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 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by User:Ian Rose 21:24, 12 June 2013 (UTC).

Harvey Kurtzman's Jungle Book

 * Nominator(s): Curly Turkey (gobble) 03:03, 14 April 2013 (UTC)

I am nominating this for featured article because it is an important ovelooked work in its field, far more influential than it was ever popular—the story of Kurtzman's life. Despite accolades from critics and peers, it goes out of print for decades at a time (twenty-five years and counting since the last printing). What am I to do when the binding on my own 1988 copy finally gives? Keep it in a bag, as Art Spiegelman did with his 1959 printing? Curly Turkey (gobble) 03:03, 14 April 2013 (UTC)

Comment - please check WP:image_resolution for non-free images (Done). The recommended size should be 100,000 pixel, unless there is a very good reason for a higher resolution image. Currently the first 2 fair-use images fail WP:NFCC #3b for minimal usage. As the images are used for identification and illustration of a certain panel layout, i don't see the need for a higher resolution here. GermanJoe (talk) 06:44, 16 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Resized. Curly Turkey (gobble) 20:42, 16 April 2013 (UTC)

Image check - all OK (non-free resolution has been reduced).
 * 2 fair-use images with sufficient rationale, another one with only a small detail of a larger panel and sufficient FUR - OK.
 * 1 PD-US-not-renewed (briefly checked, no renewals found) - OK. GermanJoe (talk) 06:59, 17 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Just to clear up any doubts about PD-US-not-renewed, Fantagraphics Books co-owner Gary Groth did an official check on the story, and found that Archie Comics had failed to renew the copyright. He took advantage of that by republishing it in The Comics Journal #262 in September 2004, and made a big deal of it by publishing a story about it on the website of The Comics Journal, along with a .pdf of the story that was left there for years, until the site was renovated and all of the old site's articles were taken down.  Archie Comics has a reputation for litigiousness—it's how they won the story's copyright in the first place—and they've done nothing in the last nine years to contend the story's copyright status.  The whole situation has been written up in more than one independent source.  TL;DR—the story is clearly established to be in the Public Domain in the US.  Curly Turkey (gobble) 11:22, 17 April 2013 (UTC)

Source review - spotchecks not done
 * Pages for Harris-Fain?
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 20:47, 22 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Further reading should come before External links.
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 20:47, 22 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Nikkimaria (talk) 13:04, 22 April 2013 (UTC)

Oppose for now on prose. Needs a decent amount of work.  ceran  thor 19:18, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Ceranthor's Comments
 * Second paragraph of the lead is a bit choppy.
 * I've done some major surgery on the lead. Please let me know how it works.  Curly Turkey (gobble) 22:01, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Jungle Book came about when Ballantine Books was looking for a line of cartoon humor books to replace its Mad series of paperbacks,  - came about is slightly informal
 * I've rearranged the first half of the paragraph and would appreciate it if you could tell me if it works. Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:46, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 *  to replace its Mad series of paperbacks, after the Mad books had moved to another publisher.  - Bit after the comma is slightly redundant in repeating Mad books. better as just "which had moved..."
 * See above. Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:46, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Whereas Kurtzman aimed his Mad stories at an adolescent audience, he intended Jungle Book to be for adults—nearly unprecedented in American comics at the time.[3] - which was nearly
 * How does this work? — "Kurtzman had aimed his Mad stories at an adolescent audience; his targeting Jungle Book at an adult audience was nearly unprecedented in American comics." Curly Turkey (gobble) 22:05, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 * General: grammar is pretty bad throughout, needs to be run through with a fine comb. I'm picking stuff up as I go but my eyes are only so good.
 * Violence suffers the onslaughts of a thug who attempts to keep him away from her, but in the end it is revealed that the thug and Violence are partners in extortion.[1] - This sentence is too vague to properly explain the story.
 * Well, to be honest, the story's not exactly a clockwork piece of tight plotting; it's pretty much one gag after another, and ends with Violence suddenly and inexplicably deciding to become a pro wrestler. Curly Turkey (gobble) 22:27, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 *  It remained a favorite of Kurtzman's,[7] as he found it especially successful; - successful in what respect?
 * That was explained following the semicolon. I've removed it as redundant.  Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:46, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Goodman finds himself groping the secretaries, - Groping might not be the best word. Seducing? Sexually harassing?
 * Changed to "sexually harassing". Definitely not "seducing".  Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:46, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 * (a recognizable parody of James Arness as Marshal Matt Dillon from the popular Gunsmoke TV show)[13] - Most parodies are recognizable. That word should be excised.
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:46, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 * and was thus Kurtzman's least favorite, as he had yet to perfect the style he had developed for the book.[14] - Could you describe this style in an adjective here?
 * No, as Kurtzman is referring to his overall apporach to the work: drawing, pacing, page layouts, word balloons, etc. were quite a departure from those of his earlier works. He'd never had the amount of space to work with that he had in Jungle Book, and the space gave him the opportunity to do a lot of things he coulnd't have before.  Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:46, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 * "You cain not truss[a] a man who reads!"[5]  - Needs a sic.
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:46, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 * The town sheriff overlooks the lynching, despite the presence of a "Northern" reporter[15] (actually, from the northern part of the state).[1] - This actually part would be better as prose or as a footnote. Should not be in parentheses.
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:46, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 * The story appeared when Hollywood adaptations of works set in the South by writers such as Tennessee Williams and William Faulkner were being made.  - Very chunky sentence, needs revision.
 * How about: "At the time the story appeared, Hollywood was releasing adaptations of works set in the South by writers such as Tennessee Williams and William Faulkner."? Curly Turkey (gobble) 22:11, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 * USO should be spelled out. It's not that familiar.
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:46, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 * If Jungle Book had been a success, Kurtzman had intended to continue with more books in the same vein.  - Think same vein is slightly informal.
 * Changed to "continue producing books in the format". Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:46, 5 May 2013 (UTC)


 * Source Comments from Ceranthor
 * Harris-Fain 2012 is used 10 times. Surely all of this info is coming from different pages on that source, so I really feel you should put in the effort to be more precise and use the page numbers. Every other source uses them!
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:46, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 * What makes Doree, Pete (2009). ""Harvey Kurtzman's Jungle Book". The Golden Age of Blogs. Retrieved 2012-02-01." a reliable source? *What is the notation at the end (the "— overview and page samples.")?
 * Removed. Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:46, 5 May 2013 (UTC)

Question for Ceranthor

I was surprised at your use of &amp;nbsp;s in the article—it would never occur to me to use them that way. Is there a guideline that explains this? Curly Turkey (gobble) 22:16, 5 May 2013 (UTC)


 * Sure, WP:NBSP. I believe I used them correctly, though I think there are alternative ways. If I did them incorrectly, feel free to rv me.  ceran  thor 02:01, 6 May 2013 (UTC)


 * Ceranthor Round 2
 * Lead looks a lot better! Nice job.
 * Kurtzman had created the satirical Mad in 1952, but left its publisher EC Comics in 1956 after a dispute over financial control. - Can you just clarify this a little bit for me? Does this mean Kurtzman wanted control but couldn't obtain it?
 * The story's quite involved, with conflicting versions and interpretations, but one simple version is: Kurtzman wanted control over the business aspects of the magazine; Hugh Hefner offered him a job in the Playboy empire, and Kurtzman used that to back himself up when he asked Bill Gaines for a 51% stake in Mad. Kurtzman went on to one failed enterprise after another; the consensus seems to be that he was a visionary genius whose every ambition was foiled by his unbending lack of business sense.  Curly Turkey (gobble) 22:52, 9 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Everything mentioned in the first round has been fixed to my satisfaction. :)


 * Support - Prose looks better. I'll run through a few more times and do some cleanup. Nice effort!  ceran  thor 18:52, 9 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Thank you! Curly Turkey (gobble) 22:52, 9 May 2013 (UTC)

Comments –
 * "The social satire in the book's four stories target Peter Gunn-style private detective shows". "target" → "targets", since this is referring to "social satire" and not the stories themselves.
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 06:47, 22 May 2013 (UTC)
 * "Violence suffers the onslaughts of a thug who attempts to keep him away the young woman". Feels like it needs "from" after "away".
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 06:47, 22 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Style and themes: The unspaced en dash that appears in the first paragraph here goes against the MoS. Making it a larger em dash like in the previous section would fix this issue.
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 06:47, 22 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Works cited: the Rothschild book isn't in alphabetical order, if that was the intent.
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 06:47, 22 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Giants2008 ( Talk ) 01:36, 22 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Support – After the fixes, I'm satisfied that the article meets the FA criteria. It's another nice little comic book article. Giants2008  ( Talk ) 01:09, 24 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Much appreciated! Curly Turkey (gobble) 01:43, 24 May 2013 (UTC)

Comments from Eric Corbett Eric  Corbett  19:04, 29 May 2013 (UTC)
 * "... early in his career Kurtzman worked doing crossword puzzles for Goodman". Presumably what's meant is that he created crosswords, not that he filled them in Kurtzman to take the credit for having completed them?
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:03, 29 May 2013 (UTC)
 * "In the 1950s, a trend of "adult" Westerns appeared in which the characters were given psychological backgrounds to their motivations". That's really awkward. How can a motivation be other than psychological?
 * How is "psychological backgrounds to explain their motivations"?  Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:03, 29 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Much better I think. Eric   Corbett  21:10, 29 May 2013 (UTC)
 * "Compulsion" was the third story in the book, but the first to be drawn, and was thus Kurtzman's least favorite, as he had yet to perfect the style he had developed for the book." In what sense had he developed the style if he had yet to perfect it?
 * In the sense that he had yet to work all the kinks out of it, I presume. I have my own ideas, but my sources don't talk about this stuff much.  He'd never worked with the page count (roughly thirtysomething pages per story, vs the maximum eight he had been used to) and page dimensions (tall and thin) he was given for this project, and also developed somewhat different styles of drawing (thin brushlines instead of thick) and dialogue balloons.  He was a seasoned professional with nearly twenty years in the industry; he could make it all "work", but it took a couple of stories for him to have the kind of control he was aiming for.  That's my OR interpretation.  Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:03, 29 May 2013 (UTC)
 * "... who saw the possibilities of the comics medium in the formalities of the scene's portrayal of motion". Is "comics" right there? Either "comic's" or "comic" would seem to be more correct.
 * No, when referring to the medium, "comics" is an uncountable noun. Because of the obvious confusion, Art Spiegelman long tried to get people to spell it "comix".  Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:03, 29 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Fair enough. Eric   Corbett  21:10, 29 May 2013 (UTC)
 * "Kurtzman uses the book to lampoon what he saw as humankind's inability or incompetence." Strange clash of tenses there: "uses ... saw".
 * Removed "what he saw as". I can't see harmonizing the tenses without confusing in-universe and out-of-universe.  Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:03, 29 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Is he still using the book for that purpose? I don't see any in-universe out-of-universe issue here. Eric   Corbett  21:07, 29 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Done. I don't know why I thought there was.  Perhaps it was the insomnia.  Curly Turkey (gobble) 22:39, 29 May 2013 (UTC)
 * "... over a dispute about financial control with EC Comics publisher William Gaines". Needs to be reordered: "over a dispute with EC Comics publisher William Gaines about financial control".
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:03, 29 May 2013 (UTC)
 * "... a project he had first conceived in 1954". Conception only happens once.
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 21:03, 29 May 2013 (UTC)

Question for Eric Corbett
 * "These panels inspired Art Spiegelman in the way Kurtzman experimented with formalities such as the portrayal of motion.": You've removed the period from this caption. As far as I can tell, this is a complete grammatical sentence:  "These panels" is the subject, "inspired" is the verb, and "Art Spiegelman" is the direct object.  Could you explain why this wouldn't require a period as a caption?  Curly Turkey (gobble) 22:39, 29 May 2013 (UTC)
 * You need to consider the context, but I'm certainly not going to fight you over it. Eric   Corbett  23:32, 29 May 2013 (UTC)
 * What "fight"? I haven't reverted, have I?  I'm ignorant of in what context such a sentence should not be punctuated.  If I don't understand, then I'm sure to do it again.  Curly Turkey (gobble) 23:46, 29 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Feel free to revert it if you don't agree with my opinion, which is that in the caption the opening "These" is referring to what's displayed in the image, not to any preceding text. I agree that this may be an edge case, but that's my take nevertheless. You could maybe ask Tony1 for a more definitive view, but it's really not important in the context of this review. Eric   Corbett  00:00, 30 May 2013 (UTC)
 * I'm going to leave it as it is, unless Tony1 disagrees with you; I've left him a message. Curly Turkey (gobble) 00:19, 30 May 2013 (UTC)
 * The alternative is of course to rewrite the caption as a caption, which I've just done. Eric   Corbett  01:53, 30 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Which I have absolutely no problem with, but does nothing to prevent me from loading up articles with inappropriate punctuation in the future. Curly Turkey (gobble) 03:32, 30 May 2013 (UTC)
 * "Panels that inspired Art Spiegelman in the way Kurtzman experimented with formalities such as the portrayal of motion"—I just don't understand the grammatical structure—or the intended meaning. I'm not looking any further at the main text or the image description page, since the caption should stand alone. So are the panels by Kurtzman? Are they the only panels that inspired Spiegelman, or just among those that did? At the moment, it's a huge and ungainly nominal group (noun phrase), and by the strict letter of the MOS shouldn't have a final period (although I know many editors disagree with this rule, including Noetica ... perhaps someone needs to propose a loosening of it at MOS talk?). "Four of the panels by Kurtzman that influenced Spiegelman, showing how Kurtzman experimented with formalities such as the portrayal of motion."?  Tony   (talk)  02:32, 30 May 2013 (UTC)
 * I was simply doing a quick and dirty fix. Your "Four of the panels by Kurtzman ..." suggestion seems great to me. Eric   Corbett  02:43, 30 May 2013 (UTC)
 * "Four of the panels" doesn't make it clear that it was this particular sequence (and not just one amongst others) that opened Spiegelman's eyes to the formal properties of comics (Spiegelman is known to people who know these things as an unrepentant formalist). How about:
 * "A sequence in which Kurtzman's formal experiments such as the portrayal of motion inspired a young Art Spiegelman" Curly Turkey (gobble) 03:32, 30 May 2013 (UTC)


 * I'm getting close to supporting this, despite my initial feeling that it might be a bit thin, but it is after all an article on a failed publishing venture. I'm really, really unhappy though about having a section called Overview right after the lead. Isn't the lead supposed to be the overview? Might it be better called something like Background? Eric   Corbett  20:03, 30 May 2013 (UTC)
 * I suppose "Overview" is less than ideal, but there's nothing "Background"-y about the section—it's made up mostly of story summaries, about as "Foreground" as you get. I couldn't think of anything appropriate on the bikeride to work this morning, but I'll see what I can come up with.  Curly Turkey (gobble) 22:57, 30 May 2013 (UTC)
 * You're quite right of course, Background is even worse than Overview; don't know what I was thinking when I suggested that. What about something simple and straightforward like Contents? Eric   Corbett  23:21, 30 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Done. Curly Turkey (gobble) 00:25, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

Support. I like this article, so I'm supporting its promotion. Eric  Corbett  00:27, 31 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Thank your kind heart for taking pity this poor article and possibly saving it from what seemed like an inevitable archiving. Basement nerds of the world will intone to themselves their gratitude to you in their strange, introverted ways.  Curly Turkey (gobble) 01:29, 31 May 2013 (UTC)

Graham Colm (talk) 11:56, 31 May 2013 (UTC)
 * The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. No further edits should be made to this page.