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Robert Nimmo

 * Nominator(s): Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:38, 28 October 2022 (UTC)

Robert Nimmo served in WWI as a light horse officer, in WWII commanding several brigades, with the British Commonwealth Occupation Force in Japan commanding the Australian infantry brigade, and then Northern Command back in Australia as a major general. He had virtually reached retirement age when he was picked as the chief military observer with the United Nations Military Observer Group in India and Pakistan, a position he held from 1950 until his death in 1966. He was described as "by far the most successful United Nations observer ever", was the first Australian to command a multinational peacekeeping force, and his command of UNMOGIP remains the longest ever command of a UN mission. This year marks the 75th anniversary of Australia's first involvement in peacekeeping operations, and as a peacekeeper myself I thought I'd bring this one up to scratch as a way of commemorating that milestone. It just underwent a GAN by Hawkeye7, and just passed Milhist A-Class review. Have at it! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:38, 28 October 2022 (UTC)

Image review
 * Suggest adding alt text
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:05, 29 October 2022 (UTC)


 * File:Nimmo_(AWM_097387).jpg: see Wp:WATERMARK
 * New version uploaded. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:05, 29 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Has the AWM site changed recently? Source links there all seem to be broken. Nikkimaria (talk) 03:51, 29 October 2022 (UTC)
 * I didn't have that problem with Nimmo, but I don't know what is going on there with the others. Thanks for taking a look. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:05, 29 October 2022 (UTC)

Support by Nick-D
This article is in good shape. I have the following comments.
 * I'd suggest removing the quotes from the first para of the lead to slim it down a bit; maybe just note that he performed well during the war or similar
 * OK, done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:30, 29 October 2022 (UTC)


 * 'Nimmo' is used too frequently across the article (e.g. in successive sentences without anyone else being named, and twice in at least one sentence)
 * Replaced a few. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:30, 29 October 2022 (UTC)


 * "He attended a 10-day gas training course near Cairo in Egypt in early September then returned to his regiment" - is this needed? These types of short courses would have been routine and the reference is to his NAA file.
 * Sure, I had left it there to ensure he wasn't credited with being involved in any battle during that time, but there wasn't anything of significance. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:30, 29 October 2022 (UTC)


 * "Nimmo's wife Peggy was killed in a fall at The Gap" - the sources probably don't discuss this, but was this an accident or suicide? The Gap has always been one of the leading places in Sydney for suicides, tragically.
 * Yes, I know. There is nothing to confirm if it was a suicide, although it seems likely. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:30, 29 October 2022 (UTC)


 * "he was promoted to temporary brigadier, and posted to command the 4th Cavalry Brigade" - perhaps note that by this stage the 'cavalry' units were motorised?
 * Good point, done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:30, 29 October 2022 (UTC)


 * The para starting with 'On 10 February 1942' is a bit lengthy, especially as it covers a lot of ground - I'd suggest splitting it.
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:40, 29 October 2022 (UTC)


 * The date of his son's death could be provided: https://nominal-rolls.dva.gov.au/veteran?id=1058607&c=WW2 and https://www.awm.gov.au/collection/R1719326 It looks like he was serving with Bomber Command in Europe.
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:40, 29 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Do we know why he was picked to command the 34th Brigade? As the only active brigade in the post-war army and the only one that was intended to serve overseas for a lengthy period (in a role that required good military and diplomatic skills), this would have been a much sought-after posting. Nimmo was presumably considered one of the best brigade commanders in an Army that by now had lots that had led these units in combat.
 * I did wonder about that, but of course he was permanent army, so perhaps he was among the best of the permanent brigadiers? Nothing in sources I can find though. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:30, 29 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Similarly, why did he only serve in this role for a shortish period?
 * I suspect that as he had been a brigadier since January 1942 (temporary), he was due for promotion. He got them ready, dealt with the mutiny and got them there, deployed and set up, so I figure he had probably done a job of work, and BCOF was pretty pedestrian in terms of the day-to-day. Nothing in sources though. Such stuff might lie in the files of the Military Secretary. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:30, 29 October 2022 (UTC)


 * I'm a bit surprised that the official history of Australian peacekeeping hasn't been consulted, though as its authors wrote the ADB entry it might not add much. The official history has some pretty sharp analysis and criticism, and is available online via the Cambridge Core service which can be accessed through the Wikipedia Library service. Nick-D (talk) 05:47, 29 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Well, access was my main problem (no copies in the state or uni libraries here in SA), which you have solved. I will consult it, but I doubt there will be a lot, as you say. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:30, 29 October 2022 (UTC)
 * OK, I stand corrected. There was plenty, now added. All done now I reckon, . See what you think. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:01, 29 October 2022 (UTC)
 * That all looks great, and I'm pleased to support. Nick-D (talk) 09:43, 29 October 2022 (UTC)

Support from Gog the Mild
Recusing to review.


 * It may just be me and this is not a deal breaker, but the lead seems disproportionately long.
 * I'm not seeing it. I don't think there is much fat in there, but open to suggestions about trimming. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:40, 5 November 2022 (UTC)
 * On a brief skim, I don't see that either the article or the lead would suffer from losing:
 * "reaching the rank of major ... was promoted to lieutenant colonel and ... promoted to major general and ..."
 * I don't get the idea that you wouldn't include significant promotions in the lead to show his progress through the ranks. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:40, 18 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Your call. But to me in, eg, "he was promoted to lieutenant colonel and served as a senior staff officer with the headquarters of two cavalry divisions" the information of interest to both the uninitiated and aficionados is from "served" on; etc.
 * "His performance as chief military observer was such that"
 * Sure, deleted. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:40, 18 November 2022 (UTC)
 * "his funeral"
 * Trimmed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:40, 18 November 2022 (UTC)
 * I am sure there is more. Gog the Mild (talk) 14:07, 18 November 2022 (UTC)


 * "The Southport School". The MoS suggests that "The word the at the start of a name is uncapitalized, regardless of the institution's own usage".
 * OK, done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:40, 5 November 2022 (UTC)


 * A piddling point, but "and there was some friendly fire from a British destroyer which also caused some casualties"; "... then ... then ...". Perhaps delete the second, as I am not sure what it adds?
 * Sure, done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:40, 5 November 2022 (UTC)


 * The account of the fighting around the Echelon Trenches, fascinating and well written as it is, seems to get well into "going into unnecessary detail". Contrast the 324 words on this one day, with the account of the period 20.12.15 - 12.12.18; 505 words with no mention of Nimmo getting as close as long rifle shot of an Ottoman and with weeks of hard fighting covered by "Following participation in the successful Battle of Beersheba on 31 October and Third Battle of Gaza in early November, Nimmo's regiment was part of the force that pursued the Ottoman forces north, and helped capture Jerusalem."
 * I'm in the process of adding some more detail on the Palestine campaign to even this out, but have trimmed this account a bit. See what you think. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:00, 10 December 2022 (UTC)


 * "which slowed their return to the Australian line which occurred"; "... which ... which ..."
 * "deleted a which. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:15, 5 November 2022 (UTC)


 * "was appointed as regimental adjutant and appointed as a temporary captain". Delete the second use of "appointed"?
 * reworded, removing the second "appointed". Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:15, 5 November 2022 (UTC)


 * "because he no longer performing his". Has a "was" gone walkabout?
 * Yep, fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:15, 5 November 2022 (UTC)


 * "He was admitted to a hospital in Alexandria". Optional: delete "a".
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:45, 5 November 2022 (UTC)


 * "a most gallant and able leader". Is the "gallant" part based solely on his record at Gallipoli, as subsequently he seems to have filled mostly, or perhaps entirely, rear-echelon roles.
 * No, while he was probably most able to display gallantry as a troop commander at Gallipoli, he was also a squadron commander for nearly a year from July 1917. Light horse squadron commanders were definitely in the thick of it, akin to an infantry company commander. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:15, 5 November 2022 (UTC)
 * So, you know that, I know that, but how is a reader meant to deduce it?
 * I've added a few words to highlight that he led B Squadron through the named battles and the pursuit, but I'm not sure how else I am supposed to do that. I will look at the official history and see if there is anything I missed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:42, 18 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Gog the Mild (talk) 23:07, 18 November 2022 (UTC)
 * G'day, I think the detail and additions in the Sinai and Palestine campaign section now cover this adequately. Thoughts? Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:56, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
 * That looks fine. Gog the Mild (talk) 23:19, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * The paragraph starting "In late June 1918 Nimmo spent" seems unduly long. 🤔 start a new one at "His record with the 5th Light Horse Regiment was"?
 * Sure, done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:15, 5 November 2022 (UTC)


 * "He was also the inspector general of communications for the division." Absolutely optional, but I for one would be interested in a footnote explaining just what this entailed.
 * Added a sentence fragment, basically he was responsible for the rear echelon logistics of the division, which makes sense given he was AA&QMG. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:53, 18 November 2022 (UTC)


 * " his previous role as brigade major of the 3rd Cavalry Brigade, before reprising another previous role as Assistant Adjutant & Quartermaster General of the 2nd Cavalry Division". Why lower-case initials for "brigade major", but upper case for "Assistant Adjutant & Quartermaster General"; it seems inconsistent.
 * Hmmm. Yes, it is. My staff duties strikes again. I think that the WP MOS indicates positions should be lowercase unless they are directly followed by the name of the person fulfilling the role, so I'll lowercase them all, which I have now done, I think. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:53, 18 November 2022 (UTC)


 * "He was devastated, and on 28 April the Army posted him to Brisbane". It seems odd to have this in one sentence. Perhaps move the first three words to the previous sentence, after a semi colon?
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:12, 18 November 2022 (UTC)


 * "He administered command of". What does this mean?
 * Essentially to perform the role without being posted into it. Usually the second-in-command or senior staff officer acts as the commander in their absence, sometimes while they are on leave, and sometimes when the position is temporarily vacant. Also usually when the person administering command isn't of the correct rank to be appointed to command. In this case, GOC NT Force was a major-general posting, and Nimmo was a brigadier. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:12, 18 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Well, yes. But could we either summarise this for the reader or use a form of words which may be less precisely nuanced but will convey what Nimmo was actually doing?
 * I added "in the absence its appointed commander", do you think this is enough? Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:34, 18 November 2022 (UTC)
 * So long as you add an 'of', sure. ;-)
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:15, 18 November 2022 (UTC)


 * " he was posted as Deputy Assistant Quartermaster General in the headquarters of". Again, why the upper-case initials?
 * Fixed now. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:12, 18 November 2022 (UTC)


 * "general officer commanding Northern Command and District Commandant". Why upper-case initials for the last two words?
 * Also fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:12, 18 November 2022 (UTC)


 * "substantive". Maybe link to Military rank?
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:12, 18 November 2022 (UTC)


 * "The citation read". Any reason this is in the past tense?
 * No, done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:12, 18 November 2022 (UTC)

Actually, that's all I have. Gog the Mild (talk) 20:28, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Cheers Gog, all done except the trim of the Gallipoli bit, which I'm mulling over and will take a crack at this weekend. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:12, 18 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Hi, I've now had a stab at trimming the Gallipoli bit. See what you think? Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:00, 10 December 2022 (UTC)
 * Yep. That will do. See comment above in green. Gog the Mild (talk) 20:14, 10 December 2022 (UTC)
 * I think I've addressed the remaining point now. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:56, 23 December 2022 (UTC)

Support Comments from JennyOz
Hi PM, thanks for another fine bio. Sorry but my unfamiliarity with military terms means some of my comments and questions might reflect that ignorance. Some others are MoS related nitpicks and others simple suggestions...

Ibox
 * Tree list - Gallipoli and Sinai still have caps on Campaign
 * Thanks, fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:14, 2 December 2022 (UTC)


 * 4th Cavalry Brigade - goes to redirect but link in prose at WWII section is piped
 * Also fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:14, 2 December 2022 (UTC)

Lede
 * the Royal Military College, Duntroon in 1912 - geocomma after Duntroon
 * Fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:14, 2 December 2022 (UTC)


 * He was praised for his leadership as a light horse squadron commander and his skills - maybe add "for" between "and his"
 * Sure, done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:14, 2 December 2022 (UTC)


 * staff officer on First Australian Army headquarters - is "on" normal terminology or of?
 * Usually staff officers are described as being "on" a headquarters, at least in my experience. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:14, 2 December 2022 (UTC)


 * formed part of the British Commonwealth Occupation Force - intentionally not linked?
 * Linked at the top. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:14, 2 December 2022 (UTC)


 * he was promoted to major general and posted - pipe to Major general (Australia)
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:14, 2 December 2022 (UTC)


 * the 800-kilometre (500 mi)-long ceasefire line - there's an extra hyphen?
 * Argh! Fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:14, 2 December 2022 (UTC)


 * to honorary lieutenant general in 1954 - already linked above (but as Lieutenant general (Australia))
 * Removed link. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:14, 2 December 2022 (UTC)


 * He died in his sleep, of a heart attack, on - he died of a heart attack in his sleep?
 * Much better, thanks. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:14, 2 December 2022 (UTC)


 * remains the longest ever command - hyphen longest-ever?
 * Added. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:14, 2 December 2022 (UTC)

Early life and education
 * in far north Queensland, - pipe to Far North Queensland?
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:17, 10 December 2022 (UTC)


 * Nimmo attended the Southport School - I think "the" should be included in the link ie the Southport School? (while MOS:INSTITUTIONS doesn't explain whether to include the "the" in the link, MOS:THEBAND shows examples such as "Paul McCartney from the Beatles... (But for newspapers we follow the masthead so The Age is correct - gosh!))
 * Yes, I am also confused. I've done as you suggest, no doubt someone more precise about MOS will fix it if we are wrong. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:17, 10 December 2022 (UTC)


 * Southport School - presumably as a boarder, do refs mention?
 * refs don't say, but I agree it seems logical. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:17, 10 December 2022 (UTC)

World War I Gallipoli campaign
 * He was commissioned into the Australian Imperial Force (AIF) in the same rank - ambiguous ie which rank, not company sergeant major?
 * No, clarified. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:36, 21 December 2022 (UTC)


 * Nimmo himself was involved in - is himself needed? Nimmo was personally involved...?
 * deleted. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:53, 22 December 2022 (UTC)


 * ordered to conduct a feint attack towards - wlink feint attack
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:53, 22 December 2022 (UTC)


 * was noted in the Australian official history of the war. - the lowercase is intentional but ditto lack of italics?
 * yes, intentional. I'm not quoting the title, just a less formal common name for it. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:53, 22 December 2022 (UTC)


 * lost 24 killed, 79 wounded and one prisoner. - and one taken prisoner?
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:53, 22 December 2022 (UTC)

Sinai and Palestine campaign
 * there is no link to the campaign in this section?
 * added see also. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:46, 22 December 2022 (UTC)


 * Alt - a large group of light coloured - hyphen light-coloured
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:46, 22 December 2022 (UTC)


 * Alt - forms of dress and with and without headdress- some with headdress?
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:46, 22 December 2022 (UTC)


 * On 4 February Nimmo reported - new year, add 1916?
 * this has now been fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:46, 22 December 2022 (UTC)


 * was based at Dueidar - needs some idea of its location? add near Katia, Egypt, or use map or mention Sinai Peninsula?
 * added. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:46, 22 December 2022 (UTC)


 * followed by two weeks sick leave - apostrophe ie two weeks'
 * whoops. Fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:46, 22 December 2022 (UTC)


 * His record with the 5th Light Horse - new para so Nimmo's record
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:46, 22 December 2022 (UTC)

Interwar period
 * The couple had one son and one daughter - that is slightly ambiguous ie with last mention being Peggy's parents, maybe Nimmo and Peggy had...
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:36, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * based in Victoria and South Australia, also in Melbourne - ? also headquartered in Melbourne (or remove "based")
 * Fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:36, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * in Melbourne, from 1 January 1926. [11] - space before ref
 * Deleted. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:36, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * representing Australia in field hockey - link representing Australia to Australia men's national field hockey team
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:36, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * He was also an Australian and Victorian hockey team selector - he was also a selector for the Australian and Victorian hockey teams
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:36, 23 December 2022 (UTC)

World War II
 * posted to the newly-raised - no hyphen in -ly adverbs
 * whoops, fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * southeastern states. - not one word, mos says two words or hyphen
 * OK, done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * Nimmo flew to Torokina - pipe to Cape Torokina (ie Torokina Airfield)
 * Sure, better. Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)

Post-war service
 * On 7 October Nimmo returned - add year
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * his entry in the Australian Dictionary of Biography, - add italics
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * Morotai incident - is the Morotai Mutiny a separate incident?
 * Yes, one was RAAF before the end of the war, this was Army after (while waiting to be sent to Japan). Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * On 12 June, Nimmo was promoted to temporary major general - v On 1 October 1948 he was appointed as a substantive major general - 2 links same para but to diff targets
 * Fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)

United Nations service and death
 * kilometre (500 mi)-long ceasefire line - remove extra hyphen?
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * ceasefire line - link Karachi Agreement?
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * intervention of the Australian Prime Minister, Sir Robert Menzies - Menzies not yet knighted in 52 ie remove Sir?
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * the part time Citizen Military Forces - hyphen part-time?
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * as Australia commitments - Australia's or Autralian?
 * the former, fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * functions which he has been call on to perform" - called
 * Doh, good grief. Fixed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * In 1964, the UN Secretariat reported - move link up to first mention in previous para
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * solve the Kashmir problem - maybe link Kashmir dispute
 * Done, thanks. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * from troop=contributing countries - typo hyphen
 * someone fixed this already. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * Nimmo's actions and correspondence during the war indicates - indicate
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * which he fulfilled through "through maintaining - remove a "through"
 * Thanks, done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * "through maintaining an open, firm but tactful relationship with both the belligerent parties, and to show favour to neither" - this excerpt doesn't quite read sensibly. "maintaining" and "to show" have a tense conflict. Not sure what to suggest, maybe instead of "to show" use [showing]
 * brilliant solution, done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * remains the longest ever command - hyphen?
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * and Australian observers as pall bearers - fellow Australian observers?
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * After an Anglican funeral in Rawalpindi with Pakistani military honours and Australian observers as pall bearers, his body was flown to Karachi and then Brisbane.[53] His funeral was held - can we make the first of these "service" to avoid 2 x funeral?
 * Good idea, done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * the Mount Gravatt Cemetery in Brisbane - hmm, was surprised this cemetery doesn't have an article. Strangely it's not actually in Mount Gravatt but in MacGregor... so change to 'buried in the Anzac section of the Mount Gravatt Cemetery in MacGregor, Brisbane?
 * Good point, done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)


 * quote|General Nimmo's wisdom... - should be blockquote?
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)

Footnotes
 * Ref Anderson, Grant; Dawson, Daryl (2006) - authorlink Daryl Dawson
 * Done, thanks. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:07, 10 December 2022 (UTC)

Misc
 * some changes, if agreed, might need to also be made in lede
 * I came across this when looking for something, no idea if anything worthwhile.
 * Some interesting snippets, but I don't think Magro meets RS, it is a thesis for a certificate, not a masters or PhD. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)

Thanks again and sorry again for such a long list. JennyOz (talk) 11:02, 9 November 2022 (UTC)
 * No worries, and as always, thanks so much for the time and effort you put into your reviews of my nominations. They always lead to significant improvements. Sorry it took so long to get to them all. Have a great Xmas, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks PM. I've run through again (made a tiny tweak) and am very happy to s'port. Hope your Xmas and NY are great too. JennyOz (talk) 07:00, 23 December 2022 (UTC)

- just a friendly reminder that there's several outstanding items on this one yet. Hog Farm Talk 23:45, 19 December 2022 (UTC)
 * Yes, away from home for a couple more days, will then tidy all this up and response to all comments. Thanks, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:09, 20 December 2022 (UTC)
 * Just tidying up a few things post-addressing Jenny's comments, will ping when I'm happy. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:16, 23 December 2022 (UTC)

Support from Hawkeye7
I reviewed this article at GA and believe that it is of the required standard.

Source review

 * All sources are high quality
 * Day, Adam: Suggest removing the ref card
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:04, 10 December 2022 (UTC)


 * ACT Memorial: Add access-date
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:04, 10 December 2022 (UTC)


 * NAA: B2458, 11 That's the series and control number. The title is "Nimmo, Robert Harold"
 * Done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:04, 10 December 2022 (UTC)

Hawkeye7  (discuss)  02:46, 18 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Spot checks: 3a, 15, 23, 27, 49, 53a - all okay.
 * Thanks, all done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:05, 10 December 2022 (UTC)


 * Hi, any chance of some responses? Gog the Mild (talk) 16:15, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Yes mate, sorry about the delay. Will get onto it tomorrow my time. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:05, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
 * G'day I reckon we could be done here. Sorry about the extensive delays, the end of the year was hectic. Peacemaker67  (click to talk to me) 22:58, 23 December 2022 (UTC)

Hog Farm Talk 20:33, 26 December 2022 (UTC)