Nick-D (talk) 07:19, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks Nick-D! Just wanted to say that it is completely fine. Your comments were really helpful, and they helped in improving the article. Much appreciated! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:29, 18 October 2021 (UTC)

Comments Support from Grapple X
Some passing comments for now, hopefully will get a fuller review over the next day or so.
 * Initially struck that we have a still from the ad in the infobox and then the full ad embedded later; given that the video's thumbnail is the same image as the screenshot is there any reason we couldn't just use the video in the infobox?
 * I just shifted the video from "Synopsis" section to the infobox. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:22, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
 * He often used various rhetorical techniques including the famous "Johnson Treatment" to gather votes in the senate—I don't think we need to get bogged down in too much detail but a brief gloss as to what the "Johnson Treatment" actually is would be a good idea, alternatively Lyndon B. Johnson has a meaty quote which explains it and could be linked to here (as "the famous "Johnson Treatment" perhaps) to provide context.
 * Linked. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:22, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
 * notably mocking his campaign slogan "In your heart, you know he's right" with the counter-slogan "In Your Guts, You Know He is Nuts"—Why is one of these in sentence case and the other in title case? No strong preference for either but surely they should both be consistent
 * Done Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:22, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
 * who proclaimed, "We will bury you! Your children will be Communists!"—I'm not a fan of introducing a quote with a comma when one wouldn't be present if the quote wasn't in quote marks; but in any case as a multiple-sentence quote this should more properly be introduced with a colon per WP:MOS
 * Replaced with a colon Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:22, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
 * that "[at] the next level, [they could] really run a savage assault: a billboard, e.g., [could] be devised reading 'Goldwater in 64—Hotwater in 65?' with a mushroom cloud in the background."—There's a bit of legwork being done here to keep this quote flowing; is it better to quote less of it (just the proposed slogan perhaps) and paraphrase the rest?
 * Removed some less important part of the quote, and rephrased the rest. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:22, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "Vote for President Johnson on November 3[rd]" —The date formatting throughout the article doesn't use ordinals like "3rd", it's strange to interpolate one here if it's not necessary.
 * The ordinals are added here just because they were used in the advertisement too. Nothing much to do with date consistency in the article, as they are inside the quotes. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:22, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
 * The video just displays "November 3", which would be consistent with the rest of the date usage internally too. I think we could drop the "[rd]".
 * Yeah, the video just displays November 3, but the voice-over reads it as "November third". However, this is a minor point, and I can drop the "[rd]" if necessary. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 12:35, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Might be a good idea to attribute the Auden comparisons to who's making them; were they being drawn at the time or is this a retrospective analysis?
 * Make no mistake, there's no such thing as a 'conventional nuclear weapon' .... To do so now is a political decision of the highest order. It would lead us down an uncertain path of blows and counter-blows whose outcome none may know.—Seems to be a four-dot ellipsis in there
 * Fixed Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:22, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Eisenhower replied – "Barry, in my mind, this is actual tommyrot."—fronting a quote with a dash like this is inconsistent with the rest of the article
 * Fixed Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:22, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
 * they were trying to use what the voters already knew"—Missing a full stop here, whether you want it in or out of the quote marks.
 * Added Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:22, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
 * A minor point but the quote box in the last heading runs alongside a block quote which looks a little jarring; might be worth looking at moving the quote box template up a paragraph to remove that overlap. It should lose no context as it's clear what its connection is within the heading.
 * Shifted the quote box Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:22, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I feel like we're good as far as information and historical context goes and there does seem to be a good breadth of sourcing; I can't comment to 's reservations on this but as a lay reader I was not struck by any obvious gaps in context. That said I think the prose strength is where we need most focus; I'm not a confident copy-editor at FA standards but I still found a few inconsistencies and errors, which should be easily addressed but likely aren't exhaustive. As this is still a fresh nomination and will likely have more breathing time here, it may be worth asking at WP:GOCE/R if anyone is able to give it a once-over. I'll take another look at it during the week to see if I can't come up with anything else. That said it's an interesting subject and I do enjoy these deep-dives on narrower fields. 𝄠ʀᴀᴘᴘʟᴇ ꭗ 14:17, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Changes look good so far. I'll be able to return to this in more depth tomorrow hopefully. 𝄠ʀᴀᴘᴘʟᴇ ꭗ 15:56, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
 * @ Thanks for your comments. I had request User:Twofingered Typist to take a look at the article, and he was kind enough to help further copy edit the article. Do let me know of you have any further comments or suggestions.  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 12:49, 22 September 2021 (UTC)

Taking a second sweep through now. @ Just a courtesy ping that are you in a position of either supporting or opposing this nomination. And of-course, feel free to add any more comments if required. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 11:56, 30 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Lead mentions that the ad is also sometimes known as "Peace, Little Girl" but this isn't mentioned elsewhere--some of the sources use the name in their titles so it shouldn't be difficult to work this in.
 * Added in the prose that the ad wad initially known as "Peace, Little Girl" Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:06, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
 * A few duplicate links; Corzillus' name and the Democratic National Convention both appearing more than once
 * Fixed. The tool now tells "No duplicated links were detected" Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:06, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Looking at the mention of the 84 Mondale advert--I don't know that the information presented is enough to really justify a link; can we get a direct comparison drawn to this?
 * While researching, I got a perfect citation for this; added a line which further justifies why the ad was similar to "Daisy". Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:06, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
 * We still don't mention an explicit comparison between the two; it's not enough to just describe superficial similarity without a source already making an explicit link between them (this is the same issue with the Auden material below). Looking at the Spokane Chronicle source, it does make direct reference to the Daisy advert, stating Mondale [...] seeks, without the subtlety of Lyndon B Johnson's 1964 ad etc. So the source does draw direct parallels here but we don't mention that. You don't need to directly quote the comparison but do use that source to state plainly that comparisons were drawn to the earlier advert when the Mondale one aired.
 * Now mentioned that the ad was compared with Daisy, for having similar nuclear themes. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:09, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Still would like to see attribution when we're comparing the advert to that Auden poem, I'm not keen on doing that in wikipedia's voice.
 * Did I address this? If not, could you please further clarify this point. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:06, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
 * What I mean is that "Johnson's line: "We must either love each other, or we must die" echoes line 88 of W.H. Auden's poem "September 1, 1939", which reads: "We must love one another or die."" is stated as a matter of fact, and while yes we can see looking at the lines that they're extremely similar, we really should be attributing the comparison to someone who has made it in a reliable source. The source you've added, Taylor 1992, does this just discuss Auden's poem or does it explicitly describe the similarity between the two?
 * Ah, I see. The comparison of similarity between the ad and Auden's poem is discussed in this source, which says ""Decades earlier, Lyndon B. Johnson drew on another line from the poem [September 1, 1939] in his famous 1964 "Daisy" campaign commercial ..."". I have cited that. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:09, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Speaking of Auden, in the excerpt quoted, it seems the italic emphasis on the last line is not in the original; since we already highlight it in prose I don't think we need the italics here
 * Fixed. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:06, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "the White House switchboard "lit up with calls protesting it [the advertisement]""—I think rather than the aside here, we could go with "the White House switchboard "lit up with calls" protesting the advertisement"
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:06, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "When Corzilius was unable to count to ten successfully during filming, it was decided that a miscount might be more appealing to the voters"—I know it's what's used in the source but given that we're talking about voting, I don't know if "miscount" is the best word here; perhaps "When Corzilius was unable to count to ten successfully during filming, it was decided that her mistakes might be more appealing to the voters."
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:06, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
 * All for now. 𝄠ʀᴀᴘᴘʟᴇ ꭗ 13:05, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
 * @ Addressed all. Thanks for taking a second look.  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:06, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
 * @ Hi! The previous 2 points raised were probably resolved. Any follow-ups?  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 11:55, 27 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I still don't see the point regarding Auden has having been addressed but perhaps I wasn't explaining myself correctly. It's not that I would like to see more sources cited as footnotes, but that an actual attribution to the person making the comparison is what I feel we should be using. Instead of saying the two are alike, and then appending a citation, we need to point out that someone has made that comparison for us. You can name the writer specifically ("journalist Maureen Corrigan has noted that Johnson's line: "We must either love each other, or we must die" echoes line 88 of W.H. Auden's poem...") or make the attribution in a passive voice ("It has been noted that...", although this should really be used if there's a wider sampling of sources than just this one). My point is that it is preferable to ensure that this kind of literary analysis is clearly being attributed to third-party sources and not to Wikipedia's voice (which is essentially the difference between stating a fact and citing it, and stating that someone believes a fact and quoting them). I hope this makes more sense. 𝄠ʀᴀᴘᴘʟᴇ ꭗ 13:27, 27 September 2021 (UTC)
 * @ Yeah, and now done, both for Auden and Mondale ad.  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 13:45, 27 September 2021 (UTC)


 * I think at this point enough work has been done to address my concerns; I am prepared to support at this time. 𝄠ʀᴀᴘᴘʟᴇ ꭗ 20:24, 30 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your review and support. Much appreciated. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 08:01, 1 October 2021 (UTC)

Support by Lee Vilenski
I'll begin a review of this article very soon! My reviews tend to focus on prose and MOS issues, especially on the lede, but I will also comment on anything that could be improved. I'll post up some comments below over the next couple days, which you should either respond to, or ask me questions on issues you are unsure of. I'll be claiming points towards the wikicup once this review is over.


 * Lede
 * only once officially - officially only once. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:04, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 08:49, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * DDB isn't used again in the lede, so no need to acronym it here. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:04, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Removed the acronym from the lead. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 08:49, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * emphatically, "These - do we need a caps here? Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:04, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * We need. The quotations is a complete sentence.
 * The lede should probably mention which party each candidate stood for. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:04, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I now mentioned that Goldwater was a Republican. Mentioning the Johnson was a Democrat would be reluctant, as it should be self explanatory, given that DNC is listed as a client in the infobox. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 08:49, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Prose
 * percent - per cent is two words. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:13, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Changed to '%' all over for consistency. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 08:49, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * According to Press Secretary Moyers, the White House switchboard "lit up with calls" protesting the advertisement; President Johnson called him and asked, "Jesus Christ, what in the world happened?" - this probably needs a bit of expansion. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:13, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:14, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * said, "Make no mistake, - the caps for quotes happens a few times. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:13, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I re-read the article, and have removed caps where they are unnecessary. Usually, direct quotations which start with a new sentence take caps. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 08:49, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "Barry, in my mind, this is actual tommyrot. - what? Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:13, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Rephrased. Tommyrot is inside quotations, so can't rephrase that. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 08:56, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "Ice-cream ad". - is this a quote? Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:13, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * No, removed the quotations. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 08:49, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * The WP:SEEALSO section is a bit of a mess. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:13, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Maybe now its better. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 08:49, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * History is currently listed as an unreliable source. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 08:13, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Replace both citations from History with another sources. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 08:49, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Hi @ Thanks for the review. Any followups?  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 11:46, 1 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Additional comments

Additionally, if you liked this review, or are looking for items to review, I have some at my nominations list. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:54, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Hi @ Just a kind reminder for your comments.  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:58, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * @ Thanks for your comments. I have addressed all of them.  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:17, 28 September 2021 (UTC)

Spot check and source review — Pass
Version initially reviewed this. Current Ref numbers may differ. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 08:13, 3 October 2021 (UTC) Actually, I reviewed this version Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 08:15, 3 October 2021 (UTC)

There is a pretty heavy reliance on newspapers in this article, always a worrisome sign as they tend to be so-so sources (sensationalism, getting basic facts wrong etc.). And here they are even many contemporary ones... Beyond that the sourcing's OK.

I note some inconsistencies, with some sources having archives and others lacking them. Spot-check:
 * I again ran the IA bot, and it archived 6 sources. Do I need to manually archive the rest? Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:29, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Eh, I don't think so. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 18:50, 2 October 2021 (UTC)

Imma ping for a second opinion on the various newspaper sources (WaPo, NYT etc.) Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 15:36, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * 44: OK, but I see that it calls the ad "Daisy Chain"?
 * Honestly, I don't know why, when no other major source calls it "Chain"
 * Fair enough. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 18:50, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * 47: OK.
 * 63: OK.
 * 8: Can I have a copy of this article?
 * Just see the archived link. It has the complete article. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:29, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "This page is not available on the web because page does not exist"? Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 18:50, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * @ Well, the archived link does open for me. Do I need to send screenshots?  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 08:15, 3 October 2021 (UTC)
 * 80: Can I have a copy of this article?
 * It's behind a paywall..... Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:29, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * 18: Can I have a copy of this article?
 * Available on Open library, free registration. Here is the link.
 * 13: Can I have a copy of this article?
 * Just see the archived link. It has the complete article. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:29, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Seems to check out. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 18:50, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * 6: OK.
 * 60: OK.
 * 66: OK but the text is very similar to the source.
 * Nothing much to rephrase, but tried. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:29, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * 11: Which part of the source supports this claim?
 * Ref#10 supports Goldwater voting against Nuclear Test Ban Treats, and this source supports the treaty passing from the Senate by a vote of 80-14. Quoting the source ""The U.S. Senate votes to provide its advice and consent for ratification of the LTBT by a vote of 80 to 14.""  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:29, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * 53: OK.
 * 25: Can I have a copy of this article?
 * Currently, I don't have this book in physical format or PDF format. Neither is this available anywhere online, except the site, where it shows a few part of every chapter of the book. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:29, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * 5: Can I have a copy of this article?
 * Just see the archived link. It has the complete article. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:29, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * 29: I don't see Ehrlich mentioned here, is that in the other source?
 * Yeah. In one of the three sources. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:29, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * 65: OK.
 * 77: OK.
 * 82: OK.
 * 40: Can I have a copy of this article?
 * Available on Open library, free registration. Here is the link.
 * 16: Can I have a copy of this article?
 * Available on Open library, free registration. Here is the link.
 * @ Provided copy of all the articles you requested which I could. As for the newspapers part, many FA's that rely on newspaper, and I don't think that it is an issue, provided that the newspaper is a reliable one. I have always considered The New York Times and The Washington Post reliable sources. And I don't think that I have cited any newspaper, which doesn't has a Wikipedia article (i.e. all are notable enough).  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:29, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
 * @ Any updates on remaining spot-checks and sourcing?  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:20, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * I don't think so. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 09:47, 5 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Do let me know if there's anything else I can do for the source review to be passed. Thanks for your help! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 10:02, 5 October 2021 (UTC)

@ Can you please provide a second opinion on some newspaper sources (like The New York Times, The Washington Post, etc.)  used in this article? Are they unreliable to use? Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:33, 7 October 2021 (UTC)
 * If I understand Jo-Jo Eumerus correctly, the concern is not simply are these reliable yes/no, but are they overused. Those particular papers are not unreliable in general, and on a quick look I'm not seeing any that raise red flags. But in terms of overreliance, can you speak to your approach to locating sources for this article? Nikkimaria (talk) 22:32, 7 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Well, the way I would go about this is to first start with academic sources and to only use newspapers to illustrate how the topic was covered in contemporary coverage and to cover uncontroversial facts. But upon thinking more, I am not sure anymore that this article is overusing news sources so I'll retract this concern. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 09:04, 8 October 2021 (UTC)
 * That is what I tried. Most of the newspaper sources are used in the "Political usage and aftermath" section, discussing about the contemporary coverage of the ad. I initially tried to cite this article completely using books/journals. But, to comprehensively discuss about immediate aftermath and later uses, newspapers seems helpful. Thanks! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:13, 8 October 2021 (UTC)
 * @ Just a kind reminder that the nomination in nearing a month, but the source review and spot-checks are still pending. I have responded to all the previous concerns. Would appreciate if you can take a second look. Thanks!  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:48, 14 October 2021 (UTC)
 * I think this passes the source and spot check reviews. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 12:27, 14 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks a lot! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 13:01, 14 October 2021 (UTC)

Pamzeis — support
Not a politics person... I will try not to screw this up. I'll hopefully leave more comments later. Ping me if I don't reply within a week! Pamzeis (talk) 14:29, 6 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Unlink United States in the infobox per MOS:OL
 * Sure, done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:48, 6 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "was a controversial — does the ad not exist anymore? If it still does, I believe "was" should be "is" per MOS:TENSE
 * Here, 'was' is used as the ad has never been broadcast since 1964. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:48, 6 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "point in political and advertising history" — firstly, I don't understand why "political" links to politics in the United States. The article suggests it's just political history in general. If not, then, I would suggest adjusting the article to highlight that it is political history in the US. If so, then unlink it because linking politics would be an overlink. Unlink "advertising" as well.
 * Unlinked both. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:48, 6 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "advertising agency and [...] created the Daisy advertisement" — not keen on having "advertising" and "advertisement" in the same sentence...
 * Rephrased. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:48, 6 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Immediately after its initial broadcast" — remove "initial" as redundant
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:48, 6 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "several times by media, like the" — "like" seems a bit informal here. I'd suggest changing it to "such as"
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:48, 6 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Per MOS:LEADLENGTH, I would recommend having only one to two paragraphs as this article has, by my count, approximately 13,000 characters
 * Well, the article was copy edited by User:Twofingered Typist, who suggested to break it into 4 paras, as every para deals with a separate subject. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:48, 6 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "the assassination of his predecessor John F. Kennedy" — is Kennedy the only predecessor? If so, add a comma after "predecessor"
 * Well, all the presidents who served before Johnson (35 men) were his predecessors, but Kennedy was his immediate predecessor. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:48, 6 October 2021 (UTC)
 * I'm not great with active and passive tenses but: "Johnson was seen by many as a ruthless politician effective at getting legislation passed." → Many saw Johnson as a ruthless politician effective at getting legislation passed. (To be more concise and, I think, convert to active tense)
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:48, 6 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Hi @ Thanks a lot for taking a look. I have addressed/replied above. Feel free to add any further comments.  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:48, 6 October 2021 (UTC)

More comments: Ping me after these are resolved! Pamzeis (talk) 03:33, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Try not to have ad, advertisement, advertising, etc. in the same sentence
 * Tried to address this issue. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "although the true authorship is unclear" — authorship meaning writer? Creator? Visual effect creator? The last thing mentioned is the ad's visual effects though this sentence seems to suggest creator. I would appreciate something more specific.
 * I guess that the sentence structure quite clearly says that the 'authorship' here means authorship for visual effects. Any suggestion as to how to make it more clear without repeating it? Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * I've reworded this but feel free to revert me if you dislike the wording.
 * "with a young girl, three-year-old Monique Corzilius" — I believe "young girl" is redundant: "young" is vague and three-year-old conveys the meaning much better; I believe "Monique Corzilius" will already tell the reader that she is a girl.
 * Removed. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "missile launch countdown" — linking countdown seems to be a bit of an overlink
 * Removed. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "The blackness is replaced instantly by the bright flash" → A bright flash instantly replaces the blackness
 * Rephrased. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "scene then cuts to footage" — omit the redundant "then"
 * Removed. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "on November 3[rd]" — I do not believe the "rd" is necessary per MOS:BADDATE
 * Since you and Grapple X both have mentionned this, I have removed the '[rd]'. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "September 7, 1964 telecast of" — add a MOS:DATECOMMA after "1964"
 * Added. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "of David Bathsheba on The NBC Monday Movie. As the David and Bathsheba film" — can this possibly be reworded to avoid repetition of "David and Bathsheba"?
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "film was based on a biblical story, it was considered a family film" → film is based on a biblical story, it is considered a family film (MOS:TENSE)
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "that about a hundred million people" — "about" sounds a bit informal to me. Perhaps replace it with "approximately" or "roughly"?
 * Replaced with 'approximately'. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Fears of nuclear war were related to the audience by a young girl eating ice cream." — I'm confused here. How can a young girl eating ice cream connect to fears of nuclear war? Can we elaborate here?
 * Done (hopefully) Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 05:15, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Other notable commercials" — per MOS:OFCOURSE, try to replace or omit "notable"
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Other notable uses of the" — same as above
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * The quote box in #Political usage and aftermath serves no clear purpose
 * Removed. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Another child actor, Birgitte Olsen, falsely claimed" — seems a bit sudden. Perhaps start with Corzilius and then talk about Olsen?
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Also remove the commas around "Birgitte Olsen"
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "has maintained that position for years" — does she still? If not, replace "has" with "had"
 * Maybe, she still does. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Corzilius became known publicly as the "Daisy" girl after this" — Huh? After what? Olsen's claim?
 * After the initial broadcast in 1964. Newspapers referred to that girl as the "Daisy" girl. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:44, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * I have tried to resolve all of your concern. Thanks! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 05:15, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Support — I've actually never heard of this ad before… But best of luck with this article. BTW, I'd appreciate any comments here :). Pamzeis (talk) 06:57, 9 October 2021 (UTC)

Comments Support on prose from Extraordinary Writ
As promised, I am here (although inexcusably late). I'll probably focus on prose, although I'll comment on anything that sticks out at me. I'm a bit busy right now, so bear with me if I take a while to get this done. More to come. Extraordinary Writ (talk) 03:57, 16 October 2021 (UTC) More later. Extraordinary Writ (talk) 06:30, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "to gather votes in the senate" – capitalize Senate.
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:34, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "he got the Civil Rights Act passed by Congress" – "got" is an unusual word choice, even if it's not technically wrong. Perhaps something like "he successfully urged Congress to pass the Civil Rights Act" would be more natural?
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:34, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "the ratification of Nuclear Test Ban Treaty" – the ratification of the Nuclear Test Ban Treaty
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:34, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "eventually passed through the senate" – capitalize Senate, and "passed the Senate" might be more natural.
 * Somewhat done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:34, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "They emphasized on Goldwater's extremism"– remove "on"
 * Removed. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:34, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "shouldn't have strontium-90 or cesium 37" – I'm not a chemist, but I know that cesium-37 is physically impossible. Are you sure the source doesn't say cesium-137?
 * Yeah, its cesium-137. Corrected and linked. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:34, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * In note b, I would link punitive damages and remove the quotation marks.
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:34, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Moyers later said: "It [Daisy ad] accomplished" – this should be "the Daisy ad", but it might be easier to get rid of the brackets and just write Moyers later said that the ad "accomplished its purpose..."
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:34, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Is there any rhyme or reason as to whether "Daisy" is in quotation marks or not? We have "created the Daisy advertisement" but "The "Daisy" advertisement has been used". I'm not sure it really matters which one you choose: all that matters is consistency.
 * Now, every instance, where "Daisy" is used to refer to the ad has quotation marks. Exceptions to this are places where Daisy is either inside direct quotations, or it refers to that flower which has very less to do with the ad, but still responsible for ad's title. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:53, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "telecast of David and Bathsheba film" – missing a "the". I'd recommend "of the film David and Bathsheba. (As an irrelevant sidenote, I'm baffled by why they'd think the story of David and Bathsheba would make a nice "family film", but that's neither here nor there.)
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:34, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "...leaving their parents watching the film, and eventually manipulated into visualizing their child in Corzilius's role" – this sentence is a bit unwieldy grammatically. It might be clearer to split it up into two sentences: I'm having trouble thinking of a good way to do that, but I'm sure you can come up with something.
 * Tried ... Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:34, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Immediately after its broadcast, the ad was pulled off the air" – was the ad supposed to have been shown again? You don't really touch on that.
 * No, it was not supposed to be shown again. Johnson's advisors had already planned to pull back the ad after its initial broadcast, believing that it will be pointless to repeat it. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:48, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * I see. When you say "the ad was pulled off the air", that implies (at least to me) that it was supposed to be shown again (or was being shown again) but was cancelled. If all you mean is that it was only shown once, it might be clearer to just say that explicitly. Extraordinary Writ (talk) 06:40, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Done. I just removed that sentence, as it has already been mentioned that the ad was broadcast just once. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:38, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Curious as I am about "Johnson's camping strategy", I presume I will only get to learn about his campaign strategy.
 * Oh... fixed! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:34, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "we all realized it [Daisy ad] would create" – in context, I think it's clear enough what "it" is referring to: the brackets aren't needed
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:34, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "told the Senate on September 16" – linking United States Senate is overlinking, in my view. (If you do really want to link it, you should do so earlier in the article, e.g. at "to gather votes in the Senate".)
 * Removed the link. I assume, most of the reader know what Senate is. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:34, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * ""actual tommyrot" – might be worth a link to tommyrot
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:34, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
 * @ Thanks a lot for your comments. Addressed all.  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:55, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

I think we're just about there as far as the prose is concerned; I'll read it through again later and that should be all. Cheers, Extraordinary Writ (talk) 06:40, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "one of the largest margins of the popular vote" – if you have the information, it might be worth giving the popular vote percentage.
 * Added. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:29, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "compared with the "Daisy" due to" – remove the "the", or otherwise add commercial/advertisement after "Daisy".
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:29, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "as one of their campaign ad" – one of their campaign ads. Also, this sentence uses the word "ad" three times: it's a bit repetitive.
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:29, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "see the "Daisy" commercial" – these should be single quotes (since it's a quote-within-a-quote), although I notice the original source doesn't use quotation marks at all.
 * That isn't quote-within-a-quote. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:38, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Although the MOS doesn't say so directly, I understand the usual convention to be that single quotation marks should also be used for a title-within-a-quote; see . This obviously isn't a hill I'm going to die on. Extraordinary Writ (talk) 06:30, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "after broadcast of the commercial" – after the broadcast
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:29, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "the commercial. Though, she did not see the "Daisy" commercial" – perhaps combine these sentences, e.g. "the commercial, although she did not..." (Starting this sort of sentence with "though" strikes me as wrong, although I can't quite place my finger on why.) Also, it might be worth adding "herself" (or "for herself") after "'Daisy' commercial", just to be clear.
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:29, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Another child actor Birgitte Olsen falsely claimed" – commas around "Birgitte Olsen"
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:29, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "a "sequel" to the ad" – might be worth stating the message of this ad: arguing that Trump (like Goldwater) was unfit to have access to the nuclear arsenal.
 * Done. Though I didn't Done, although I didn't compared him with Goldwater, as most source don't explicitly compare him that way. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:29, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "which argued Trump's ability to handle nuclear weapons." – I think you're missing a word or two.
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:08, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "you know he is nuts" – it's a contraction (he's nuts) in the source.
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:29, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "then-Soviet leader" – the then Soviet leader. (I think you can get rid of the hyphen too: a Google search suggests it isn't used.)
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:29, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * On footnote 53 ("LBJ's 1964 attack ad..." in the WaPo), you seem to have reversed the author's first and last names.
 * Nice catch. Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:29, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * @ Thanks again! I have addressed all your comments.  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:41, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

None of those nitpicks keep me from giving my support on prose: there are things that I might word differently, but I think the overall quality is adequate. Thanks for your hard work on this important article! Extraordinary Writ (talk) 06:30, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "over Republican Party's candidate Barry Goldwater" – "over the Republican Party's candidate..." or (my preference) simply "over Republican candidate..."
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:08, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "John P. Roohe" – per the source, I think it's "Roche".
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:08, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "25,033,262" and similar: per MOS:CURRENCY, inflation conversions should be rounded to two or three significant figures.
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:08, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "instantly replaces the blackness" – missing punctuation
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:08, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "this treaty [Nuclear Test Ban Treaty]." this treaty [the Nuclear...]
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:08, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks a lot for your support and kind word; I have addressed few remaining points. And congrats for Melville Fuller! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:12, 18 October 2021 (UTC)

Query for the coordinators

 * With 5 reviews, three of which have declared their support and one review in underway, as well as a passed image and source review
 * 1) May I nominate another article (Harry S. Truman 1948 presidential campaign) for FAC?
 * 2) Is this nomination on the right track? Thanks!  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 05:00, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Starting with 2, broadly yes, but it has some prose issues, as picked up by above. The prose needs to be "of a professional standard" if the article is to be promoted. Re 1, I think that we need to see what Nick's current view is on the prose before we ok a further nomination. Gog the Mild (talk) 12:09, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks . I'll surely wait to see what Nick-D thinks of the article, but I think that I have, at-least attempted to resolve their concerns. I'll be more than happy to address any further comments. Thanks! And as an aside note, thanks for promoting Draft Eisenhower movement yesterday, Gog! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 12:27, 17 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Yes, you may nominate another article. I haven't looked at Truman, but can I suggest that you take pains to ensure that "its prose is engaging and of a professional standard" - which, of course, it may well be already. Gog the Mild (talk) 10:57, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * @ I'll nominate it soon. I had opened a peer review page, which was reviewed by Hog Farm and DanCherek, and no major concerns were found. It has been copy-edited, so I think the prose may be fine. But can't predict what a reviewer will bring up; I'll be responsive to reviewer's concerns. Also, we now have 4 supports here ... Thanks!  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 11:18, 18 October 2021 (UTC)

Hi @ How is this one looking? Been open for a month, with 5 supports, passed image review, passed source review with spot-checks, and one neutral. Thanks! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 11:33, 19 October 2021 (UTC)

Support from Gog the Mild
Recusing to review. I shall copy edit as I go. If you don't like, or don't understand, anything, could you flag it up here. Gog the Mild (talk) 15:58, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Following the assassination of his predecessor John F. Kennedy, Lyndon B. Johnson was sworn in as president in November 1963." Link "president and state which country you are referring to.
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * What is a "local spot"?
 * "network ads" - likewise.
 * For both the above points: Both local spot and network ads are advertisements. Local spots were mostly broadcast then on radios on a smaller level by local advertisers, while Network ads were broadcast during prime-time in network programs, on a larger level. See this. Do you suggest me to add this in the article? I think it would be a bit off topic, but we can summarize it in a footnote. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * I should have explained, I like to ask rhetorical questions. I know what they are, but many readers won't. Ideally an FA should be readily comprehensible without a reader needing to consult Wikilinks or footnotes. In the case of technical topics they may be a necessary evil, but I am not sure that we have to break many readers concentration in this case by referring them to a footnote in order for them to understand what they have just read.
 * Tried to incorporate in the prose itself. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 05:08, 19 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "kick off" is WP:INFORMAL.
 * Fixed. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "The parent would eventually be manipulated into visualizing their child in Corzilius's role." This doesn't make sense to me. What in the sorce are you basing it on?
 * Somewhat rephrased. This source supports that.
 * "Schwartz suggested the ad "struck a responsive chord among the voters". As Schwartz was one of the ads creators he would say that, wouldn't he? Is there no unbiased opinion which could replace this? If not, better to delete I think.
 * Removed. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * What does "pulling the ad" mean? And is it WP:INFORMAL?
 * Rephrased. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Of the 1,800 replies received". Exactly 1,800?
 * Well, approximately. My bad ... Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Consider an in line explanation of "tommyrot".
 * Added "Nonsense" inside squared brackets. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * IMO the extended block quote on the ice-cream ad falls foul of MOS:QUOTE "While quotations are an indispensable part of Wikipedia, try not to overuse them. Using too many quotes is incompatible with an encyclopedic writing style ... It is generally recommended that content be written in Wikipedia editors' own words. Consider paraphrasing quotations into plain and concise text when appropriate". Especially given the heavy use of quotations throughout the article.
 * I tried. Can you please check for any issues there. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Other commercials included "Confessions of a Republican" and "Eastern Seaboard"." Either explain each or replace with a more general statement.
 * Removed. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * That seems to be losing worthwhile content. How would you feel about something like 'The Johnson campaign ran further advertisments in a similar vein, including "Confessions of a Republican" and "Eastern Seaboard".'?
 * Looks fine. Added back. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 05:08, 19 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "As of the 2020 presidential election, Johnson retains the victory with the highest popular vote percentage since the popular vote first became widespread in the 1824 presidential election." This does not make grammatical sense. "Johnson retains the victory"?
 * Rephrased. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "has maintained that position for years." Does that mean to this day? If so, say so. ('to at least late 2021'.)
 * Not sure. There are very few sources which even discuss this claim, with the most reliable one being cited. Removed the part ("maintained that position for years") Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "which argued Trump's ability to handle the nuclear weapons." I assume that this makes sense in US English. For a more international audience, perhaps 'which argued that Trump was incompetent to be in control of nuclear weapons' or similar?
 * Replaced. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Corzilius said, "The fear of nuclear war ..." In Clinton's ad, or seperately?
 * In the ad itself. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "when asked whether he approved the "Daisy" commercial". Do you mean that, or 'when asked whether he approved of the "Daisy" commercial'?
 * Done. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * The final block quote, see comments above on MOS:QUOTE.
 * This now remains the only "blockquote" in the article. Can try to incorporate it in the prose if you still insist, but I think its fine there. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * The two notes would seem to me better worked into the main text, especially the first one.
 * Added the first one. The second one is still bit off topic for the prose. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:55, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Fair enough.

Gog the Mild (talk) 17:08, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * @ Did most of them. Just suggestions/clarification needed as few points above. Thanks a lot!  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:59, 18 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Looking good. If I haven't responded to a point, assume I am content. Do shout if you don't like any of my copy editing. A couple of points I have come back on above. Gog the Mild (talk) 19:36, 18 October 2021 (UTC)
 * @ Thanks! Addressed the remaining 2 points.  Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 05:08, 19 October 2021 (UTC)

Apologies if I am missing something, but @, how is this one going? We have 5 supports, 1 neutral, passed image/source reviews. Thanks! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:28, 21 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Sorry KS, your earlier ping got lost amid a bunch of FACbot notifications to me. Can't see anything obvious needed, will walk through the article with a view to closure in due course. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 22:22, 21 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks! Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:21, 22 October 2021 (UTC)

Ian Rose (talk) 13:47, 22 October 2021 (UTC)