Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Mario Vargas Llosa


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted 20:49, 22 April 2008.

Mario Vargas Llosa
I'm co-nominating this article for featured article because I believe that it satisfies the criteria for Wikipedia's Featured Articles. It is a thorough, fluent, and well-researched account of one of the most important authors of contemporary Latin American and world literature. The article is the result of an immense amount of work, above all by my co-nominators, with the generous aid of the FA-Team. The editors actively seek your suggestions for further improvement. Thank you. Co-nom: User:Isabel-clase, User:lincolnchan98, User:tommaso88. jbmurray (talk|contribs) 22:07, 14 April 2008 (UTC)

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 * SandyGeorgia 25
 * Isabel-clase 22

Sandy Georgia (Talk) 00:35, 19 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Support Disclaimer: I have copy edited and reviewed this article recently. This is a well-written, well-organized, well-researched, and well-illustrated article. I am happy to support this fine biography of an important Latin American writer - another excellent article from the Murder, Madness, and Mayhem project. I would like to thank the editors for all of their hard work and for their willingness to continually revise and to work towards the highest standards. Awadewit (talk) 22:20, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Remember how you promised me you'd remove the JSTOR, etc. links per WP:LINKSTOAVOID? Awadewit (talk) 22:23, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I am concerned if other readers with JSTOR access cannot follow the links. But, and I recognize that this may not be the time and the place for this discussion, in general I'd like to argue fairly strongly for such links.  It seems to me that these are, as it were, "bonus" links.  It is not that they could be replaced with other, more accessible, links.  So while it is true that only a minority of readers can follow them, for those users they are extraordinarily helpful, as they get them straight to the source in question.  Whereas readers who are not so fortunate are no worse off than if the links were not there.
 * I do, however, agree that there should be some kind of warning. And if there's no field within the citation template, I can add such a warning in plain text after each link.  --jbmurray (talk|contribs) 22:35, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Jbmurray, as I understand it, only the people logged in at your university can use those links. That is a real minority. If other people, like myself, with JSTOR and EBSCO access cannot use these links, they are next to useless. (Just to be absolutely clear - I'm clicked on them and they don't work for me - I get a message saying I'm not authorized to view the article.) Awadewit (talk) 22:39, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Hmm. Obviously that would invalidate the inclusion of those links.  My parochialism and my support for minority rights is not so very limited!  I'd get rid of them immediately.  But I'm a little puzzled.  Anyone who is logged into a network that has such rights (even by proxy, as I am when I am at home as now) should be able to access those links; there's nothing about them that is unique to UBC or indeed any other university.  Perhaps we could do a little testing (and report back on the talk page?) from other users who can otherwise generally gain access to such databases.  --jbmurray (talk|contribs) 22:50, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * JSTOR is widely used in academia, with many universities supporting it. I think it is entirely appropriate to link to JSTOR in articles with academic content. I'm surprised there are problems linking to these particular articles: I will see tomorrow if I can access them from my university. Geometry guy 23:39, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Note: I am able to follow these links seamlessly and am not attending UBC. I !vote keep. Wrad (talk) 01:17, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I can too, and am in a different country. (JSTOR has quite recently changed format; this may be part of whatever problem there is.) Septentrionalis PMAnderson 05:09, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I would like to emphasize that only thousands of people are subscribed through universities (which hopefully work better than mine) while millions of people view the site subscriptionless. Let's not irritate the millions. Awadewit (talk) 02:36, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * This is a purely hypothetical problem until one of those millions speaks up; and even then, they are not being hurt unless (as is most unlikely) there is a free link to Latin American Research Review which we are omitting. As one of the tens of thousands who can link, I am merely grateful not to be forced to search for the article again — this is the purpose of convenience links. Septentrionalis PMAnderson 05:09, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Well, as one of the people who can't use the links, I am speaking up. It is annoying. Awadewit (talk) 15:40, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * (←) It is annoying when one can't access the article, sure, but removing the link would not solve that problem. "Not annoying some readers" is not part of Wikipedia's five pillars, nor is it a featured article criterion. Of course we should not have spamlinks, and if this were a link to an expensive publisher's online site to which very few can afford to subscribe (I won't mention any names: you know who I am talking about!) then I would support removing the links with enthusiasm. However, this isn't the case with JSTOR, which is widely supported by many universities, and probably other institutions such as some public libraries: it provides access to old material which has limited commercial value.
 * I also find the rhetorical figures of thousands, tens of thousands and millions unhelpful. My university alone provides JSTOR access to over 10000 people (I checked the links) and so, given the number of universities in the UK, among 60 million citizens, approximately one percent (half a million or so) may well have access to JSTOR. Furthermore, those who are likely to be interested in this article are particularly likely to belong to this fraction. I expect the case in North America is similar.
 * In an encyclopedia, providing readers with information is far more important than avoiding annoying them. The link could be removed for the purposes of this FAC, but it will just be readded later, and I doubt anyone would want to take an article to FAR over such a link. So I don't see any case for removing it now. Geometry guy 21:50, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Well, I seem to be in the minority of my interpretation of WP:LINKSTOAVOID here. Awadewit (talk) 22:16, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * If this were a bureacracy and I were a lawyer, then I would agree with your interpretation. However, WP:LINKSTOAVOID is a guideline (subject to common sense and the occasional exception): guidelines (and even policy) reflect consensus, they do not determine it. I would encourage more of Wikipedia's best editors, such as yourself, to stand up to those who believe that guidelines are there to tell editors how to make this a better encyclopedia. They are not: making this a better encyclopedia is something we can all judge for ourselves, and consensus is how we reconcile our differing views. Policy and guidelines provide a framework to acheive this consensus, but they don't determine it. Geometry guy 23:22, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * And in pure Wikilawyering terms, WP:EL says two things about this subject. The short version says not to link to pay sites, but links to the long version (I just moved the link for clarity, but it existed before); the long version says A site that requires registration or a subscription should not be linked unless the web site itself is the topic of the article or is being used as an inline reference. These are inline references, and the full guidance should take precedence of the one-sentence summary.. Septentrionalis PMAnderson 03:41, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Um, that was me conceding to the consensus - sorry it wasn't clearer. Awadewit (talk) 04:55, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * There are two of us. I think GG and I are right, but we certainly aren't consensus if somebody agrees with Awadewit's expressed position. Until someone does, let's move on... Septentrionalis PMAnderson 05:27, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * There are four of you, by the way. Awadewit (talk) 15:01, 16 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Support. As co-nominator and a significant contributor, my support may seem obvious and/or superfluous.  However I would like to take this opportunity to say that the vast bulk of the credit here has to go to my co-nominators, who have put in all the hard work, not only in searching for sources, but also most recently in undertaking an audacious (and in my view, very successful) wholesale revision of the article structure.  --jbmurray (talk|contribs) 22:23, 14 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Current ref 59 is just a bald link to an external website, it's lacking formatting and publisher and last access date.
 * All links checked out as good. Ealdgyth - Talk 22:24, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I think I've fixed that. Thanks for pointing the problem out.  --jbmurray (talk|contribs) 22:31, 14 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Comment. Congratulations to the authors. Unless I'm mistaken, the article doesn't describe how Vargas Llosa contributed to "The New Novel (La Nueva Novela)", or tell me what the New Novel signified. The concept bookends the article, in the lead and in "Legacy", but ¿dónde está la carne? (apologies for that!). An answer to that may help with the other goal, to expand the section on his legacy. A smaller point: the sentence beginning "Vargas Llosa wrote of Arguedas's that it was..." seems to be missing a word, or else the implied thing being possessed is just not clear to me. – Outriggr  § 02:12, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Outrigger, thank you kindly for pointing that out. Perhaps the section on The New Novel could be expanded. I'll have a look around to see if I can find some more "carne" for it (I love Wendy's by the way). And thank you for pointing out the missing word, I have fixed that. Lincolnchan98 (talk) 18:23, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * While searching about The New Novel I found out that MVLL didn't really contribute, but it was a literary criticism of his work. I've changed that in the article. Lincolnchan98 (talk) 08:11, 22 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Support Yet again, the WP:MMM project has produced another quality article on the scope of Latin American literature. Kaiser matias (talk) 06:29, 15 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Comment I haven't read through the article yet, but unless there are direct quotes being taken from Spanish-language sources, footnote translations are not necessary. If the issue is about accessibility of sources, consider that most readers do not have access to even most English-language sources used. If the issue is about the translation itself (assuming the reader has the book in hand), there are plenty of Spanish-speaking Wikipedians that could verify the translation (indeed, how is this better than an involved Wikipedian translating it in advance?), plus Babelfish, plus wordreference.com and so many other online tools that make it a breeze to translate from Spanish to English. The policy language about quotations in footnotes is new.  See the discussion at WP:V that led to its addition--even there, editors emphasized that this shouldn't mean those using non-English sources have to quote from sources they're using for basic facts and were concerned that any strict translation requirement would contribute to systemic bias. Mangostar (talk) 06:54, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * And, in everyone's defense, the change was made after the February 5 discussion with the FA-Team, and apparently no one noticed. Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 15:52, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * In Wikipedia's defense, there is a Spanish Wikipedia for Spanish language pages. Verifiability means just that. A foreign language lacks verifiability unless there can be a direct translation. I don't see why you are unwilling to move in such a direction, and I ask that you refrain from acting in such a way, Sandy, because there is a conflict of interest as you spent quite a lot of time dealing with the page. This is for objective criticism, and your comments are, by definition, subjective based on your involvement. Thanks. Ottava Rima (talk) 17:00, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * A bit hypocritical of you to accuse her of conflict of interest when the only reason you are here is to make sure all of jbmurray's FACs are miserable because of some silly dispute a few days ago. Wrad (talk) 17:27, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * If you are unable or unwilling to follow WP:AGF, then maybe Wikipedia is not the place for you. Such comments are uncivil and inappropriate for Wikipedia. Ottava Rima (talk) 17:56, 15 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Support This article is well written and well sourced. Finally does justice to one of the great Latin-American writers out there. NickMar206 (talk) 07:15, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Support Excellent, excellent work. Comprehensive and scintillating prose, in my opinion this is a great addition to the encyclopedia. Keep up the good work. Lazulilasher (talk) 13:31, 15 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Support: Very well written and intriguing article about an important literary figure. I'm so glad that Hispanic lit is getting its due here on the English Wikipedia!  Wonderful work, everyone.  As for the concerns about Spanish sources, I cannot say that it bothers me.  It's guideline, not policy, that states a preference for English sources; if no English language sources are available, then other language sources suffice.  A compromise of including several translations via footnotes may be the way to go, but I don't think even that is necessary.  BTW, this very issue was brought up on the Spanish Wikipedia when the Knut (polar bear)'s Spanish counterpart (Knut (oso bear)), a translation of the FA English version that uses a majority of the original English sources, before it was put up for candidatos a artículos destacados.  Sure, a polar bear cub is arguably less important than a world famous and highly respected writer, but if Spanish editors aren't complaining about a source's language, why should we? :) (Only partly kidding with that last bit...) María ( habla  con migo ) 15:24, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * WP:V is policy, not guideline. But it refers to material likely to be challenged and direct quotes.  Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 16:00, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * This is me, standing corrected. Original point still stands alongside me, however. María ( habla  con migo ) 16:05, 15 April 2008 (UTC)

Support I've come to the conclusion that none of the references fit the criteria for "likely to be challenged" in a way that makes me think they need translations. If murray wants to go above and beyond the call of duty to translate things that really don't need it, then I applaud him for it. It is apparent to me that Rima is applying the criteria in an extreme way in order to get revenge on Awadewit and jbmurray for a silly misunderstanding awhile ago. I had hoped that editors at FAC would be mature enough to set aside grudges. I'm really getting sick of the way he's treating people on here. It's no wonder people hate the FA process.
 * Support. This article has come a long way since it's Good Article nomination back in March. The reorganization makes it much more compelling to read all the way through (and less redundant). My only criticism is that the non-English references should indicate what language they are in. This can normally be accomplished by adding "language=Spanish" or whatever to the citation template. I would do it myself, but I'm not 100% sure all the non-English sources are Spanish (some could be Portuguese, although I imagine that's quite unlikely). I would be more comfortable if someone familiar with the sources would do it. Kaldari (talk) 17:11, 15 April 2008 (UTC)

Just a note: "likely to be challenged" does not mean "one person challenges it". It is determined by consensus whether or not something, for some special reason, is likely to be controversial. Just because something is in another language does not make it controversial. You must find another reason to ask for a translation besides "it's in Spanish." Otherwise, why would they have the line about it's being likely to be challenged. Wrad (talk) 17:17, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Comment. As Wrad notes, Ottava Rima and I had some differences a few days ago, over an article that s/he had nominated to FAC, which subsequently failed that process.   A number of other editors became caught up in the subsequent dispute.  It's also worth commenting that Ottava Rima has had rather similar differences, on rather similar topics and for rather similar reasons, with Awadewit, as well as a couple of other editors.  I would rather that such earlier disputes do not overwhelm this discussion, which should be focussed on the fine job done by a group of student editors in bringing this article, Mario Vargas Llosa, to the stage where it can even be considered for Featured Article Candidacy.  I am perfectly happy to listen to Ottava Rima's suggestions for improvement, and if there is consensus from other commenters here, I am more than willing to do what I can to implement those suggestions.  Personally, I feel that's all that needs saying about the matter.  --jbmurray (talk|contribs) 17:46, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Jb - What other people don't realize is that I am one voice. Consensus has already supported your project. Therefore, my objections are in the minority, which means that anyone taking offense to them does not understand how the process works. I have already put forth a conditional support, so the accusations against me appear to be unnecessary. Ottava Rima (talk) 17:56, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * It isn't a majority rules process. I checked to see if your concerns were legit. If they were, it wouldn't be an FA, even if you were only one voice. You seem to be attacking the people who are willing to give you some ground. Sandy and I were among the few who were willing to admit you might have something. I really don't see why you are so hostile and rude to Sandy, especially, when she really hasn't said anything against you here and seemed to agree with you more than most anyone. But, alas, whatever ground you might have gained seems to have been lost now. Wrad (talk) 18:06, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Attacking people? The person who is doing the attacking is yourself. You are being extremely uncivil. Ottava Rima (talk) 18:55, 15 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Support Disclaimer: Significant contributor, see list above. First off I'd like to congratulate everybody who worked on this and especially Lincolnchan98 for all the work he put into it. Now about all the discussion that has been going on around here, I'd say that everybodys opinion has been stated and noted by everybody else, theres no need to continue with it. Lets refocus on the article shall we? Now Outrigger raised a very good point above about the lack of information concerning the new novel. I had managed to completely miss this shortcoming despite reading the article a few times to say the least (this just goes to show how usefull it is to have uninvolved eyes doing a review). This is certanly important and needs to be adressed. That said, I'm still supporting because I think the article is quite comprehensive even with this fault and also, because I don't think the issue is going to be too hard to solve. Acer (talk) 22:43, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Support Comment - aside from the glossing over of his contributions to the development of La Nueva Novela mentioned by Outriggr, it seems comprehensive. However, there are problems with some of the language and agreement between sections. Some of these might be remedied by a simple rephrasing to make the meaning clear or some formatting, but some need a little more work. I'd recommend another run though the copy if possible. There's nothing major though and I'll be happy to support if these examples are cleared up:
 * In "Later life and political involvement" we have Vargas Llosa has identified himself with right-wing political ideologies ever since. while in "Later life and political involvement" we have certain conservative views held by the former party are at odds with his liberal beliefs.
 * Fixed Lincolnchan98 (talk) 06:50, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * He married Julia Urquidi, his uncle's sister-in-law - this is his aunt's sister, isn't it? Why add an extra level of relationship?
 * This should be clarified; but I expect the answer to Yomangani's question to be no: the text is compatible with (and so implies that) the uncle being already an uncle by marriage. The uncle's name would be the simplest way to fix this. Septentrionalis PMAnderson 03:49, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Fixed Lincolnchan98 (talk) 17:47, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * His involvement in the Investigatory Commission is split over two sections. It was reintroduced in the second section before I cut that, but it is still awkward.
 * Fixed I think Lincolnchan98 (talk) 08:15, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
 * What was his next novel after the Investigatory Commission work? Who Killed Palomino Molero or Death in the Andes? The use of subsequent for Death in the Andes is confusing here, as is the split over two sections with the two sections claiming that both the books were inspired by the work on the Investigatory Commission.
 * This is a good question. I added (and sourced) the information about Death in the Andes.  I have never read Who Killed Palomino Molero?, and wasn't aware of any Uchuraccay link.  Lincolnchan98, can you double check this source?  --jbmurray (talk|contribs) 17:37, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * This is what the Kristal book says: "His novel is by no means an attempt to reconstruct the Ucharaccay incidents. It can be read, as Roy Boland has shown, as a literary exorcism of his own experiences on the commission." Lincolnchan98 (talk) 17:52, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * led to immediate negative reactions and slandering from the Peruvian press - were the negative reactions from the press as well or just the slandering? Was it defamation rather than slander?
 * Fixed I think Lincolnchan98 (talk) 17:47, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Vargas Llosa continued to write significantly shorter pieces of work - continued? shorter than what? signifying what?
 * Fixed I think Lincolnchan98 (talk) 17:47, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Why is "The Green House" in quotation marks and the Cathedral not? Why is Investigatory Commission italicised? Why is the Popular Action party rendered in English while the other parties retain their Spanish names? Why is National University of San Marcos in English and Universidad Complutense de Madrid in Spanish? Why is Premio de la Crítica italicised when all the other prizes are not?
 * put cathedral in quotations. translated universidad to english. Lincolnchan98 (talk) 17:47, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Igartua states that after knocking García Márquez out, leaving him on the floor, Vargas Llosa said: "That’s for what you did to Patricia in Barcelona." - this isn't clear. Was he knocked down and left unconscious by the punch in the face? The quote has no context, so doesn't add anything.
 * Removed. It caused more problems that contributing to the article. Lincolnchan98 (talk) 20:31, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * which is being re-released in Spain and throughout Latin America - right now? A date would be handy here. Yomangani talk 23:40, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Thank you Yomangan for bringing these issues to attention. I have tried to fix some but confess that I am neither a language expert nor very familiar with MoS issues. Any help would be appreciated. Lincolnchan98 (talk) 07:51, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I'll get on to some more of these later today. (Apologies that I was somewhat AWOL yesterday.)  Lincolnchan98, it might help if you indicated here which of these issues you've been able to address.  --jbmurray (talk|contribs) 17:37, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I rejigged the Investigatory Commission sections so all the details come in the first section. Yomangani talk 08:59, 22 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments.
 * Is his surname Vargas Llosa or Llosa? Should only be referred to by his surname, I think.
 * Like most people from Hispanic countries, he has two surnames. He can correctly be referred to as either Vargas or Vargas Llosa.  In his case, it is much more common to refer to him as Vargas Llosa.  If there are any instances in which he's called simply Llosa, those are mistakes; but I have passed through the article on several occasions to eliminate them.  --jbmurray (talk|contribs) 10:29, 18 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "Vargas Llosa is considered..." - this would need a direct citation (at the end of the sentence)
 * Fixed Lincolnchan98 (talk) 17:43, 21 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "an important diplomatic post" - you don't really need to say "important"...it's assumed since he moved his family, and just adds a bit of clutter
 * Fixed. --jbmurray (talk|contribs) 10:39, 18 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "Vargas Llosa's father sent him at 14 to the Leoncio Prado Military Academy in Lima." - would probably work better (IMO) as "At the age of 14, his father sent him to..."
 * I've fixed this somewhat differently, to avoid even the momentary impression that it was the father (rather than MVLL) who was fourteen. --jbmurray (talk|contribs) 10:32, 18 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "however, after he arrived in Paris he learned that it would not materialize." - perhaps change to "upon arriving in Paris he learned that..."
 * Done. --jbmurray (talk|contribs) 10:34, 18 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Any idea why Mario and Julia divorced?
 * Neither Mario or Julia has really said anything about the reason for their divorce; everything else is speculation/hearsay. Lincolnchan98 (talk) 17:52, 21 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "In fact, Latin American literary critic Gerald Martin suggests that The Green House is "one of the greatest novels to have emerged from Latin America"." - rmv "in fact"
 * Changed to "indeed." I think it helps flow between the two sentences to have something there.  --jbmurray (talk|contribs) 10:36, 18 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "Vargas Llosa focused primarily on his occupation as a writer; nevertheless, he still took time to pursue other endeavors" - the nevertheless makes it sound a bit awkward...suggest you replace the semi colon with a comma and replace what's after that with "while still taking the time to pursue other endeavors"
 * Changed to "Vargas Llosa focused on his writing, while still taking time to pursue other endeavors" --jbmurray (talk|contribs) 10:38, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Got halfway through—will try to do the other half tomorrow. dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 10:15, 18 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Pending, the criollo-mestizo issue still needs to be sorted, and there's still this question mark to be resolved:
 * ^ "Esto es por lo que le hiciste a Patricia en Barcelona." Igartua 1998, p. ?? See also Coca, César (August 27, 2006), "30 años después de la ruptura con García Márquez, Vargas Llosa desvela las claves literarias y personales", Hoy, . Retrieved on April 16, 2008 (Spanish)

Sandy Georgia (Talk) 20:45, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I took care of the lineage issue. As for the Iguartua quote, I have no idea who added that. I've done a search at both the University and public library and neither of them carry that book. Lincolnchan98 (talk) 18:37, 19 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Linconchan98, if you can spend some time digging back in to the history of the article, you can find who added it, and then perhaps you and Jbmurray can sort it out. You have an additional source for that text (the newspaper), so the article is cited, but the text currently refers to Igartua, so if you can't locate that page number, the text needs to be rewritten to reflect the newspaper source.  Since Jbmurray is traveling, the thing you could do to advance this in his absence is go back in history and find who added the Igartua source.  Also, the cite templates place quotes after the citation information, so you might want to follow that convention.  Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 17:56, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I believe the edit in question is this one, by Tommaso88. Mike Christie (talk) 19:02, 20 April 2008 (UTC)

Here I am again, for the second half (also noting a few of my comments up above haven't seen a response, I think).
 * "towards themes like messianism" - I'd prefer using "such as" or "including" instead of "like", which reminds me of teenager-speak. (But I'm a teenager...!!!)
 * Ref 111 - IMDB (internet movie database) is generally not considered a reliable source (is there an exception here? I might be behind...that wouldn't surprise me!)
 * The reliability of a source depends on what text is being sourced: IMDb is being used appropriately here. Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 17:56, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * You're right, sorry about that... dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 11:29, 21 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "In 1986, Vargas Llosa" - overusing his name a lot, a bit of repetition. Perhaps "In 1986, he" every now and then, for variety?
 * Fixed this one - the rest look necessary for pronouns on a quick skim. Awadewit (talk) 18:46, 20 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "In 2006, Vargas Llosa's wrote" - rmv the 's, I think
 * Fixed. Awadewit (talk) 18:46, 20 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "Death in the Andes (Lituma en los Andes) originally published in 1993 in Barcelona" - need a comma after the brackets
 * Added. Awadewit (talk) 18:50, 20 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "in his native Peru." - by this stage of the article, you'd hope the reader is aware he's from Peru! Probably best to remove the "his native".
 * Removed. Awadewit (talk) 18:50, 20 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "A good example of this is" - "a good example" is a bit anti-NPOV...just "an example of this is" will do fine
 * Changed to "For example..." Awadewit (talk) 18:50, 20 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "respected the basic facts, [. . .] I have not exaggerated" - maybe it's just me, but what I've seen generally is to just have "..." rather than "[. . .]", so that it doesn't stand out as much...this one is a bit hard to read, for me anyway. Thoughts?
 * I notice the format I prefer is used in the Legacy section. In any case, consistency is good.
 * "whereas the latter is ridiculously comic" - calling something ridiculous (as opposed to quoting a critic on that) is not the best idea (for NPOV reasons). Probably a good idea to put someone's name to it (ideally, whoever you're sourcing here), rather than have it look like "Wikipedia called that guy's work ridiculous..." (see, it's all about context!)
 * Fixed Lincolnchan98 (talk) 06:36, 21 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "Moreover, Vargas Llosa sometimes uses this" - the moreover isn't necessary
 * Removed. Awadewit (talk) 18:57, 20 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "The Time of the Hero,[87] However, he does not use" - should However have a lowercase h, since that's a comma?
 * Fixed punctuation. Awadewit (talk) 18:57, 20 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Some infoboxes have a parameter for the guy's signature (I think the politician one does, for instance). Does this one?
 * Infoboxes in general are not an WP:WIAFA requirement. Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 17:56, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * We added the signature later in the article since we are short on images. The infobox was being greedy. :) Awadewit (talk) 18:04, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * OK, that's fine. dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 11:29, 21 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Could the list of works be put into columns? If you don't know how to, I'll try and find the templates for it (if you want me to).
 * Done. Awadewit (talk) 18:57, 20 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Is there a reason why some internet sources are in the references section as opposed to being cited inline? (For instance, the Katherine Harrison one) I thought that the refs. section was for books, where an inline citation would include a page reference--thus, an internet source (no page reference) could just be cited inline. Since some internet sources are cited inline, it looks odd.
 * I don't see any problem here. Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 17:56, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * It is important to be consistent with the formatting of references, so that the reader gets comfortable with the article style. I've had a lot to do with the way these references were formatted, partly because Jbmurray was very positive about the style I suggested. My rule of thumb is the following: if there is an identifiable author, put the link in the references; otherwise, leave it as a footnote only. I've fixed two inconsistencies as a result of this comment, so thanks for that, DHMO! Geometry guy 18:31, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Style choice: I wouldn't have done the Notes that way, because I find that method harder on the reader. I leave online sources in the Notes (for immediate clickability/verifiability, avoiding two clicks), while add book sources to the refs (since the reader can't click anywhere to verify, and the Note is only to provide the page no.), but certainly consistency within the article should be foremost.  (Mostly, I didn't want Lincoln scratching his head over how to fix these things in jbmurray's absence, and using the citation method, instead of cite templates, added a whole 'nother layer of complication for new and learning editors. At any rate, it's fine now, and I just didn't want Lincoln to have to sort that out alone, so thanks for doing that :-)  Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 18:44, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Ya thanks guys! I don't even know what you're talking about but I'm glad you're thinking about me :) Lincolnchan98 (talk) 06:24, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * The way it is now looks OK...Sandy, what you suggested was (I think) what I was asking for. But I'm not always clear. :) dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 11:29, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * No problem. The distinction between print and online sources is becoming increasingly blurred (e.g., electronic journals, publishers allowing authors to make their books available online, online abstracts). There are many other rules of thumb one could devise to decide what goes in the references section (is there an online version? is there a print version? is there a page number in the reference?) but I find the existence of an identifiable author a more scholarly distinction, and I think it would be confusing to put only sources without an online version in the references. Geometry guy 12:34, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm seeing a few extra line breaks around the navbox, though that could be a template issue...generally, it's space between categories, interwikis, and other stuff that just doesn't look nice. :(
 * I don't know what you mean - could you fix it? Awadewit (talk) 18:57, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Seems to have fixed itself...don't mind me. dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 11:29, 21 April 2008 (UTC)

Overall though, the article is quite nice, and I look forward to being able to support it. Well done, MMM. dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 07:35, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Support. dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 11:29, 21 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Comments
 * "Vargas Llosa contributed to the creation of The New Novel (La Nueva Novela)..." Is this some sort of sub-genre? If so, could a link be provided? Or at least a short explanation. Also, are sub-genres italicized?
 * After searching a little deeper I found that The New Novel is a literary criticism written by Carlos Fuentes about various Latin-American writers. I've clarified that in the article. Lincolnchan98 (talk) 08:09, 22 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "...he learned that it would not materialize" Any particular reason why? "...would not materialize" seems somewhat humorously generic.
 * Clearer I think Lincolnchan98 (talk) 08:09, 22 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "...built around the stories of Santiago Zavala..." For some reason, on my first reading of this, I assumed Santiago Zavala was some legendary Peruvian figure. I think this is a result of the way it's phrased ("built around the stories of"), but maybe it's just me.
 * Fixed. Lincolnchan98 (talk) 08:09, 22 April 2008 (UTC)


 * When discussing general critical reception/public success of his works, does this mean in Peru, Latin America, or worldwide? Sometimes I don't get a good sense of the context of the reception from the text. Also, any info on sales?
 * Unfortunately we haven't been able to find any information on sales. Any help here?


 * "recently agreed to allow part of his book to be used as the introduction to a new edition" This will become dated. Just state specific dates "...agreed in _YEAR_ to...the introduction to a _YEAR_ edition..."
 * Fixed Lincolnchan98 (talk) 08:09, 22 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "This shorter, humorous novel..." Perhaps "short"? Or is this an implied comparison to Conversation in the Cathedral?
 * Fixed Lincolnchan98 (talk) 08:09, 22 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "From 1974 to 1987, Vargas Llosa focused on his writing, while still taking time to pursue other endeavors" "From 1974...focused on his writing..." -> how is this different from before 1974? And why such specific dates?
 * During this time he focused mainly on his writing. Previously he was also occupied with other jobs. I think this is clear in the article. Lincolnchan98 (talk) 08:09, 22 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "Vargas Llosa was asked by the Peruvian President..." Date? Date of the massacre would be nice too, as well as a link.
 * "...immediate negative reactions and slandering from the Peruvian press." The next sentence does not explain why this is so. Did they accuse the Investigatory Commission of somehow covering up or being complicit in the massacre/conspiracy?
 * Ah, I see that the Investigatory Commission and his role is more fully fleshed out in "Later life and political involvement". These details should be given earlier, when the incident is first mentioned.
 * The reason I separated it was because I felt that the first part explains the event with regards to his writing career and the second part explains the result with regard to his political career. I've made some changes so the division is more clear. Lincolnchan98 (talk) 08:09, 22 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "Above all, as Latin American literature scholar Misha Kokotovic summarizes..." This seems to be a rather specific, nuanced argument rather than a summary of all of the complaints lodged against Vargas Llosa. Are you sure this is the case? Also, are you sure that this argument merits an "above all"? Was this criticism lodged more frequently than, say, the accusations of participation in a gov. conspiracy?
 * Fixed I think Lincolnchan98 (talk) 08:09, 22 April 2008 (UTC)


 * "...later die at the hands of Sendero" Further explication would be good here for those not knowledgeable in these matters.
 * Fixed Lincolnchan98 (talk) 08:09, 22 April 2008 (UTC)

Budding Journalist 09:10, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Is anyone planning to address these comments ?? Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 20:05, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I'll take a crack at them now! Lincolnchan98 (talk) 20:24, 21 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Support. I've been involved in editing and encouraging the development of this article (47 edits so far), but mostly at the fringes, fixing minor issues concerning references, and copyediting &mdash; so I'm not strongly attached to the article, claim absolutely no credit, and feel reasonably objective. I reread some of it today and have noticed how much sharper the prose is now than it was when I last looked closely at it, so I take my hat off to the editors such as Lincolnchan, Tommaso and Jbmurray, who've worked tirelessly on this. I've mostly been involved with formatting the notes and references: I think the notes would look better if they all ended with full stops/periods (what's the Canadian? :-) ), but if others agree with me, then that is something I am willing to fix when I'm in one of those "do a bunch of mundane edits to make things look nice" moods. There's also a page number missing in reference 32, but I bet someone can fix that in a blink of an eye, so it doesn't stop me recommending that this article be featured. Great work and a great biography! Geometry guy 18:46, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * The missing page number is non-trivial because the text quoted specifically mentions the book author (see my note above); hopefully the page no will be located, or the text can be rewritten to reflect the alternate sources (the newspapers). Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 18:51, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Hi friends, thanks for bringing this to our attention. The wheels are in motion to track this source down. Hopefully we'll be able to get the page number within the next day or so. Lincolnchan98 (talk) 06:18, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * This has now been fixed. --jbmurray (talk|contribs) 18:43, 22 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Comment The use of commas isn't consistent. For example, "novels such as The Time of the Hero, The Green House, and the monumental Conversation in the Cathedral" but "is a Peruvian writer, politician, journalist and essayist". Randomblue (talk) 18:01, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I think I've caught all these. (Favouring the Oxford comma, as it happens.)  --jbmurray (talk|contribs) 18:43, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
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