Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Fishing Creek Confederacy/archive1


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by User:Ian Rose 10:01, 13 August 2013 (UTC).

Fishing Creek Confederacy

 * Nominator(s): King Jakob  C2 01:29, 30 July 2013 (UTC)

I am nominating this for featured article because last April, it passed a GA nomination. A peer review for the article has now been completed, so I feel that the article can now be made a featured article. Thank you. King Jakob  C2 01:29, 30 July 2013 (UTC)

Oppose pending significant source cleanup. FN1 seems to be the same source as in later short cites, but includes a huge page range and is missing one author. All books are missing publishers, all newspapers are missing page numbers, and the formatting is in general very messy. Nikkimaria (talk) 14:58, 2 August 2013 (UTC)
 * I have fixed most of the sourcing issues, but references 6, 8, and 17 are slightly problematic, as I only have access to the individual articles and not the newspapers themselves, and so am not able to determine the page numbers. Still, they are dated and the newspapers and articles are titled, so if someone is determined enough to find the newspapers, then isn't it verifiable enough? King Jakob  C2 16:19, 2 August 2013 (UTC)

Oppose. I thought User:Cdtew's comments during the peer review were right on the mark. In particular, your lead doesn't really get at the significance or consequences of what would otherwise have been a non-story. - Dank (push to talk) 19:44, 2 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for working on the lead. There are also misspellings and grammatical mistakes; ask around for help with the prose. - Dank (push to talk) 01:39, 3 August 2013 (UTC)

Oppose. It could really do with a good copyedit (you might try the Guild); in particular, check for the repetition of phrases or words in close succession (e.g. the use of "tension" in the opening section, where I think it is used six times in two paragraphs). Hchc2009 (talk) 08:40, 3 August 2013 (UTC)
 * I listed the article at the GOCE requests page, but in the meantime have done some tidying up myself. King Jakob  C2 13:15, 3 August 2013 (UTC)


 * Comment – I won't oppose because I don't want to pile on, but I also think the article needs further work. One piece of advice I will give is to cut down on the number of one-sentence paragraphs in the article. I count three, and they are particularly noticeable towards the end. Giants2008  ( Talk ) 19:11, 9 August 2013 (UTC)
 * They've all been merged into other paragraphs now. King Jakob  C2 19:17, 9 August 2013 (UTC)

Delegate comment -- It doesn't appear to me that the objections raised above will be overcome any time soon so I'll be archiving this nomination. I might note also that there's some serious overlinking in the article, e.g. professional, amateur, historian, and what seems to me a totally unnecessary redlink, military uprising -- all just in the lead. Please take on board the comments above and rework the article accordingly -- it can be renominated at FAC after a minimum two-week break. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 08:32, 12 August 2013 (UTC)

Ian Rose (talk) 08:33, 12 August 2013 (UTC)
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