Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Passion (Utada Hikaru song)/archive1


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 11:30, 28 March 2017.

Passion (Utada Hikaru song)

 * Nominator(s): CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk &middot;&#32;contribs} 08:27, 22 February 2017 (UTC)

This article is about the Japanese theme song "Passion" (English version titled "Sanctuary") by Japanese singer Utada Hikaru. A long-time fan of hers, I value these two songs amongst my favourite recordings of all time. I decided to re-furbish the article to get to a Featured Article standard. I have put it through one good article and one good article reassessment nomination, and both have come out good. I have severely improved the article since, noting a lot of errors regarding reference templates, spelling, grammar and punctuation and other small touch-ups. As mentioned, I have severly improved this article and hopefully will get the chance to see it achieve a Featured Article star! All constructive criticism is welcome, and PLEASE ping me if you need any direct conversations/comments. Much appreciated, CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk &middot;&#32;contribs} 08:27, 22 February 2017 (UTC)

Driveby comment
The "Credits and personnel" has some J-names in FAMILY–GIVEN order and others in GIVEN–FAMILY. MOS:JAPAN calls for GIVEN–FAMILY for those born since 1868, except in special cases (Utada Hikaru being one, for some reason). Are all these names ordered this way deliberately? Curly "JFC" Turkey 🍁 ¡gobble! 04:18, 24 February 2017 (UTC)
 * My apologies for this; the names were given (and ordered by appearance) by the liner notes from the compact disc single; I've have changed it now, and thank you for your response! The Utada Hikaru name reference is detailed throughout its respective Wikipedia talk page. CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk &middot;&#32;contribs} 11:24, 24 February 2017 (UTC)


 * Comments from Aoba47
 * Reference 6 is dead and needs to either be archived or replaced with another source.
 * Please include an ALT description for the English cover and the music video screenshot.
 * I also agree with Carbrera comments. A product description from Amazon.com should not be used as it is purely promotional and not appropriate for Wikipedia.
 * Great work with the article! These are the only two notes that I can find while reading through the article. Once they are addressed, I will support this nomination. Good luck with getting this promoted in the future. Aoba47 (talk) 21:44, 26 February 2017 (UTC)
 * ✅ all adjustments.


 * Support, great work with this. Aoba47 (talk) 01:30, 12 March 2017 (UTC)


 * Comments from Carbrera
 * I will look by this little by little before voicing my opinion. Here are my comments regarding some of the referenced statements/reviews:
 * Reference #15 – Eli Kleman is not a staff member from Sputnikmusic. He's just a member (and it probably shouldn't be used here).
 * Reference #35 is too unreliable for a featured article
 * Reference #81 – A product description from Amazon.com should probably not be used to describe the song's cultural impact
 * More to come, Carbrera (talk) 01:23, 27 February 2017 (UTC).
 * ✅ all first-handed adjustments.

Closing comment -- I'm afraid this review seems to have stalled without attracting sufficient commentary for determining consensus to promote, so I'll be archiving it shortly. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 11:29, 28 March 2017 (UTC)

Ian Rose (talk) 11:30, 28 March 2017 (UTC)
 * The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. No further edits should be made to this page.