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Daniel Sedin

 * Nominator(s): Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 01:31, 31 May 2010 (UTC)

Daniel Sedin is a Swedish ice hockey player for the Vancouver Canucks who recently came off the best season of his career. I've successfully passed his twin brother Henrik Sedin's article through FAC the past week and have moved on to Daniel's article. As their careers have been played parallel to one another, the two articles are pretty similar. I've gone through Daniel's article to ensure it is up to the same standard as Henrik's FA article. This should hopefully bypass a lot of the revisions that were necessary to pass Henrik Sedin through FAC. Thanks. Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 01:31, 31 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Comment The 2007-08 season is only given one sentence. Given that he had a similar level of success in the other seasons before and after, what is the justification for this apparent lack of weight. The second and third season also seem a bit skinny. In one way, this may not be particularly surprising given that he was rather unproductive, but as he was re-signed immediately after, was there much speculation that he could have been dumped, traded or had his pay cut?  YellowMonkey  ( vote in the Southern Stars and White Ferns supermodel photo poll )  01:37, 31 May 2010 (UTC)
 * I've added a couple sentences to 2007-08, but I'm not sure I can find anything else for the time being to expand that season without it being somewhat trivial in comparison to what's mentioned in the rest of the article. The same goes for the second and third seasons, but I'll keep looking. In regards to speculation around his re-signing after the third season, I think the consensus was that they were in fact performing a little below expectations (not having improved on their rookie seasons points-wise), but as they were still developing, I don't think anyone but rabid fans wanted them gone. At any rate, I'll also keep on the lookout for any commentary in regards to that. Thanks for the comments! Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 22:21, 31 May 2010 (UTC)

Sources comments
 * If "USA Today" is a printed magazine the name should be italicised (see ref. 16 et al)
 * Ref 18: "The Sunday Gazette" is a fairly common newspaper name. Is it possible to locate this one geographically?
 * Ref 19: it's The New York Times, not New York Times
 * Ref 33: I think it's The Edmonton Journal
 * Ref 34 et al: I also think it's The Vancouver Sun

Otherwise sources seem OK. Brianboulton (talk) 13:06, 31 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for pointing those out. I believe I've fixed all the above concerns. Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 22:21, 31 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Comment—no dab links, no dead external links. The lead seems rather short for an article of this length. Ucucha 15:53, 31 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the comments, I've expanded the lead quite a bit; let me know how it looks. Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 23:35, 1 June 2010 (UTC)
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