Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Rick Rypien/archive1


 * The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 10:49, 12 June 2018.

Rick Rypien

 * Nominator(s): Kaiser matias (talk) 21:40, 15 May 2018 (UTC)

After a few different topics I'm back with an ice hockey player who died during their career. Rick Rypien had depression and ultimately killed himself back in 2011, aged 27. The article was largely written by a now-inactive user, though I have put in the recent work to clean it up and go through a successful GA nomination. All comments and concerns will be addressed as soon as possible. Kaiser matias (talk) 21:40, 15 May 2018 (UTC)

Source review - spotchecks not done
 * Be consistent in when you include location of publication
 * FN7 has a template error
 * FN6: author is incorrect
 * FN9: link not working
 * FN27-28: no need to list TSN as both author and publisher. Nikkimaria (talk) 16:23, 19 May 2018 (UTC)
 * All addressed. Kaiser matias (talk) 01:30, 23 May 2018 (UTC)

Oppose on criterion 1c. This strikes me as a good start to covering the subject, but I find it to be very light and not comprehensive. The "playing style" section is very short compared with the Death section, leading me to believe the article was largely written from the news articles and hasty biographies put together by journalists when he died. Some of the death section should possibly be separated into a Legacy section to include information about any aftermath of his suicide like research efforts, mental health programs with the team, etc. I did a brief library search and turned up several sources that haven't been used in this article, which tells me that it could be expanded. -- Laser brain  (talk)  18:20, 6 June 2018 (UTC)

Coord note -- given this has been open almost a month with no prospect of consensus to promote on the horizon I think it's best we archive this and work on the points raised by Laser brain away from the pressure of the FAC process. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 10:48, 12 June 2018 (UTC)

Ian Rose (talk) 10:49, 12 June 2018 (UTC)
 * The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. No further edits should be made to this page.