Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/First Tennessee Park/archive1


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 05:04, 12 December 2015.

First Tennessee Park

 * Nominator(s): NatureBoyMD (talk) 17:12, 13 November 2015 (UTC)

This article is about a minor league baseball stadium in Nashville, Tennessee. I believe it meets the criteria to become a featured article. It has recently been peer reviewed and copy edited by the Guild of Copy Editors. NatureBoyMD (talk) 17:12, 13 November 2015 (UTC)


 *  Comment ' - I'll take a look and make comments as I go - I will also tweak the prose (please revert if I accidentally change the meaning!). cheers, Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:07, 26 November 2015 (UTC)


 *  The modern design of the park incorporates Nashville's musical and baseball heritage - wary of the word "modern" - let facts speak for themselves.
 * Removed. NatureBoyMD (talk) 15:07, 28 November 2015 (UTC)


 *  Instead, Greer was repaired and upgraded to preserve its functionality and keep it close to Triple-A standards - I'd argue that "preserve its functionality" is vague and redundant, and should be removed as it adds no meaning.
 * Done. NatureBoyMD (talk) 15:07, 28 November 2015 (UTC)


 * link "approbations"
 * Linked to Wiktionary entry. NatureBoyMD (talk) 15:07, 28 November 2015 (UTC)


 *  During construction, the need for new water and electrical supply lines was realized. --> "During construction, the need for new water and electrical supply lines arose." (probably even better ways of saying this)
 * Done. NatureBoyMD (talk) 15:07, 28 November 2015 (UTC)


 *  high demand for tickets. - "for tickets" is redundant and repetitive
 * Removed. NatureBoyMD (talk) 15:07, 28 November 2015 (UTC)


 *  The financing plan involved a combination of public and private funding. --> "The financing plan involved public and private funding."
 * Done. NatureBoyMD (talk) 15:07, 28 November 2015 (UTC)


 *  The Sounds ownership group spent $50 million on a new, mixed-use and retail development to anchor the facility - I am confused, what is "anchor" meaning here...?
 * As in the cornerstone or primary development of the facility. I changed this to "...development to serve as the cornerstone of the facility." NatureBoyMD (talk) 15:07, 28 November 2015 (UTC)
 * Why not say that it is just being built next to it...? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 21:27, 28 November 2015 (UTC)
 * Done. NatureBoyMD (talk) 23:12, 28 November 2015 (UTC)


 *  The stadium is being integrated with modern Nashville and will eventually be surrounded by new apartments, parking ramps, and restaurants - "being integrated with modern Nashville" sounds advertorial and can be cut I think.
 * Removed. NatureBoyMD (talk) 15:07, 28 November 2015 (UTC)


 *  The ballpark has a modern design that is inspired by Nashville's heritage - that word "modern" again...
 * Removed. NatureBoyMD (talk) 15:07, 28 November 2015 (UTC)


 *  cast ultra-high performance concrete planks - err, this an official classification?
 * Yes, see Types of concrete. NatureBoyMD (talk) 15:07, 28 November 2015 (UTC)
 * wow, I did not know that - link please! Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 21:25, 28 November 2015 (UTC)


 * link acrylic and berm
 * I linked the first instances of each. NatureBoyMD (talk) 15:07, 28 November 2015 (UTC)


 * are the ground rules pretty standard or unusual in any way?
 * These are your standard ground rules. Should they be removed? NatureBoyMD (talk) 15:07, 28 November 2015 (UTC)
 * Not sure - am not familiar with baseball park articles.....maybe see what others think. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 21:27, 28 November 2015 (UTC)
 * A quick look at other baseball park articles shows a general absence of ground rules. For the three FA parks, two (one of which I also worked on) list ground rules. I'm going to go ahead and remove them as they don't apply specifically to any distinct features of this park. NatureBoyMD (talk) 23:12, 28 November 2015 (UTC)
 * Ok that's fine. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 08:50, 29 November 2015 (UTC)

Otherwise quite an engaging read.... over to you. cheers, Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:44, 28 November 2015 (UTC)
 * Thank you. NatureBoyMD (talk) 15:07, 28 November 2015 (UTC)

Tentative Support on comprehensiveness and prose. I don't see any prose-clangers outstanding. Will naturally depend on some other folks taking a look Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 08:50, 29 November 2015 (UTC)

Closing comment -- Sorry but after running a month this nom still hasn't attracted enough commentary for anything approaching consensus to proomote, so I'll be archiving it shortly. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 05:03, 12 December 2015 (UTC)

Ian Rose (talk) 05:04, 12 December 2015 (UTC)
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