Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/IPad (3rd generation)/archive3


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by GrahamColm 15:44, 15 September 2012.

IPad (3rd generation)

 * Nominator(s): Ob tund Talk 02:29, 6 September 2012 (UTC)

I am nominating this for featured article because I believe it has the status, and was just recently copyedited a few days ago. Ob tund Talk 02:29, 6 September 2012 (UTC)
 * I find the sales information after the initial release insufficient. What happened with the sales in the 6 months since its release? How about sales abroad? Nergaal (talk) 02:58, 8 September 2012 (UTC)

Oppose: There are still inconsistencies in the prose and sourcing. A few examples and points: I didn't have a thorough look, but concerns such as these worry me. — WP: PENGUIN  · [ TALK ]  13:42, 9 September 2012 (UTC)
 * First two sentences of the article start the same way. Likewise the first two sections of History.
 * A WP:MOSNUM problem is the inconsistency "3rd" vs "third". Pick one and stick to it.
 * Redundancies such as: "which also provides a platform for audio-visual media"; "Apple offers nine different variations of the third-generation iPad".
 * The uses of "also" are all redundant and removing them would not change the meaning or flow.
 * "For the rest of the world" could be condensed to "elsewhere", likewise "not available" to "unavailable".
 * "Speculation about the product began shortly after the release of the iPad 2, which improved the camera and added the new dual-core Apple A5X processor. " – The iPad 2 did not improve the camera, Apple did.
 * Information in the lead does not require citations if the info is presented further down in the article.
 * "During this time, the tablet was called the 'iPad 3'" – when exactly was this? No dates specified of the leaks and the iPad 2's release, so it's a bit unclear.
 * The four citations after "The company did not predisclose the subject of the event, but it was widely expected to be a new version of the iPad." is a bit overkill. Bundling them together would be a good idea.
 * WP:WEASEL word here, "people say the battery lasts about 8 hours doing normal tasks". Please be specific.
 * I question the reliability of some sources like this and this. There are a lot of unreliable blog sites cited.

Oppose pending resolution of sourcing concerns. In addition to the issues raised above, I also note multiple inconsistencies in the formatting of sources, and the use of iFixit (which is a wiki and so not a reliable source). Nikkimaria (talk) 15:01, 9 September 2012 (UTC)


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