Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Edward Wright (mathematician)


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The article was promoted by User:SandyGeorgia 01:58, 19 June 2008 (UTC).

Edward Wright (mathematician)
— Cheers, Jack Lee  –talk– 16:39, 11 June 2008 (UTC) (nominator; article created by Jheald and expanded by both of us)

Comments

Gary King ( talk ) 17:25, 11 June 2008 (UTC)

Support - prose is generally excellent, some things below: Nousernamesleft copper, not wood 18:04, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Non-breaking space between unit and measurement in the Surveying section, not a hyphen or space, please.
 * Fixed. — JackLee, 01:00, 12 June 2008 (UTC)
 * In the same section, since the measurements are in the main text, the units should be spelled out, not abbreviated.
 * Fixed. — JackLee, 01:00, 12 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Same British/American thing as Gary King - change "organise" to "organize".
 * Comment: see Jheald's response to Gary King above. — JackLee, 01:00, 12 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Redundancy: "Wright was prompted to publish the book after two incidents of his text, which had been prepared some years earlier"
 * Meaning would be different. "Some years earlier" correctly implies, say, 4-5 years earlier; "years earlier" suggests much more than this. Jheald (talk) 21:38, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Same as above: "Apart from a number of other books and pamphlets [...]"
 * Same as above: "it corrected a number of errors in the earlier work"
 * Same as above: "a number of" correctly conveys that the number is relatively small. Jheald (talk) 21:38, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * "The stoppage has been attributed to a number of factors, including Myddelton facing difficulties in raising fund" -> "The stoppage has been attributed to factors such as...."
 * Fixed. — JackLee, 01:00, 12 June 2008 (UTC)
 * The first sentence is a fragment.
 * Comment: if you're referring to the first sentence of the "Surveying" section, it follows from the previous section. — JackLee, 01:00, 12 June 2008 (UTC)
 * No, I mean the first sentence of the lead. Read the whole thing carefully. Nousernamesleft copper, not wood 19:44, 12 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Possibly it might be rewritten; but I don't see a fragment there (main verb: was; relative clause which ... 75°, describing the book). What are you identifying as the fragment?  Jheald (talk) 20:19, 12 June 2008 (UTC)
 * "Apart from other books and pamphlets, Wright translated into English John Napier's 1614 Latin work which introduced the idea of logarithms." - awkward. Suggest rephrasing as "Apart from other books and pamphlets, Wright translated John Napier's 1614 work on logarithms from Latin to English."
 * But that loses the important point about 1614 work - before the book introduced them in 1614, nobody imagined logarithms might exist; it was a revolutionary step forward. Jheald (talk) 21:38, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * How about "Apart from other books and pamphlets, Wright translated John Napier's 1614 pioneer work on logarithms from Latin to English." Or you could substitute "revolutionary" for pioneer. I highly disliked the current wording. Nousernamesleft copper, not wood 19:44, 12 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Comment: I think that would work. I'd suggest "... Wright translated John Napier's pioneering 1614 work which introduced the idea of logarithms from Latin into English". "Revolutionary" sounds a bit hyperbolical. — Cheers, JackLee 14:07, 13 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Fixed: I've amended the sentence as I suggested. — Cheers, JackLee 19:32, 15 June 2008 (UTC)


 * Comment - the images are beautifully sourced, licensed, and described - nice work! There is only one exception - Image:John Napier.JPG has no information on its source or authorship, with the exception of a statement that it came from the German Wikipedia. Kelly  hi! 19:23, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * FIXED. Jheald (talk) 23:28, 11 June 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * You've mixed using the Template:Citation with the templates that start with Cite such as Template:Cite journal or Template:Cite news. They shouldn't be mixed per WP:CITE.
 * Fixed. — JackLee, 01:00, 12 June 2008 (UTC)
 * What makes http://www.cai.cam.ac.uk/students/study/engineering/engineer01/cepirate.htm a reliable source?
 * Comment: The Caius Engineer is an occasional magazine or newsletter providing information about engineering at Gonville and Caius College, Cambridge: see http://www.cai.cam.ac.uk/students/study/engineering/caiusengineer.php. The author of the article, Derek Ingram, M.A., F.I.E.E., C.Eng, is a life fellow of Caius. The following information about him can be retrieved at http://www.cai.cam.ac.uk/fellows/whoswho.php: "Tutor 1977-1985. Director of Studies in Engineering 1989-1993. British Telecoms Teaching Fellow, Dept of Engineering 1974-1989. Co-author of Digital Transmission Systems (1976). Fellow, Institution of Electrical Engineers. Author of some 36 papers on Telecommunications topics. Named inventor in 14 patents." — JackLee, 01:00, 12 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Otherwise sources look okay. Links all checked out with the link checker tool. (Is there REALLY a book called Trigonometric Delights???? Gah... I hated hated hated trigonometry... delights is NOT the word i'd use to describe it!) Ealdgyth - Talk 19:34, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Actually, I think I was quite good at trigonometry when I did it at A-levels – but not having touched it for about 20 years I can't remember any of it! — Cheers, Jack Lee  –talk– 23:49, 11 June 2008 (UTC)

Support - I think it's great,is well written and meets the FA criteria, but have a few comments/questions on (minor) things: Anyway those things above are minor, and I wouldn't oppose this FAC because of them. - Shudde   talk  12:02, 15 June 2008 (UTC)
 * "..on 8 December 1576[2] as a sizar.[4]" - Shouldn't [2] be after punctuation?
 * "admitted as a sizar[4] at Caius on 7 July 1612.[10]" - again
 * Comment: The footnotes are placed after the facts they support. For instance, in the first example, footnote 2 supports the fact that Wright matriculated on 8 December 1576, while footnote 4 supports the fact that he was a sizar. — Cheers, JackLee 19:32, 15 June 2008 (UTC)
 * See Footnotes. I'm not to worried though and am happy for it to stay as is. - Shudde   talk  23:51, 15 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Comment: OK. I should point out that "Footnotes" states: "Material may be referenced mid-sentence, but footnotes are usually placed at the end of a sentence or paragraph." [Emphasis added.] It's appropriate to use footnotes mid-sentence when a piece of information there appears in a source different to the one stated at the end of the sentence after the closing punctuation mark. — Cheers, JackLee 00:39, 16 June 2008 (UTC)
 * "Wright was requested by Elizabeth I to carry out navigational studies with a raiding expedition" Should navigation be linked here for a second time when Elizabeth I isn't? You may want to check on your linking, some things are linked more then once and others are not. I'm not fussed if things are linked only once in the article, or only once in each section, as long as it's consistent.
 * Comment: My practice is to ignore links that appear only in the introductory paragraphs. Therefore, the link at "navigational" is the first time "navigation" has been linked in the main article. — Cheers, JackLee 19:32, 15 June 2008 (UTC)
 * "one writer has called him" - Any reason not to state the writer's name?
 * Fixed: No, I guess not! — Cheers, JackLee 19:32, 15 June 2008 (UTC)

Support - — Rlevse  •  Talk  • 16:11, 15 June 2008 (UTC)
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