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Greta Garbo
This article is well written, full of citations and pictures, and about a prolific movie star. Ilampsurvivor5 21:07, 21 September 2006 (UTC)


 * Comment To start with, articles shouldn't have external jumps in the body of the article.  All of these need to be converted to in-line citations.  I'll convert the first one for you to give you an example of what needs to be done.--Paul 22:14, 21 September 2006 (UTC)
 * Another Comment: Articles that make it through FA ususally do not have "Trivia" sections. Some of the items in your Trivia section are real info (like Ninotchka being #52 in the list of AFI's 100 Years... 100 Laughs & can be incorporated into the main text. Other items, like "A British sherman tank in Call of Duty 2 was named Greta Garbo" are best deleted.--Paul 21:16, 22 September 2006 (UTC)


 * Oppose
 * 1) The lead needs work, it should be a summary of the content of the article, see WP:LEAD
 * 2) Posthumous recognition and trivia ahould be merged together into a legacy section or something similar.
 * 3) Fair use images need fair use rationales
 * 4) The writing is generally poor and consists almost entirely of disconnected single ot two sentence paragraphs.
 * 5) Based on the length of the article and the length of her career and impact in Hollywood, I'm supposing that this article is not comprehensive.
 * 6) References should be full described and use a consisten system, see WP:CITE
 * 7) The personal life section is oddly stuck in the middle of a chronological narrative about her career.
 * --Peta 01:35, 22 September 2006 (UTC)


 * Refer to Peer-review. Not ready! Not ready! Not ready! The article has so many problems that I can write pages! Ask for a perr-review and withdraw the nomination.--Yannismarou 15:42, 22 September 2006 (UTC)