Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Francisco de Mendoza/archive1

Francisco de Mendoza

 * Nominator(s): Telex80 (talk) 04:25, 11 June 2019 (UTC)

This Article was well written and has all the evidence regarding the history of the Eighty Years War. Telex80 (talk) 04:25, 11 June 2019 (UTC)

Comments by RetiredDuke
I don't think this article is quite ready for a FA nomination: Premature nomination. RetiredDuke (talk) 11:31, 11 June 2019 (UTC)
 * For starters, it doesn't have a lead that properly summarizes the article body. For an example of how even the shortest bio can have a proper lead, see Lawrence Weathers.
 * Secondly, that wall of text that is the body of the article has to be broken up in smaller sections, like Early life and The 80 Years War or some such.
 * Thirdly, just by skimming the article diagonally I spotted some inappropriate passages like "the king was not amused", "decided to kill two birds with one stone", "unfortunately did not live long" (POV language).
 * It also has very few inline citations, it should have more than just one at the end of each paragraph.
 * Lastly, "Nominators must be sufficiently familiar with the subject matter" but you have not edited the article at all.


 * I would second RetiredDuke's comments here, maybe a peer review would be a better way to go before taking a run at FA. Kosack (talk) 12:22, 11 June 2019 (UTC)

Coord note
Not having edited the article is enough for archiving on procedural grounds (see instructions at the top of WP:FAC) but the other points raised above are also well-made and should be taken into account before anyone considers re-nominating here. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 21:39, 11 June 2019 (UTC)

Ian Rose (talk) 21:40, 11 June 2019 (UTC)