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 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by Laser brain 04:50, 14 March 2011.

Refugee controversy in Sjöbo

 * Nominator(s): Alphasinus (talk) 21:48, 2 March 2011 (UTC)

I'm nominating this for featured status because i think it passes the criteria. I've done some changes that made it qualify for GA status but the main contributer to the article is User:Theleftorium. Alphasinus (talk) 21:48, 2 March 2011 (UTC)

Comments - Leaning oppose. Article doesn't seem well-developed to me. More background on the ethos of Swedish refugee policy would help build the story. Sources are thin, prose needs polishing. Here's some examples/recommendations: Sasata (talk) 00:44, 3 March 2011 (UTC)
 * no mention of the 1989 "Aliens Act"?
 * no mention of the 1989 film about the incident, Sa Gar Ett Ar; Teden I Sjobo?
 * Sources not used:
 * Rysted, G. (1992). "Encounter with strangers: refugees and cultural confrontation in Sweden"
 * Pred DS. (1992). "Even in Sweden: racisms, racialized spaces, and the popular geographical imagination"
 * Graham M. (2002). "Emotional Bureaucracies: Emotions, Civil Servants, and Immigrants in the Swedish Welfare State" Ethos 30(3):199-226.


 * "...when the Moderate Party took over the power in the Sjöbo Municipal assembly." underlined part sounds odd
 * various minor typographical errors: missing a space between sentence; cite before punctuation; is the quote in the "Debate and media attention" section supposed to be ended by a fullstop or an ellipsis?
 * one sentence paragraphs need to be expanded or integrated elsewhere
 * "The county had accepted a large amount of refugees" amount -> number
 * percentages are given with both the symbol and by writing out "percentage"
 * translations of the Swedish reference titles would be nice
 * why is the "detailed article" ("The day that Sjöbo split") externally linked not used as a source?

Sources Images
 * Earwig's tool found no copyvio, manual spotchecks not done due to lack of source availability and my lack of Swedish skills
 * Make sure all non-English sources are identified as such
 * I echo Sasata's question about why the external-links article was not used as a source
 * It would be helpful to provide times for when information being cited to radio or video sources occurs - similar to page numbers for book sources, this allows the reader to more easily verify the information
 * YouTube video should have an access date
 * "Then-Prime Minister Ingvar Carlsson was critical of the result" - the result of what? I realize this is explained in the article text, but would be good to state here
 * "A part of Sjöbo's town square, where both pro- and con- demonstrations were held" - source? Not mentioned in article text
 * File:Sjöbo_Municipality_in_Scania_County.png - what evidence do you have that the outlines are PD? The source you linked has a copyright notice at the bottom. Also, would be good to provide a more specific source link. Nikkimaria (talk) 04:08, 3 March 2011 (UTC)

Comments –
 * Why is a bare year linked in the first sentence? Of all the things to link in the beginning, where reader attention is greatest, this is about the least useful thing I can think of.
 * I see "Municipal commissioner" and "Municipal Commissioner" in the lead. Which is it?
 * Background and motion: Space needed after first sentence.
 * Debate and media attention: Third paragraph of the section has a double period at the end.
 * Aftermath: I don't understand why the end says "As of today" when the source is from 2006. That's not today. How about saying "the Sjobo Party remains active" or similar?  Giants2008  ( 27 and counting ) 02:34, 7 March 2011 (UTC)


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