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 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by User:Ian Rose 10:01, 28 January 2014 (UTC).

GateKeeper (roller coaster)

 * Nominator(s):  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 21:38, 28 December 2013 (UTC)

This article is about... a new roller at Cedar Point amusement park in Sandusky, Ohio. I am nominating this article for a 2nd time because the comments from the first nomination have been addressed and is ready to be reviewed. It has gone through copy edits, a peer review and a GA review. As the creator, I've been watching and contributing to the article from the beginning and could answer any question that might come up about the ride. Thanks,  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 21:38, 28 December 2013 (UTC)

Support - I had to stumble by, given I have an FAC of my own, and I've been to Cedar Point before.
 * In the infobox, should you clarify that the total cost is in 2013 U.S. dollars? Is that standard?
 * We do usually clarify it it's US but I don't think we've ever clarified the year in which the amount is.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 02:56, 4 January 2014 (UTC)


 * What is Cedar Fair?
 * They are the owners of the park but I don't know how I would incorporate that into the article.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 02:59, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Ehh, just link it somewhere. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:27, 4 January 2014 (UTC)


 * The first paragraph of "History" section has a few too many instances of [X person said Y]. For example: "On May 30, 2012, the Sandusky Register reported that a memo written by Ouimet to Cedar Fair's board of directors on February 15, 2012, stated that a new Wing Coaster code-named "CP Alt. Winged" would be introduced in 2013, and that it would set new records for its drop, speed, and length, and that the new coaster would have a "Front Gate Statement—a roller coaster that flies overhead, rolls and flies back—highly visible above guests entering the park."" - one, that's a bit long for a single sentence, but two, the emphasis should be on what happened, not who reported what happened.
 * Cleaned it up some.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 03:23, 4 January 2014 (UTC)


 * "a 170-foot-tall (52 m) Wing Coaster which would be manufactured by B&M" - "which" --> "that". Ditto later with - "the first element of the coaster which is similar to the dive drops on"
 * Done.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 03:08, 4 January 2014 (UTC)


 * "On April 10, 2013, Cedar Point launched an auction in which bidders could bid to become one of the first 64 public riders on GateKeeper on May 11, 2013. The auction ended on May 6." - these sentences could be merged. Also, no need for the two year mentions, IMO.
 * Removed years and second sentence, I realized it's not really needed.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 02:50, 4 January 2014 (UTC)


 * The "Construction" section has some great facts, but it's pretty dry prosewise.
 * I was able to merge and expand some sentences.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 03:31, 4 January 2014 (UTC)


 * "12 million pounds (5,400,000 kilograms)" - why does one say "million" and the other have all the commas?
 * Probably because IMO, it looks better than 5.4 million. But that can be changed.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 03:11, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
 * It's not a huge deal, but I just thought consistency would be better. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:27, 4 January 2014 (UTC)


 * "turns 180 degrees to the right" - isn't 180 degrees basically a U-turn? Might there be some less technical way of saying it turns to the opposite direction or something?
 * I'm not sure what we could change it to as it does make a U-turn.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 02:52, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Eh, thinking about it again, it's fine. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:27, 4 January 2014 (UTC)


 * Be consistent whether or not you have a dash for "170-foot "
 * They all have dashes.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 03:00, 4 January 2014 (UTC)


 * "67 miles per hour " - any reason for writing it out?
 * Nope, but I rarely see it abbreviated.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 03:12, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
 * You abbreviate it in the lede though. And since km/h is abbreviated, so should mph. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:27, 4 January 2014 (UTC)


 * "Next, the train goes through a giant flat spin, which is followed by a zero-g roll, which features two keyhole points as it passes through two 100-foot (30 m)-tall towers." - don't use "which" twice
 * Fixed.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 02:36, 4 January 2014 (UTC)


 * "GateKeeper is the fifth Wing Coaster to be built and the third in the United States—the others being X-Flight at Six Flags Great America and Wild Eagle at Dollywood." - no need for dash when comma would work.
 * Done.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 02:31, 4 January 2014 (UTC)


 * "It is the longest and fastest Wing Coaster, has the longest drop, and features the most inversions of any Wing Coaster" - don't say "Wing Coaster" twice
 * Done.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 02:27, 4 January 2014 (UTC)


 * "Complaints about the shoulder restraints becoming too tight for tall people sitting in the brake run at the end of the ride have been received" - wording is a little awkward
 * Fixed.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 02:40, 4 January 2014 (UTC)


 * "riders, making it the ride with the most riders in 2013" - redundancy?
 * Fixed.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 18:14, 3 January 2014 (UTC)


 * "GateKeeper also helped Cedar Fair to achieve "record revenue, record attendance, record distribution and record stock pricing" in 2013" - who said this quote?
 * Fixed.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 02:25, 4 January 2014 (UTC)

All in all, it's a pretty good article! Good read. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 04:53, 2 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review! I will start to address the concerns.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 18:14, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
 * I have addressed or commented on all your concerns.--  Astros 4477  ( Talk ) 03:34, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Thanks, I'm happy to support now! Just a few last things that aren't that crucial to my support. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 17:27, 4 January 2014 (UTC)

Closing comment -- with no activity for some weeks this review has clearly stalled so I'll be archiving it shortly. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 04:51, 27 January 2014 (UTC)

Ian Rose (talk) 04:52, 27 January 2014 (UTC)
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