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 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by SandyGeorgia 13:21, 24 September 2010.

Razer (robot)

 * Nominator(s): The C of E. God Save The Queen! (talk) 09:24, 24 September 2010 (UTC)

(My 1st FAC nomination) I am nominating this article because it has recently been granted GA status and I think it's maybe good enough to go to the next level. I think it is also a well written and informative article and would be good to be read by all. The C of E. God Save The Queen! (talk) 09:35, 24 September 2010 (UTC)


 * Support: As nom. (I will point out I have been involved in helping the page reach GA status). The C of E. God Save The Queen! (talk) 09:27, 24 September 2010 (UTC)
 * Nominator support is implied. Was  consulted (see FAC instructions)?  Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 11:19, 24 September 2010 (UTC)


 * Comment—The link to cylinder leads to a dab page. No dead external links. Please be consistent in using unspaced em dashes or spaced en dashes in running text; see WP:DASH. Ucucha 11:43, 24 September 2010 (UTC)
 * Sorted that cylinder link. The C of E. God Save The Queen! (talk) 11:54, 24 September 2010 (UTC)

Oppose - Welcome to FAC! I don't mean to discourage you, but unfortunately I feel this article is not ready for FA status. Here are some of my concerns:
 * Too many one-paragraph subsections, which break up the flow of text
 * "up to nine tonnes of pressure per square inch" (and other measurements) - provide conversions to other measurement systems
 * Spell out numbers under 10
 * "2.5 millimetre thickness armour panels versus 1 millimetre before" - grammar
 * "healthy spell of reliability" - what does this mean? Source?
 * "saw this evolution of Razer win" - do you mean this iteration?
 * What's a cush drive?
 * Best Design Award or award?
 * When did Blood join the team, and why?
 * Is the side tournament called Pinball or Pinball Warrior?
 * "end up in the midst of Matilda" - what does this mean? Was it on Matilda? Near Matilda? Does Matilda have a large gap in its middle?
 * "10 milimetre" - spelling and grammar
 * Check out WP:HYPHEN in addition to WP:DASH
 * "to reach a first series semi-final" - what does this mean?
 * "Against Wild Thing, Razer damaged an exposed drive wheel" - its own or its opponent's?
 * "In the last eight" - the last eight what?
 * Be sure to maintain an encyclopedic tone at all times
 * What's a pull-back topy?
 * Source for the stats in the infobox not mentioned in article text?
 * Combine identical refs - see WP:NAMEDREFS
 * Publisher for ref 12?
 * Ref 14: what is "w/e"?
 * Need consistent formatting for references
 * If you're going to include publisher location, make it more specific than "USA"
 * Battlebots is mentioned only in the lead
 * —Preceding unsigned comment added by Nikkimaria (talk • contribs)
 * Well, I've dealt with a couple of those issues, but I have noticed that some of the issues you brought up have been covered with links in them in an earlier part in the page. The C of E. God Save The Queen! (talk) 13:18, 24 September 2010 (UTC)

Significant contributor was not consulted in advance of this nom, problems highlighted, closing this nomination per FAC instructions. Sandy Georgia (Talk) 13:20, 24 September 2010 (UTC)
 * Ah, I thought I'd jumped the gun a bit adding it so soon. So Shall I get the creators say so then nominate it again? The C of E. God Save The Queen! (talk) 13:22, 24 September 2010 (UTC)
 * For a subsequent nom, you should 1) get clearance from Crispy that the article is ready; 2) get clearance from Nikkimaria that previous issues were addressed; and 3) wait at least two weeks (see FAC instructions). Sandy Georgia  (Talk) 13:26, 24 September 2010 (UTC)
 * Hi all, I just thought I'd drop everyone here a quick line as the major contributor. I'll admit I was quite surprised to find that the article made the jump from newly listed GA to FAC in the time it took me to do my shopping! ;-) I agree that the article isn't ready, but am very grateful for your comments which can only help The C of E, myself and other more occasional editors to improve this article. Thanks all for your time, and my best wishes. Countdown Crispy 15:15, 24 September 2010 (UTC)


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