Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Nantes/archive2


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Sarastro1 via FACBot (talk) 21:21, 3 April 2017.

Nantes

 * Nominator(s): Oie blanche (talk) 11:31, 2 April 2017 (UTC)

Hello, this is the second time I nominate the article. It is about a city in France. I believe flaws highlighted during the last proposal have been adressed. Oie blanche (talk) 11:31, 2 April 2017 (UTC)

Oppose
 * Starting in a random section, Economy:
 * "The city was the largest harbour": A city isn't a harbour. It's not uncommon to say for instance "Nantes was the largest harbour", because that's short for "Nantes harbour was the largest harbour".
 * "Nantes and its area is": Plural, so "are" (and "area" is ambiguous here)
 * "the city has developed itself": wrong word
 * "After the moving of much of the port activities in Saint-Nazaire": I hardly know where to start.
 * "the city invented itself a new image": wrong word
 * "a large cultural offer": wrong word
 * "to give itself": wrong word
 * And so on. The article isn't B-class yet; it need rewriting by someone familiar with Standard English. - Dank (push to talk) 21:33, 2 April 2017 (UTC)

Please add translated titles for citations in French, as WP:HOWCITE recommends. --122.108.141.214 (talk) 23:47, 2 April 2017 (UTC)


 * Oppose. I'm a much less careful editor than and even I can see glaring grammatical errors like "the Antiquity" in the lead. Needs a good copyedit, and it's not fair to expect it to happen here Jimfbleak -  talk to me?  08:52, 3 April 2017 (UTC)

Closing comment: I think this needs to be worked on, and reviewed, away from FAC before it is brought back. I would strongly advise getting some outside review and even a co-nominator before renominating. Sarastro1 (talk) 21:21, 3 April 2017 (UTC)

Sarastro1 (talk) 21:21, 3 April 2017 (UTC)
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