Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Jordan River (Utah)/archive2


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by Karanacs 21:36, 6 July 2010.

Jordan River (Utah)

 * Nominator(s): Bgwhite (talk) 01:52, 24 June 2010 (UTC)

I am nominating this for featured article. The Jordan River runs from freshwater Utah Lake to the Great Salt Lake and is named after the Middle East's River Jordan. The river borders four of the five largest Utah cities. This is the second time for nomination. Users Finetooth, Shannon ,  Pfly and Jhfortier have all collaborated to improve the article to get it to FAC.

Support by Finetooth. As noted above, I collaborated to improve the article since its first trip to FAC. I commented fairly extensively on its talk page, and I also did some copy-editing. I should add, in the interest of full disclosure, that I'm a member of the rivers project. The article is greatly improved since its last visit to FAC. I believe that the concerns raised then have been successfully addressed, and I'm pleased to support. Finetooth (talk) 05:05, 24 June 2010 (UTC)


 * Comment—no dab links, no dead external links. Ucucha 05:43, 24 June 2010 (UTC)

Sources issues: minor fixes at last FAC, all looking good. Brianboulton (talk) 18:27, 24 June 2010 (UTC)

per previous fac ! Fasach Nua (talk) 21:54, 24 June 2010 (UTC)


 * Here is just such a map, but most stream articles don't include a state locator, and this article has five maps already. Could you accept the Utah link as sufficient since the Utah article displays the state locator? Finetooth (talk) 22:42, 24 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Actually the geo location at the top right is probably sufficient Fasach Nua (talk) 06:27, 28 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you. Finetooth (talk) 16:16, 28 June 2010 (UTC)

Support I commented first time around, I think it meets the criteria now  Jimfbleak -  talk to me?  18:11, 28 June 2010 (UTC)

Support - an excellent article that meets FA criteria. Dincher (talk) 01:33, 1 July 2010 (UTC)

Support by Ruhrfisch - I peer reviewed this a while ago and find it now much improved so that it meets the FA criteria. Nice job. I have a few quibbles (below) that do not detract from my support.
 * As I wrote in the peer review  I find it odd that there is no section on Geology in the article - most of the pollution seems to be mine related, so I think this is especially important to include. Looking at the current WIkiProject Rivers FAs, I see that there is at least one river FA without a separate Geology section, so this is not an absolute requirement. I also note that the topic of geology is mentioned in some places in the article, so it is OK, but I would prefer it if the article had an actual Geology section.
 * I think it might help to use (and link on first use) the term river mile in places The Turner Dam, located 41.8 miles (67.3 km) from the river's mouth and within the boundaries of the Jordan Narrows...
 * Done


 * Would it be possible to put a small inset of the map of the state of Utah with the location of Salt Lake County in red in the lower right corner of File:Jordan River (Utah) Watershed.jpg? That way there could be one fewer map file in the article. This is just an idea, not an actionable request (you don't have to do it unless you think it would help).
 * That would be beyond my expertise at cursing, err, making maps. Bgwhite (talk) 19:59, 5 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Try this ;-) File:Jordan River Utah with locator map.png Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 21:11, 5 July 2010 (UTC)
 * I was BOLD and added the composite map to the Geobox just now - feel free to revert if you don't like it. Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 22:35, 5 July 2010 (UTC)

Nicely done, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 22:32, 3 July 2010 (UTC)
 * For a river which flows through four of the five largest cities in Utah and which is 34% urban, I wish there was at least one urban image. :Good point. I'll be in Salt Lake at the end of the month and will get some photos then. Bgwhite (talk) 19:59, 5 July 2010 (UTC)
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