Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Mxmtoon/archive1

Mxmtoon

 * Nominator(s):  Rebestalic  [leave a message....]  03:58, 8 January 2023 (UTC)

This article is about a young pop musician who, though in still being light of age and thus not having accrued that many achievements in life compared to older artists, has nevertheless done enough--and amassed a dedicated-enough fanbase--to deserve an FA! If I wrote it that well... Rebestalic [leave a message....]  03:58, 8 January 2023 (UTC)

I'm sorry to have to do this, but at the moment I'm going to oppose on numerous grounds and suggest you withdraw this.A very quick readthrough shows the following examples—although this is by no means a comprehensive list: I suggest you withdraw this nomination (there is no shame in that for a first attempt), have a look at some similar FAs to see the level of information needed and do some additional work on it. I'd also suggest going through PR to get further input to the article. – SchroCat (talk) 11:03, 8 January 2023 (UTC)
 * Lead is too short
 * Too many stubby one-line paragraphs
 * Formatting error of the quote ("— mxmtoon, [19]"), as well as the quote just appearing out of context
 * Some formatting errors ("Prom Dress," is an example that it repeated)
 * Some of the grammar is a bit lumpy ("followed by EP Dawn in April; accompanying EP Dusk was released") is an example
 * No examination of musical style
 * Footnote c is uncited
 * Weak sources (Amazon shouldn't be in there, for example).

Thank you!! How do I withdraw this, do I take the text out? Rebestalic [leave a message....]  19:27, 8 January 2023 (UTC)
 * Hi, I'll take care of that as one of the FAC coordinators. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 19:35, 8 January 2023 (UTC)

I thought that the article was fine for GA, but I didn't think it would be nominated for FA so fast after that. I would take the advice from. It will take quite a bit more work, but the result feels good. SL93 (talk) 17:27, 8 January 2023 (UTC)

Thank you too!! Rebestalic [leave a message....]  19:27, 8 January 2023 (UTC)

Ian Rose (talk) 19:36, 8 January 2023 (UTC)