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David Helvarg
Resubmitted after further changes and much polishing by other editors. I believe that all the outstanding isses from the failed nomination have been addressed and that this now offers a comprehensive encyclopedic biography. --Theo (Talk) 10:51, 14 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * Two things (not voting): There's a category that's a red link, and it may be best to move the quotes to Wikiquote. Everyking 11:34, 14 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * You wish is my command. Both things now addressed. --Theo (Talk) 13:30, 14 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * Support again. Filiocht | Blarneyman 11:41, Jun 14, 2005 (UTC)
 * Support.  &mdash;thames 13:49, 14 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * Wow, smooth! Strong support. Unlike Filiocht, I haven't felt able to support any of the previous versions, but this is something else. Certainly all my complaints have been taken care of, and all the encyclopedia reader's needs are catered for in this well-written article. Great process, a credit to Theo and to Wiki! Having said that, here's a minor cavil: the short "The Ocean and Coastal Conservation Guide" section, and moreso the "Feeling the Heat" section, still sound too much like promotional material, with those sponsors rearing their ugly heads again, and a cameo of the achievements of some book editor. Please lose everything like that from those two sections, and the article will be perfect. Bishonen | talk 16:32, 15 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * I have tried to address each of your issues. The sponsors of the work on which Feeling The Heat was based have gone.  So too is Mr Motavalli. I have condensed the OCCG section a little. --Theo  (Talk) 19:57, 15 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * Support--I applaud all the work that's been done since the original nomination. Meelar (talk) 19:37, Jun 15, 2005 (UTC)
 * Support. It's always a pleasure to be able to learn from Wikipedia, especially when the article I'm learning from is so well written. --Scimitar 22:17, 15 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * Comment: The section for the early life of David Helvarg seems pretty short in relation to the rest of the article. Is there any more information known about his early life? Flcelloguy [[Image:Bass clef2.gif|25px|Cello today?]] Give me a note! Eighth note (crop).gif Desk 02:42, 16 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * We know that he played in the waters and swamps of Long Island until the swamps were replaced with housing developments and the water closed to swimming. But such charming prefiguring is not encyclopedic.  What else is significant? The article already gives his place and date of birth, his parentage and his education. It also mentions his adolescent interest in civil rights and pacifism. His career starts when he is 22. What else should one say about the first 21 years of someone who is not a prodigy? --Theo  (Talk) 10:12, 16 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * OK, support- well-written article! Flcelloguy [[Image:Bass clef2.gif|25px|Cello today?]] Give me a note! Eighth note (crop).gif Desk  21:44, 16 Jun 2005 (UTC)
 * Support -- ALoan (Talk) 09:44, 16 Jun 2005 (UTC)