Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Dexter (episode)/archive2


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by SandyGeorgia 04:16, 13 June 2011.

Dexter (episode)

 * Nominator(s): That Ole' Cheesy Dude (Talk to the hand!) 20:52, 10 June 2011 (UTC)

Dexter (episode) is being nominated because it is a perfect example of a top-class, top-quality television episode article. It was previously nominated and everything that was mentioned that stopped it from passing last time has now been fixed. A good reason for its inclusion is that it meets all criteria. Thank you for reading and considering. That Ole' Cheesy Dude (Talk to the hand!) 20:52, 10 June 2011 (UTC)

Oppose - I appreciate the effort that's gone into this article, but I don't feel it currently meets the FA criteria. Here are some specific concerns:
 * Check punctuation, especially for quotes. Footnotes should not be within quotation marks.
 * "On July 7, 2008 Dexter premiered in Australia on Network Ten, where it was watched by a little less than a million viewers, finishing highest in the 18-49, 16-39 and 25-54 demographics." - source?
 * WP:MOS edits needed: wikilinking issues, italicization inconsistencies, etc
 * Use a consistent date format
 * Use of questionable sources, for example this
 * See here for problematic links
 * Copy-editing needed for grammar, flow and clarity. For example, "The crew begun to film the pilot in Miami", "summarizing, in a monologue, that something is to occur on that night", etc
 * Don't use contractions
 * Maintain a neutral and encyclopedic tone. Nikkimaria (talk) 04:54, 11 June 2011 (UTC)

Oppose. I agree with Nikkimaria that this article isn't quite there yet. I'll add a few more examples of why not:
 * "While solving murders in the Homicide division, Dexter also spends his time hunting and killing murderers and criminals ..."
 * "... footage shot in both Miami and Los Angeles were used in the episode".
 * "Rita also has two young children ...". Why "also"?
 * "... the boy had been killing neighborhood pets ... Hall was in New York and thinking of going back to theatre work ...". Are you using American or British English spelling?
 * "The incentive was first launched in 2003, and was refunded by the state legislature ...". How can you refund an incentive?
 * "Shooting began on the first episode on 18 September." Elsewhere the article uses American format dates, i.e., September 18.
 * "In September 2006, CBS and YouTube stroke a strategic content and advertising partnership ...". What on Earth does that mean? Should it be "struck a strategic content and management partnership"?
 * "The Seven Seas Motel is an actual location and they didn't change the name for the motel." This is another example of the article's overly informal style.
 * "... used for the flashbacks of the 8-year old Dexter", Should be "8-year-old Dexter.

Malleus Fatuorum 00:54, 13 June 2011 (UTC)


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