Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/History of KFC/archive5


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Graham Beards via FACBot (talk) 16:11, 15 December 2014 (UTC).

History of KFC

 * Nominator(s): Tom (talk) 12:45, 30 October 2014 (UTC)

This article is about the history of KFC. Tom (talk) 12:45, 30 October 2014 (UTC)


 * Comment Can anyone explain why this article didn't pass the last time? Given that explanation, we can evaluate to see if those concerns have been dealt with. Stevie is the man!  Talk • Work 14:35, 30 October 2014 (UTC)
 * User:Stevietheman, User:Ceranthor had a few comments that I didn't have time to look into. but have since been addressed. Tom (talk) 20:14, 30 October 2014 (UTC)

comments by Auntieruth55

 * overall this looks good. I've reached the 1990s, made a few tweaks, and have a few prose concerns:


 * this sentence in particular has me boggled: PepsiCo was accused of behaving in an imperious manner towards franchisees, who it believed were holding back the firm's growth, while the franchisees believed they had been the backbone of the company during a succession of indifferent corporate owners.[76]


 * there are a lot of sentences like this: was introduced at over 30 per cent of US outlets... which could be stronger.


 * overall, I find few problems with the prose, other than case like those two above. I suggest that some of the very short paragraphs (2 sentences on death of Saunders, for example) be woven in elsewhere, instead of standing alone.  I will get back to additional proofing tomorrow.  auntieruth (talk) 16:40, 2 December 2014 (UTC)

Closing note The nominator seems unresponsive, and this FAC has become moribund. I will be archiving this in a few minutes. Please wait until two weeks have passed before renominating. Graham Beards (talk) 16:11, 15 December 2014 (UTC)

Graham Beards (talk) 16:11, 15 December 2014 (UTC)
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