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Kyla (Filipino singer)

 * Nominator(s): Pseud 14 (talk) 19:04, 15 July 2023 (UTC)

After tackling a Filipino actor BLP, back again with another bio, this time a singer. Kyla started her music journey competing in talent shows and broke into the Philippine music scene in the 2000s, at a time when R&B and soul music was unheard of from local musicians. Known for her distinctive sound and melismatic singing style, she has helped popularize the music genre, earning the nickname as the country's "Queen of R&B". Constructive criticism, in any form and from anyone, will be appreciated. Happy to address your comments and thanks to all who take the time to review. Pseud 14 (talk) 19:04, 15 July 2023 (UTC)

Media review (pass) – the image is licensed appropriately, has alt text, and is a nice choice for the infobox. The audio sample has an appropriate FUR and meets WP:SAMPLE. Heartfox (talk) 17:42, 19 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks very much for the review! Pseud 14 (talk) 19:05, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

Heartfox

 * "Her sound became a catalyst in the growth and popularity of the music genres, making her one of the most prominent pop culture figures" → specifially in the Philippines?
 * Yes, just specific to the Philippines. Since the preceding sentence mentions that, and the subsequent statement also says "in the country", I thought mentioning it would be repetitive.


 * "Kyla began singing" → I would use something other than "Kyla" here as the section's final sentence "She adopted the stage name Kyla" is fine
 * Done (I think)


 * "She won the competition" → we know already as the previous sentence says "became the show's junior division winner"
 * Revised and removed the first mention for clarity


 * "When she was thirteen, she" → repetitive "she" is undesirable
 * Removed


 * "I was only a singer and never joined the acting skits". → I believe the period should be inside the quote as this is unchanged from the original
 * Done


 * You can remove "various" in almost all instances in the article as it is superfluous
 * Done


 * "bars, before" → comma unnecessary
 * Removed


 * "easy to remember and one that had more impact" → could just be paraphrased to "memorable"
 * Done


 * "lead single" → lead single
 * Linked


 * Menderos or Mendaros?
 * Mendaros. That's a typo on my part.


 * "which featured elements" → which features elements
 * Done


 * "She wrote two tracks, "I'm Into You" and "This Day", on the album, which featured elements of "pop and ballad tunes", intertwined with her "R&B signature sound"" → I really would not use four commas in one sentence. Maybe "She wrote two tracks on the album, which features elements of "pop and ballad tunes" intertwined with her "R&B signature sound"
 * Revised as suggested


 * "Not Your Ordinary Girl was Kyla's fourth studio album, released in May 2004" → reads awkwardly
 * Revised.


 * Baby Gil, Nestor Torre Jr., etc. reviews are more appropriate for the album/tv show articles. Unless there is a source supporting overall critical reception of something, it comes across as cherrypicking
 * I have thought about that as well, however, my main reasoning for incorporating reviews within the article (as I had done with other Filipino musician FAs) is to supplement the prose with content in lieu of domestic and international chart positions, singles/albums sales/certifications, debut ranking information, peak positions etc.. which you would commonly find in articles of musicians where sales tracking or chart rankings are published ie. Billboard, RIAA, ARIA, UK Charts, iTunes etc. Unfortunately, in the Philippines these aren't tracked, so there's not much to go with. On another note, only those with album reviews available online have been incorporated, since not all albums have it. These are also attributed to the publication/writer and not as a statement of consensus, to avoid the perception of cherrypicking, since there is no data on aggregate scoring employed by sites such as Metacritic, etc. Gil, Torre and the likes are the usual media critics that provide commentaries/reviews, which I've also used in musician FAs such as Regine Velasquez and Angeline Quinto. Similarly, they also do not provide ratings/aggregate scoring. As for on-screen reviews, I've tailored it to actor BLP FAs, which typically includes reviews/commentaries of performances on film/TV (i.e. Kate Winslet, Jessica Chastain).


 * "Concurrently, she also began" → "also" is superfluous
 * Removed "also"


 * "singers namely" → singers such as
 * Done

Overall an easy read but I do feel that the reviews in "life and career" are better suited to the album articles, which seem underdeveloped. As I know nothing of this topic and only evaluated the prose, I will be holding back making a specific declaration until there are a few more comments from others. Great work! Heartfox (talk) 15:24, 24 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Thank for your review Heartfox. I have provided my responses to your comments, including your concern re reviews. Let me know if they have been addressed satisfactorily or if I may have missed anything. Pseud 14 (talk) 20:15, 24 July 2023 (UTC)
 * - do you feel ready to support or oppose here? Hog Farm Talk 22:06, 5 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Not seeing "Because of You" as the second single from Not Your Ordinary Girl, the source says it is "is one of the cuts"
 * Although not explicitly said, the article discusses both "Human Nature" and "Because of You" primarily as they were both released as singles. I've removed stating it as second single otherwise.


 * Journey is referred to as her debut extended play, but the source says it is a "six-track album" and "her first album after almost a four-year break in recording", not a debut EP
 * I would assume that an extended play contains more tracks than a single but fewer than an LP. while it is not mentioned as a full-length album, a six-track album would be considered an EP. Since she hasn't released an EP based on the article, I listed as a a debut EP. But I have removed it if it is a cause of concern. Apple Music lists it as an EP. Which I've added as a source.


 * "'Hanggang Ngayon' ... is credited with influencing every R&B performer during the early 2000s" → not seeing this in the source
 * I believe this would line in the article supports her influence along with citing her R&B singles: Though R&B isn’t as big in the Philippines as it was during the early to mid-2000s ... Kyla, who popularized the songs, “Hanggang Ngayon” and “Not Your Ordinary Girl, and unless I have paraphrased it incorrectly, it would be tied to There was a point when R&B singers were everywhere, supporting the latter claim that her sound/music had an impact into how R&B had an impact on other performers. I've revised caption instead to remove ambiguity and confusion. Spotchecks requested. Pseud 14 (talk) 20:35, 6 August 2023 (UTC)
 * I would like to see more spotchecks before supporting . Heartfox (talk) 20:01, 6 August 2023 (UTC)


 * I'm kind of confused by the birth note. I would put it as a note for editors instead of readers, as referring to Wikipedia policies to the public seems a little odd, and WordPress is not a source itself but a website hosting service.
 * I see what you mean; used the hidden note as suggested. Removed WordPress.


 * Her birth in the Philippines is mentioned in the infobox but not the prose
 * Added. Also placed hidden note next to it.
 * The source doesn't say she was born in the Philippines tho
 * Is 25 years before January 5, 2007, January 5, 1982 not 1981?
 * There is no secondary source citing her birthplace elsewhere or outside of the country; so I listed Philippines in the infobox with the added footnote, and did not include in the prose instead, as it would be assumed she was born and raised in the country and there are no sources to support that she was born abroad. So either I just leave Philippines in the infobox and don't include it in the prose. Thoughts?
 * As for the birthdate, a look-up online puts her birth year as 1981. This article published in 2021 states she is 40-years old. I've added it too. Pseud 14 (talk) 17:54, 12 August 2023 (UTC)


 * She is referred to as "Kyla" before the sentence "She adopted the stage name Kyla"? Heartfox (talk) 15:49, 12 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Revised the preceding sentence so "Kyla" is only mentioned in the latter part. Also similarly with Lady Gaga, she is referred to as Gaga in every instance, well before the mention of when she coined the stage name in the Career beginning sections.
 * Actioned all. Let me know if there's anything I may have missed. Pseud 14 (talk) 17:17, 12 August 2023 (UTC)

Hi Heartfox, would it possible for you to speed up your review a little if you have time? It has been three weeks now since you started your review, including a request for spot-check, which Jo-Jo has kindly put some effort into. Thank you for your review so far. Pseud 14 (talk) 22:02, 12 August 2023 (UTC)
 * I'm confused because the first source for her birthday indicates 1982 while the other indicates 1981, but only 1981 is given. None of them specify that she was born in the Philippines, so I would just omit that from the infobox. Heartfox (talk) 22:30, 12 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Heartfox, I took out "Philippines" from the infobox. Kept ref 1 which supports her full name. Added ref 2 - which supports date-month (Jan 5), and kept ref 3 which supports that the year is 1981 (as it is mentioned that she is 40-years old at the time of publication). Hopefully that fixes the issue, if my understanding is correct? Pseud 14 (talk) 22:47, 12 August 2023 (UTC)
 * OK I will defer to your expertise on her year of birth. Support . Heartfox (talk) 22:55, 12 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Heartfox, thanks for your thorough input and review as well (and patience). Pseud 14 (talk) 22:59, 12 August 2023 (UTC)

Comments by FrB.TG

 * "In 2010, she teamed with Jay R, Billy Crawford, and Kris Lawrence to co-write the lead single "Don't Tie Me Down" for her eight studio album Private Affair." The song also had Jimmy Muna as a co-writer and I'm not sure why we're suddenly naming co-writers and that too of only the lead single.
 * I have removed mentions of co-writers in the lead and tweaked it.


 * "Her interest in music and performing eventually led to joining" - "led to her joining" or "led her to join"
 * Done


 * "At age twelve, she auditioned for the television talent show Tanghalan ng Kampeon, where she qualified and defended her spot for eight consecutive weeks.[4][5] She won the competition, performing a cover of Jennifer Holliday's "I Am Changing"." If she did in fact win the competition, I don't see why it's necessary to say she qualified and defended her spot. I would just say she auditioned for the show and won it.
 * Revised as suggested


 * "she was turned down by almost every record label" - this sounds as if she tried at almost every label there is. I would narrow it down in some way like every major record label (if that was the case) or several record labels.
 * Revised, used the latter suggestion


 * "The song's lyrics express a hopeful revival of a faded romance after parting ways" - it sounds like the romance parted ways when it was the couple.
 * Clarified as a couple's faded romance after parting ways


 * "Not Your Ordinary Girl was Kyla's fourth studio album, which was released in May 2004" - ambiguous. It reads as if it were her fourth album that month and not overall.
 * Revised the sentence, hopefully the change is much clearer


 * "The Philippine Star considered Heart 2 Heart as a mature production, remaining faithful to Kyla's core as an R&B artist" - it sounds as if TPS remained faithful to Kyla's core as an R&B artist and not H2H.
 * Revised so it refers to the album


 * "Titled Private Affair, the record saw Kyla exploring with producers" - what did they explore?
 * Thanks for catching, I've hanged to collaborated instead of explored


 * "co-wrote the single "Don't Tie Me Down" with Billy Crawford, Kris Lawrence, and Jimmy Muna." Jay R is missing here.
 * Added Jay R


 * "lauded the album's sound for being fresh and innovative" - "lauded the album's sound as fresh and innovative" for NPOV reason.
 * Done


 * "She then collaborated with rock band Kamikazee and featured in the single "Huling Sayaw" from their album Romantico" - too verbose. "She then featured in rock band Kamikazee's "Huling Sayaw", a single from their album Romantico".
 * Revised as suggested


 * "who fall in love despite their being members of feuding families" - I would remove "their". It means the same thing with or without it.
 * Removed


 * "Kyla found herself challenged by the idea of playing an unlikeable and manipulative woman, but said that her personal experience as a mother drew her to the part." I'm not sure what does her being a mother correlate with her inclination to play an unlikeable woman. I assume her character is also a mother?
 * That's right. I have tweaked this part to clarify and have some correlation between the two statements for better flow.


 * "Kyla's vocal style and singing ability has shaped" - plural; "have shaped".
 * Done

These should be it. Check my edits to see if I messed something up. FrB.TG (talk) 10:58, 26 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks very much for taking the time in reviewing FrB.TG. Really appreciate it, and thanks for the edits you've done, they've helped improve the article in a much better shape. All comments have been actioned, let me know if there's anything I might have missed. Pseud 14 (talk) 13:44, 26 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Support FrB.TG (talk) 17:39, 28 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks very much for your support and edits FrB.TG. Very much appreciated. Pseud 14 (talk) 18:11, 28 July 2023 (UTC)

Comments Support from Chris

 * "credited with helping redefine R&B and soul music in the Philippines" => "credited with helping to redefine R&B and soul music in the Philippines"
 * Done


 * "Kyla's debut studio album Way to Your Heart containing the lead single "Bring It On" was released" => "Kyla's debut studio album Way to Your Heart, containing the lead single "Bring It On", was released"
 * Done


 * "A reviewer from The Philippine Star described the record her best work thus far" => "A reviewer from The Philippine Star described the record as her best work thus far"
 * Done


 * "During the second Manny Pacquiao vs. Marco Antonio Barrera boxing match on October 7, 2007, at the Mandalay Bay in Las Vegas, Kyla sang the Philippine national anthem" - I presume she sang it before the match rather than during it
 * Correct. Similar to NBA or Superbowl it is performed before the match. I used during to refer to the event as a whole and not so much on the actual fight/match itself (hopefully that makes sense). Let me know if it needs to be tweaked for clarity though.
 * I'd suggest changing "during" to "at". That still (IMO) conveys the sense that she performed it at the event as a whole, but doesn't have the implication that she literally started belting it out while the two boxers were hitting each other..... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:03, 29 July 2023 (UTC)
 * That makes sense. That was my initial choice too if I had to change it. Switched to "At" now. Thanks for this perspective. (it does seem funny now that I'm imagining it actually happening lol) Pseud 14 (talk) 13:40, 29 July 2023 (UTC)


 * "Music critics appreciated Kyla's aristry" - last word should be spelt "artistry"
 * My bad for the typo. Fixed


 * "Kyla began dating PBA player" - I would give the full title of the PBA (or simply say "basketball player")
 * Done. Used basketball player but linked to PBA article.
 * Hmmmm, that seems a bit Easter egg-y. If you want to retain the direct link to that article, it would be better to write "Kyla began dating Philippine Basketball Association (PBA) player Rich Alvarez" -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:06, 29 July 2023 (UTC)
 * You're right. I removed the link instead and kept basketball player. Pseud 14 (talk) 13:40, 29 July 2023 (UTC)


 * Are the names of her roles in Narito ang Puso Ko and Time of My Life not known?
 * Unfortunately no secondary source, other than IMDb, which is not considered high-quality. These are guest/cameo appearances as well, so her roles where not significant and without any online source.


 * Note A needs a full stop
 * Added


 * That's all I got - great work!! -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 20:48, 28 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks so much for your time in taking up this review ChrisTheDude. I have provided my responses and actioned your comments. Let me know if there's anything I may have missed. Pseud 14 (talk) 23:58, 28 July 2023 (UTC)


 * Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 15:37, 29 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks very much for your support ChrisTheDude. Really appreciate your time as always. Pseud 14 (talk) 15:42, 29 July 2023 (UTC)

NØ
My only two doubts were PolyEast Records not being sourced or mentioned other than in the infobox and the inclusion of the iTunes chart. Since these were both addressed while I was reviewing her discography, I can go ahead and support the article for promotion. Great work here. My only suggestion would be to hyphenate "singer-songwriter" in the occupation parameter of the infobox as well if she is addressed as such in the prose.--NØ 11:54, 3 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your time in reviewing this FAC along with the discography, MaranoFan. I have made the change in the infobox parameter as suggested. Pseud 14 (talk) 14:06, 3 August 2023 (UTC)

Source review
Reviewing this version, spot-check only upon request. What is note #a based upon - what are the "some sources" and who is disagreeing with them? Is Philippine Daily Inquirer still a reliable source, given some comments on its article? Seems like the source formatting is consistent and the necessary information is there. Who is the author of #109 - I can't find that name. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 19:03, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks for taking up the source review Jo-Jo Eumerus. I have addressed each item below. Let me know if they are to your satisfaction.
 * I've added the note, as I couldn't find a reliable primary or secondary source that lists her place of birth. The "sources" I was referring to would be the non-high-quality sources i.e. IMDb, Tumblr, or blogs, that would yield her birthplace info based on a quick internet look-up stating that it was Tondo, Manila. Since these cannot be used as sources, I simply wrote "Philippines" on the infobox and added the note as an explanation as to why there is no place of birth listed on the article.
 * Philippine Daily Inquirer is considered a high-quality and trusted English language newspaper in the Philippines, having been around since 1985 and with the newspaper having editorial oversight. I believe the comments on the article's reputation are opinion pieces and criticism stemming from Philippine politicians and other media outlets from what I've read. I believe they are isolated cases and is not a general consensus of the newspaper's credibility on its coverage of current events, entertainment, lifestyle or other topics.
 * I have removed the author name on ref 109, columnist name is listed on the page but it appears to be credited to a different article and not the one cited. Pseud 14 (talk) 20:01, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Well, this one's an interesting thing. If the note exists to address unreliable sources, should it mention the sources? And the rebuttal? Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 20:09, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
 * I've revised the note to be more specific, mentioning the non-high-quality sourcing and the rationale for it's non-use per wiki standards on verifiability of sourcing. Let me know if that will suffice? Pseud 14 (talk) 20:21, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
 * This is something that I'd want wider discussion on. For example, have we seen people adding incorrect information? OTOH I am not entirely sure if it's a FA-level question, though. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 20:29, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
 * That’s a fair point. I could simply remove the notation if that’s something that’s likely going to be challenged and simply put country of birth?. The problem isn’t that people put the wrong information of where she was born, it’s the absence of high quality source to support it. I’ve tried searching online or via Google Books but coverage of her doesn’t seem to state that information. But I’ve also seen other articles that lists incorrect birthplace. An example is Angel Aquino, before I overhauled the article it listed her as someone born from Dumaguete when it wasn’t the case. I’ve also seen birth year such as that of Mariah Carey which includes an efn Pseud 14 (talk) 20:40, 5 August 2023 (UTC)
 * I was wondering, if you have time, if you would be ok to do spot-checks as well based on reviewers request above?
 * I don't think you signed in the edit you pinged Jo-Jo so he would not have gotten it.--NØ 10:04, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks for catching this MaranoFan, I didn't even realize it was unsigned. Sorry for the re-ping Jo-Jo Eumerus, was wondering if you have spare time to do some spot checks per editor's request above? Pseud 14 (talk) 12:39, 9 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Hi, how is this looking now? Gog the Mild (talk) 12:33, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Hi Gog and Jo-Jo, per Heartfox’s suggestion above, I have removed the efn and mention of Philippines in the infobox as it is not sourced. This change happening after the source review. Pseud 14 (talk) 13:31, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
 * My sense is that footnotes that aren't sourced or can't be traced to a source should probably stay off. If folks persist in adding wrong information, a hidden comment is probably better than an ill-sourced footnote. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 16:32, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Jo-Jo Eumerus Thanks for that, hidden comments are already placed on the infobox and in the prose section, since I removed the footnote. Let me know if there's anything else outstanding. Thanks as always. Pseud 14 (talk) 16:44, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Copying Gog for the remaining item addressed from Jo-jo. Pseud 14 (talk) 20:41, 13 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks, but I am waiting for Jo-Jo to pass or otherwise the review. Gog the Mild (talk) 17:33, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
 * No worries Gog. Also pinging Jo-Jo, I've addressed your last comment. Do you have anything outstanding that needs to be actioned? Thanks. Pseud 14 (talk) 17:44, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

Spot-check
Spot-checking this version:
 * 11: OK.
 * 23: I presume that these in the source are all her albums.
 * Correct. Including Way To Your Heart which is used to support this sentence.


 * 24: OK.
 * 32: I don't see "I Will Be Here"
 * My bad on the typo. The title of both the album and single is "I Will Be There" and not I Will Be Here. Pseud 14 (talk) 21:01, 9 August 2023 (UTC)


 * 35: Why are these specific performers singled out?
 * I excluded Keith Martin, since he is already involved in the album and IMO not worth repeating as he is already mentioned in the earlier sentence. These singers listed are special guests and collaborated with her only in the concert. The Maneuvers are the backing dancers, so excluded them as well. Pseud 14 (talk) 21:01, 9 August 2023 (UTC)


 * 38: OK.
 * 45: OK.
 * 54: OK.
 * 62: OK.
 * 68: OK.
 * 71: OK for the second use, can't say about the first as I don't know Tagalog.
 * Ayon kay Kyla, magiging challenge ang pagganap niya sa character ni Ruby ... pero sa pagkakatulad naman daw niya kay Ruby, pareho raw silang ina. A translation from the excerpt: According to Kyla, it would be a challenge to portray Ruby .. but the similarities she found in playing Ruby is that they are both mothers Pseud 14 (talk) 21:01, 9 August 2023 (UTC)


 * 72: OK.
 * 75: What is "her vocal performance and songwriting" based on?
 * Not sure I follow, but if my understanding is correct, the reviewer/critic praised her vocal performance and songwriting on the album. Based on excerpts: Vocally, Journey must be Kyla's best. Her multi-octave range has acquired warmer, fuller tones and she approaches every note with great confidence. She obviously loves singing and it is great that she has found songs that show off her extraordinary talent on her comeback bid ... Nice to find out she is also back to writing songs. In fact, the title track is her collaboration with fellow R&B artist Jay-R and Kettle Mata. Let me know if that answers your question. Happy to revise if ambiguous. Pseud 14 (talk) 21:01, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * That works better. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 08:26, 10 August 2023 (UTC)


 * 80: OK.
 * 84: Can't access this source.
 * Strange. I tried opening it and it does work. Archive should also work. Screen grab of the line that supports the award. Pseud 14 (talk) 21:01, 9 August 2023 (UTC)


 * 91: OK.
 * 94: I am not sure that the article says that they were Kaya's inspirations.
 * Kyla also admires Beyonce and Brandy ... Kyla grew up listening to Fitzgerald, Franklin and Holiday. If I were to interpret it, her admiration of the singers as well as her listening to their music, would somehow encompass them being musical inspirations. Thoughts? Pseud 14 (talk) 21:01, 9 August 2023 (UTC)


 * 95: Where is it said that Kaya uses melismatic and Corey mentioned?
 * While Kyla has a singing style of her own, you can tell she has been greatly influenced by Miss [Mariah] Carey. From the airy way she sings to the vocal runs she makes Melisma or melismatic technique/singing style is the formal term for doing vocal runs. Includes mention of Carey as well. Pseud 14 (talk) 21:01, 9 August 2023 (UTC)


 * 96: Where is "one of the best artists"?
 * The article is about Ashanti. Kyla is referring to her as one of the best artists in R&B. She is quoted saying "Her music and style is unique. One of the best artists ever!" Pseud 14 (talk) 21:01, 9 August 2023 (UTC)

Here we go. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 19:53, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * 97: OK.
 * Thanks for doing the spot-checks Jo-Jo Eumerus. Have provided my responses per above. Let me know if they address your queries or if anything requires revisions or clarifications. Appreciate your time doing this. Pseud 14 (talk) 21:01, 9 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Seems like this passes the spot-check, then. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 08:26, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks you again for doing this Jo-Jo Eumerus. Courtesy ping to Heartfox as well. Pseud 14 (talk) 12:15, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Seems like this passes, with usual caveats about my unfamiliarity with the topic. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 19:12, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Thank you Jo-Jo Eumerus, appreciate all your work and contributions during the review process. Also pinging Gog, following Jo-Jo's response as an update on the nomination's status :) Pseud 14 (talk) 19:17, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

Gog the Mild (talk) 19:47, 16 August 2023 (UTC)