Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Karma in Jainism/archive1


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by User:Ian Rose 10:06, 15 June 2013 (UTC).

Karma in Jainism

 * Nominator(s): Rahul Jain (talk) 12:39, 12 May 2013 (UTC)

I am nominating this for featured article because it is a well-sourced and beautifully written article. It meets all the criteria of a Featured Article. If there is any minor issue left out, I will clear it as soon as possible. Rahul Jain (talk) 12:39, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Images File:Soul Attracting Karma.jpg looks like copy-pasted clip art. I'm unconvinced that it's genuinely public domain.  File:Destruction of Karmas1.jpg is from the same user, User:Indian Chronicles.  All other images are free use, some with OTRS permissions, no concern. - hahnch e n 00:27, 13 May 2013 (UTC)
 * I have left a note on User:Indian Chronicles' talk page regarding this. Rahul Jain (talk) 03:43, 13 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Yes. I have created the image using cliparts available in powerpoint. If they using clipart is not in Public domain, then please remove it.--Indian Chronicles (talk) 08:43, 13 May 2013 (UTC)
 * You could create a new version using clip art from Openclipart, and the resulting image would be free use. - hahnch e n 14:49, 13 May 2013 (UTC)

Comment: I have not read the article, but I can see at once a few problems:
 * Uncited text. Examples: final sentence of "Material theory"; whole second paragraph of "Reincarnation and transmigration"; whole fourth paragraph of "Four states of existence"; possibly more.
 * Several sections are presented in bullet-point format rather than in proper prose.

In addition, a couple of minor issues: citations should be at the end of blockquotes rather than at the beginning; check use of "p." instead of "pp." in page ranges, and inconsistent spacing after "p." or "pp."

Brianboulton (talk) 13:22, 13 May 2013 (UTC)
 * I addressed most of the concerns you raised. I went through the whole article again to provide citations and references wherever they were required. Also, I reworked with the formatting of citation. I used the templates for consistency. I agree that several sections are bullet-point format, but I think those actually do require a list for better organization of information. Rahul Jain (talk) 11:43, 14 May 2013 (UTC)

Delegate comment -- With no commentary for a month, this review has well and truly stalled so I'm going to archive it. Just glancing through it, I still see paragraphs that end without citations. Furthermore, although there's no requirement for an article to pass GA before being nominated at FAC, it's something I'd recommend achieving before re-nominating here. Checking the article talk page, it also appears the last peer review was in 2009, so another is probably in order as well. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 10:55, 14 June 2013 (UTC)

Ian Rose (talk) 10:56, 14 June 2013 (UTC)
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