Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Nimona/archive1

Nimona

 * Nominator(s): HenryCrun15 (talk) 06:58, 28 March 2022 (UTC)

This article is about the webcomic and graphic novel, Nimona. Written by ND Stevenson, it is a fantasy / science fiction story. The article passed GA status recently, and since then, a full plot summary has been added. The work is important as an example of webcomics receiving publishing deals, a key work by Stevenson, and an example of queer literature. HenryCrun15 (talk) 06:58, 28 March 2022 (UTC)

Image review
 * File:Nimona_cover.jpg: source link is dead
 * Is there a photo of the author that could be added? Nikkimaria (talk) 12:55, 28 March 2022 (UTC)


 * Thanks for these comments. To address them:
 * I have added an archive link (through web.archive.org) to the source.
 * I have added a photo of the author.
 * HenryCrun15 (talk) 07:49, 29 March 2022 (UTC)

Comments from PresN

I approached who is on the list of Featured Article mentors. They had some excellent general comments about the process, and also some comments on this article which I've copied below for reference. In response I have expanded the header and I'll address the other points soon. HenryCrun15 (talk) 07:52, 29 March 2022 (UTC)
 * The lead seems short; it doesn't for example seem to cover the Synopsis section or and reception beyond awards.
 * Conception and Publication are both pretty short; if there's any other information you can find that would be good.
 * Both Reviews and Academic analysis have the same issue: each paragraph is a different review. For Reviews, since they didn't fill paragraphs, it reads like it's divided where it was because the paragraph was too long otherwise. There's no connection between the reviews, no "story" about what the reception to the comic was, just a sequential listing of reactions. Consider restructuring the sections so that the commonalities between reviews/analysis is highlighted, e.g. "X and Y both mentioned that blah blah".
 * Once everything is sorted, give the whole article a copyedit- every article needs one. Try reading each paragraph in reverse order for grammar and extraneous words/turns of phrase, so that you don't get caught up in what it says and can instead focus on how it's being said.
 * The idea was to fix all of the issues before you nominate. The purpose of FAC is to review articles that the nominator believes are ready to go, not to serve as a staging ground while the nominator edits an unfinished work. If you are still editing the article in response to feedback, then this FAC is premature. I recommend retracting it for now and starting over once it's ready. -- Pres N  14:12, 30 March 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you and my apologies for my misunderstanding. How do I retract the nomination? HenryCrun15 (talk) 00:00, 1 April 2022 (UTC)