Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Hurricane Sergio (2018)/archive1

Hurricane Sergio (2018)

 * Nominator(s): Noah Talk 18:32, 15 August 2019 (UTC)

I have spent a lot of time working on correcting the accuracy of and expanding Sergio's article. Although the impact was mainly minimal, I feel this article is now complete and satisfies the FA criteria. Noah Talk 18:32, 15 August 2019 (UTC)

Image Review
Images are appropriately licensed. Nikkimaria (talk) 20:32, 17 August 2019 (UTC)

Support from Oof-off
Support - This article is comprehensive and covers all of the aspects of Sergio's life in a good amount of detail. In particular, the impact is extensively covered, and I can vouch that much time was put into making the impact as comprehensive as possible. The meteorological history is accurate and the sources are well-picked. The vast majority of the problems that were present before in the article, many of which have been pointed out here by other Wikipedia users, have been fixed already. I did fix one mistake which were related to improper use of "it's"/"its". Otherwise, the grammar and spelling is sound. I believe this article is worthy of feature article status. --Oof-off (talk) 03:07, 21 August 2019 (UTC)

SC

 * Lead
 * It's a long first paragraph and contains ten uses of "Sergio" in twelve sentences: any chance some synonyms could be used, or even just an "it" or two?
 * Ditto para two – four "Sergio"s in six sentences. The same goes for the rest of the article, although to a lesser degree: there are a further sixteen in the body text, which could be trimmed here and there, particularly in the history section
 * Removed several mentions throughout the lead and MH. Noah Talk 14:27, 20 August 2019 (UTC)


 * History
 * "about 18 hours as system underwent": the system?
 * Fixed. Noah Talk 14:27, 20 August 2019 (UTC)

That's it. Very minor, but the heavy use of the name needs to be addressed first. – SchroCat (talk) 13:31, 20 August 2019 (UTC)
 * Support - all good now. - SchroCat (talk) 14:28, 20 August 2019 (UTC)

Support from Hurricanehink
With the caveat that I reviewed this article for A-class review, I believe this article passes all of the FA criteria, so I support the candidacy. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 13:59, 22 August 2019 (UTC)

Comments Support from KN2731

 * "Sergio was indeed a tropical storm, but unlike..." - no need to restate that Sergio was a TS, I think you can just start the sentence with "Unlike other tropical cyclones..."
 * Done. Noah Talk 21:45, 25 August 2019 (UTC)


 * "The storm had developed a well-defined eye" - missing "At this point," or similar
 * Fixed. Noah Talk 21:45, 25 August 2019 (UTC)


 * "After bottoming out as a low-end Category 3" - Category 3 is not a noun, add "hurricane"
 * Fixed. Noah Talk 21:45, 25 August 2019 (UTC)


 * "It unexpectedly acquired some annular characteristics on October 7, with the eye having doubled in size overnight" - large eye != annular, you may want to mention that rainbands dissipated too
 * Done. Noah Talk 21:45, 25 August 2019 (UTC)


 * "southern and eastern facing shores" --> "south- and east-facing shores"
 * Actually after looking more closely at the source only the easterly swells were caused by Sergio, so mentioning the advisory for the south-facing shores was issued "As a result" of Sergio is misleading. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 04:24, 25 August 2019 (UTC)
 * Fixed. Noah Talk 21:45, 25 August 2019 (UTC)


 * "The Arizona State Fair was closed due to flooding, the first time in 'recent memory'." - I feel the comma interrupts the flow here, maybe something like "Flooding forced the closure of [etc.] for the first time..." or "...was closed for the first time in 'recent memory' due to flooding" would be better
 * Changed. Noah Talk 11:45, 26 August 2019 (UTC)


 * "70 mph (115 km/h) wind gusts" - 60 knots converts to 69 mph (111 km/h)
 * Removed rounding. Noah Talk 11:45, 26 August 2019 (UTC)

That should be it. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 04:22, 25 August 2019 (UTC)
 * Should be everything. Noah Talk 11:45, 26 August 2019 (UTC)
 * All changes addressed, moving to support. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 13:13, 26 August 2019 (UTC)

Ian Rose (talk) 22:47, 30 September 2019 (UTC)